Darren White Poet Sonnet

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This is a loop sonnet!

I never wrote a loop poem before, but Roy Pett's poem invited me to try one:

http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/the_walk_loop_poetry_849422

Black Moons

Black moons on water, deep mirrors of dark
Dark glass where wine whirls in vortexes wild
Wild overfall sucking in seaweed and fish 
Fish drowning in the madness of my inner child

Stay with me, wave demons away from my soul
Soul,  anima mea, my fears of the night
Night is the time where my demons run free
Free me, please save me, bring me to light

Black moons on dark trees where owls sit and stare
Stare at me with round deep black haunted eyes 
Eyes are the windows of tormented self
Self hate my monster to beat undisguised

     One day I will see only sun in the sky
     Sky, autumn breeze, I spread my wings... and fly

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January 3, 2017

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Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart April 6, 2017 at 11:47 AM You do soar Darren. As your avatar would suggest, not in the way most would guess, but in your medium your grace and depth is unsurpassed. Gorgeous penetratingly honest write. xomo Darren White April 6, 2017 at 12:26 PM Too honest sometimes perhaps, thank you mo :)

John Fleming January 4, 2017 at 2:08 PM Great poem, Darren! Thought-provoking and intriguing...Really enjoyed the read! All the best for your New Year - Cheers! :) john Darren White January 4, 2017 at 2:33 PM Thank you so much, John. All the best wishes for 2017 for you too :)

Doug Vinson January 4, 2017 at 2:33 AM Quite a ride, Darren. : ) Darren White January 4, 2017 at 2:40 AM Hey Doug :) Yeah, it's a pretty accurate description of my nightly travels :)

White Wolf January 3, 2017 at 10:33 PM You are a very talented poet, Darren. I thought sonnets were hard enough, but a loop! Works really well too. Darren White January 3, 2017 at 11:40 PM Hi :) I don't know about the talented, but I do like this loop-form, and yeah I agree. It works really well with a sonnet.

Roy Pett January 3, 2017 at 3:53 PM Absolutely brilliant Darren, this is excellent, two difficult forms of poetry composed with perfection, this is definitely going into my favourites. Darren White January 3, 2017 at 8:28 PM Oww, THANK you, I am honoured that you liked it and faved it :)

Jan Allison January 3, 2017 at 11:53 AM I've never tried this form before Darren - a great loop sonnet:-) hugs Jan xx Darren White January 3, 2017 at 12:05 PM I liked it too Jan, was hard figuring out which words I wanted to loop :)

Chris Green January 3, 2017 at 11:51 AM This was great Darren. I have never tried one of these before and after reading your amazing piece, I may leave it to you and the professionals. :) Darren White January 3, 2017 at 12:04 PM Thank you Chris, I liked it very much for a first attempt, but it needs a lot of practise. I like these sort of challenges :)

Claudia Polydoro January 3, 2017 at 10:37 AM Wow! Loved how you used the last words of each line again on the next... Loved to read it! Darren White January 3, 2017 at 11:17 AM Thank you, it was only a first attempt :)