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Black and White 3- Emotive Write

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First pub Then club Drinks wine Feels fine Cheap drinks She thinks Short skirts She flirts All night Drinks spiked Goes back His flat Her fate Date rape Off guard Hit hard Black eyes Bruised thighs Looks frail Skin pale White face Sad case She’s found On ground Night plight! 50 words 50 syllables checked with how many syllables Contest United colours Black and White. Sponsor Silent one Image 3 –wherever your muse takes you 03~06~16

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/15/2016 11:18:00 AM

Jan, so creative... Congratulations on your awesome Black and White united theme win. Love LINDA

Jan Allison
Date: 3/17/2016 3:32:00 PM

Many thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx

Caycay Jennings

Date: 3/11/2016 9:47:00 AM

I am so impressed that you pulled off 2 syllable lines and a complete telling, a thorough story with emotional impact. Now, that's a writer. So well done - congrats on your well-deserved placement ... CayCay

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2016 3:19:00 PM

Thanks CayCay I was worried i had thought too out of the box for the theme so was delighted to place so well:-0 hugs Jan xx

Sathya Babu

Date: 3/11/2016 8:34:00 AM

Loved reading this.......very nice write. Many congratulations on your WIN.......

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2016 3:19:00 PM

Thanks so much Sathya:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 3/11/2016 6:15:00 AM

A great emotive write. Truly it's a sad case. But I congratulate you for your different idea:):) you deserve the win:)

Joanna Daniel
Date: 3/12/2016 5:49:00 AM

In art, nothing is too much out of the box:) hugs to you too.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2016 3:20:00 PM

Thanks Jo I wasn't sure if I had thought too much out of the box for the theme and was delighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 3/11/2016 2:33:00 AM

Brilliant take Jan.. congrats on top podium with lovely rhyming words.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2016 3:20:00 PM

Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/10/2016 9:13:00 PM

These were excellent, Jan! I never would have thought of using footles, but it worked to your advantage. You really pushed the boundaries of the picture ... and I think that's the goal when basing poems off of photos. Reaching out to something different.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2016 3:18:00 PM

Thanks Timothy - I love writing a string of footles to tell a story - so sad this is a reality for some victims of this terrible crime:-( hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 3/10/2016 7:13:00 PM

Congrats on your top win, Jan :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2016 3:16:00 PM

Thanks so much Laura:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 3/10/2016 6:37:00 PM

Jan, this is awesome and congratulations on your first place win, amazing ~

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2016 3:16:00 PM

Thanks so much Broken Wings I was delighted to place so highly:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 3/10/2016 5:05:00 PM

Back to congratulate you on your 1st place win way to go girl :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 5:16:00 PM

Thanks Eve I'm absolutely delighted to place so well as I wasn't sure if my theme was too out of the box so I'm really pleased to get a top spot:-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven

Date: 3/10/2016 4:42:00 PM

Hi Jan, Congratulations on your first place win in the contest, richly deserved for this right. The write makes me angry, very angry that anyone would treat a woman so. You have made the write real. A seven from me Jan. Hugs....MIKE. XX

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 4:47:00 PM

Sadly it is all too real for some people Mike and the figures they quote in the press are probably a lot higher as many women never report these cases of abuse - I am delighted to place so well and hopefully get the message across to more people:-) hugs Jan xx

Brian Davey

Date: 3/10/2016 3:37:00 PM

Congratulations Jan, well deserved

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 3:58:00 PM

Many thanks Brian:-) hugs Jan xx

Janice Canerdy

Date: 3/10/2016 1:35:00 PM

Congratulations on your well-deserved win with this very relevant poem! Janice

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 3:58:00 PM

Many thanks Janice it is an emotive write and I am dleighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/10/2016 1:05:00 PM

Wow Jan, this is awesome. I bet you are excellent at footles, though they are humorous and there is nothing humorous in the abuse in this excellent poem. Congratulations on your deserved first placement! #7

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 4:00:00 PM

Many thanks Connie - I have been called the Queen of Footles I do enjoy writing this form and the requirements of the contest with the rhyme and syllable count seemed very suitable I'm delighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Sam Jameson

Date: 3/10/2016 12:56:00 PM

Congratulations, Jan. The words and rhythm really deliver the message with some power..nicely done!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 4:01:00 PM

Many thanks Sam:-) hugs Jan xx

Anindya Mohan Tagore

Date: 3/10/2016 11:44:00 AM

Night plight... very profound... Kudos. Very well deserved top spot. Hugs, Bobby

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 4:01:00 PM

Many thanks Bobby:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 3/10/2016 11:30:00 AM

Well done, Jan, and congrats.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 4:01:00 PM

thanks so much Lin:-) hugs Jan xx

Sarita Milliner

Date: 3/10/2016 10:45:00 AM

Congratulations on a great win!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 4:02:00 PM

Many thanks Sarita:-) hugs Jan xx

Anisha Dutta

Date: 3/10/2016 10:16:00 AM

Congrats JAN to wn on top Love. Anusha D

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 4:03:00 PM

Many thanks Anisha:-) hugs Jan xx

Winged Warrior

Date: 3/10/2016 9:52:00 AM

Congrats Jan...well deserved...^WW^

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 4:04:00 PM

Many thanks ^WW^:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 3/10/2016 9:18:00 AM

Jan, well deserved, congratulations

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 3:57:00 PM

thanks so much Charlie I am delighted to have placed so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 3/10/2016 9:15:00 AM

Jan congrats on your top placement in the black and white contest. Very good poem with this awesome form -luloo*smiles*

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 3:57:00 PM

thanks so much Lolooo I am delighted to have placed so well i thought my take on the theme may have been a little too much out of the box:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/10/2016 8:49:00 AM

Back to congratulate you on your First Place win, Jan! Well done. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 3:56:00 PM

Aww thanks so much Sandra I am delighted to have placed so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Carlene Simpson

Date: 3/10/2016 8:39:00 AM

Love this one JAN, its going in my fav. poems.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 3:56:00 PM

Aww thanks so much Carlene I am delighted to have placed so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 3/8/2016 2:19:00 PM

This is very good, Jan; where it not for the end line I would have thought it was made up of footles. I can't keep up with some contests...they get filled quick and get judged quick! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 3:54:00 PM

Thanks Paul - I love writing footles and thought the requirement of the contest of needing rhyming and 2 words per line suited the footle form . i am surprised and delighted to place so well i thought my interpretation of the theme may have been a little too 'out of the box' :-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/10/2016 11:58:00 AM

Congratulations on placing first, Jan!! Well done! hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/7/2016 3:25:00 PM

you did a really good job of thinking outside the box. She is the worst kind of black and white!!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/7/2016 5:18:00 PM

Thanks Andrea - i have to go where my muse takes me:-( hugs Jan xx