Black Moons

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This is a loop sonnet!

I never wrote a loop poem before, but Roy Pett's poem invited me to try one:

http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/the_walk_loop_poetry_849422

Black moons on water, deep mirrors of dark Dark glass where wine whirls in vortexes wild Wild overfall sucking in seaweed and fish Fish drowning in the madness of my inner child Stay with me, wave demons away from my soul Soul, anima mea, my fears of the night Night is the time where my demons run free Free me, please save me, bring me to light Black moons on dark trees where owls sit and stare Stare at me with round deep black haunted eyes Eyes are the windows of tormented self Self hate my monster to beat undisguised One day I will see only sun in the sky Sky, autumn breeze, I spread my wings... and fly *** January 3, 2017

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Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 4/6/2017 11:47:00 AM

You do soar Darren. As your avatar would suggest, not in the way most would guess, but in your medium your grace and depth is unsurpassed. Gorgeous penetratingly honest write. xomo

Darren White
Date: 4/6/2017 12:26:00 PM

Too honest sometimes perhaps, thank you mo :)

John Fleming

Date: 1/4/2017 2:08:00 PM

Great poem, Darren! Thought-provoking and intriguing...Really enjoyed the read! All the best for your New Year - Cheers! :) john

Darren White
Date: 1/4/2017 2:33:00 PM

Thank you so much, John. All the best wishes for 2017 for you too :)

Doug Vinson

Date: 1/4/2017 2:33:00 AM

Quite a ride, Darren. : )

Darren White
Date: 1/4/2017 2:40:00 AM

Hey Doug :) Yeah, it's a pretty accurate description of my nightly travels :)

White Wolf

Date: 1/3/2017 10:33:00 PM

You are a very talented poet, Darren. I thought sonnets were hard enough, but a loop! Works really well too.

Darren White
Date: 1/3/2017 11:40:00 PM

Hi :) I don't know about the talented, but I do like this loop-form, and yeah I agree. It works really well with a sonnet.

Roy Pett

Date: 1/3/2017 3:53:00 PM

Absolutely brilliant Darren, this is excellent, two difficult forms of poetry composed with perfection, this is definitely going into my favourites.

Darren White
Date: 1/3/2017 8:28:00 PM

Oww, THANK you, I am honoured that you liked it and faved it :)