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On sunny days I’ll take a walk If lucky I’ll espy a hawk I find delight in azure sky The seagulls are all flying high I’ll wander all along the coast It is the place I love the most A flapping wing will catch my eye The seagulls are all flying high On sandwiches I like to munch I sit down for a picnic lunch My sandwiches the birdies spy The seagulls are all flying high The birdies squawk and down they swoop My hair gets splattered with white poop They steal my lunch, and off they fly The seagulls are all flying high N/A in Try A New Style - Something You Have Never Or Hardly Ever Tried Poetry Contest I HAVE NEVER WRITTEN A KYRIELLE BEFORE 06/05/20

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Aditi Mishra

Date: 7/7/2020 1:49:00 PM

I've never written a Kyrielle before Jan! I admire your efforts to attempt this form with such natural flow of imagery and humor. This is brilliant! Congratulations on your win :) Much love!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 7/7/2020 1:08:00 PM

I love your kyrielle, Jan...the beautiful imagery and fun lines weaved through. Reminds me of being at the beach when I was a little girl and a seagull swooped down out of nowhere stealing my brother's hotdog right out of the bun. Boy did he cry! I had to walk back to the pier to get him another one. Thanks for bringing back the memory and congrats on the win. Blessings, Rhonda xx

John Hamilton

Date: 7/6/2020 1:52:00 PM

Nice write Jan, congrats on placing this time 'round!

Arturo Michael

Date: 6/9/2020 2:58:00 PM

You have such control of your words...I admire that...there beauty and power in your pen...Nice write

Jan Allison
Date: 6/10/2020 7:05:00 AM

thanks Arturo I do appreciate your supportful comments:-) hugs Jan xx

Maurice Rigoler

Date: 6/8/2020 11:37:00 AM

Written from experience, no doubt? I've had the same since I live almost on the ocean. Nasty birds those seagulls are / they'll eat fresh road kill viscera / and bits of food thrown from a car / Even their own kind when it's a need / when by traffic squashed they didn't heed such is the seagull's appetite and greed. Love your poem's easy read. Maurice

Sandra Adams

Date: 6/6/2020 10:29:00 PM

love this... being I visit the beach often and know this scene you speak of, minus the white splatter... often they are already walking the beach going between people looking for food to steal...I have watched them steal a bag off someone's blanket and run off... they do fly on the boardwalk and swoop down and steal pizza and French fries... wonderful write... enjoyed reading it :) hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 6/7/2020 3:16:00 PM

There is a local cafe where they have notes on the table not to leave food .. but people don't take any notice and the gulls swoop and steal food. just LOVE your latest for Craig's contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 6/6/2020 8:34:00 PM

They say getting hit with bird poop is good luck. Poops away for a win in the contest! ;), xomo

Jan Allison
Date: 6/7/2020 3:15:00 PM

thanks Mo:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 6/6/2020 3:01:00 PM

you've done very well with a new-for-you style, jan! i enjoyed and give you credit for trying out a new format (something i'm not really up for doing...)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/6/2020 4:54:00 PM

your rhyming style with its beautiful flow is just wonderful Ilene you have no need to change my friend:-) hugs jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 6/6/2020 2:43:00 PM

Krikey! Well done for a first go! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 6/6/2020 4:53:00 PM

thanks Rico it was fun:-) hugs Jan xx

Lisle Ryder

Date: 6/6/2020 1:56:00 PM

And Jan, your kyrielle takes me right to the coast I miss.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/6/2020 4:53:00 PM

I live on a little Island and we can be plagued by these birds dive bombing when food is around:-( hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/6/2020 5:49:00 AM

They can be quite aggressive when they are hungry and see they can steal your food. The poo part you really need to wear a hat! I enjoyed your first Kyrielle Jan. You did great! I think it will be on her winner's list! Blessings xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 6/6/2020 4:50:00 PM

Thanks Connie it was fun to try a new form:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/6/2020 1:44:00 AM

They can fool you when they fly above. Cute, but, but, gosh they are so annoying. Believe it or not, I've been splattered on. Eww... I use to love feeding them on purpose, I too love getting on people's nerves. LoL. A pleasure to read. Linda

Jan Allison
Date: 6/6/2020 4:50:00 PM

lol Linda I love your spirit your tale certainly made me smile, hope all is well with you and the family. I am SO SO glad you are back:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 6/5/2020 7:36:00 PM

Like the gulls in your chosen photo, you're spreading your wings and flying over a new form. It's a good write, Jan, and I'm sure it's been noticed that you wrote a kyrielle and still stayed true to your poopy writes.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/6/2020 2:00:00 PM

you know me I couldn't resist a bit of poop lol but it is apt with the poem subject!:-)

Eve Roper

Date: 6/5/2020 7:29:00 PM

lovely write, Jan, those seagulls are pesky . Good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 6/6/2020 2:00:00 PM

they certainly can be a menace!-) hugs Jan xx

Ann Gilmour

Date: 6/5/2020 5:58:00 PM

I love this Jan, so well written and I can certainly relate to those pesky seagulls... they practically steal the food from out of your mouth down here, haha. I have not heard of this form before, good luck in the contest Jan, with kindest thoughts Ann xx

Jan Allison
Date: 6/5/2020 6:24:00 PM

they are such a pest Ann, this has never happened to me but it just flowed so well with the theme:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/5/2020 5:50:00 PM

hey, that was awesome for your first one. Geeez, I have done so many forms. How will I find one to try? hahaha. GREAT job, Jan. I adore this form, by the way.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/5/2020 6:21:00 PM

Thanks Andrea it was a fun challenge to write:-) hugs Jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 6/5/2020 5:07:00 PM

An excellent poem for your first attempt at a Kyrielle, Jan. Those pesky seagulls can be bothersome at time. Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, John

Jan Allison
Date: 6/5/2020 5:18:00 PM

thanks John it was quite fun to write - have never experienced being attacked by them for food but years ago one pooped and messed on hat lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Jcb Brul

Date: 6/5/2020 4:35:00 PM

This is cute! I vividly see what you see..very relaxing piece! well-writ. Goodluck for the win.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/5/2020 4:50:00 PM

thanks JCB:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/5/2020 3:30:00 PM

- ... yes, seagulls are greedy :))) ... they don't care ... where the poop lands :))) -Everything is ok ... lately carpenters have finished the house inside ... everything turned on its head ... phu ...tired ... very tired ... - Luck in the contest and have a lovely weekend, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 6/5/2020 4:22:00 PM

- Much easier to breathe :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/5/2020 4:00:00 PM

I am so happy for you Anne Lise - a total fresh start with a wonderful new house I know you will both be so happy my friend:-) hugs Jan xx