Jan Allison Poet Kyrielle

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Bird's Eye View

On sunny days I’ll take a walk
If lucky I’ll espy a hawk
I find delight in azure sky
The seagulls are all flying high

I’ll wander all along the coast
It is the place I love the most
A flapping wing will catch my eye
The seagulls are all flying high

On sandwiches I like to munch
I sit down for a picnic lunch
My sandwiches the birdies spy
The seagulls are all flying high

The birdies squawk and down they swoop
My hair gets splattered with white poop
They steal my lunch, and off they fly
The seagulls are all flying high

N/A in Try A New Style - Something You Have Never Or Hardly Ever Tried Poetry Contest

I HAVE NEVER WRITTEN A KYRIELLE BEFORE 

06/05/20

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Aditi Mishra July 7, 2020 at 1:49 PM I've never written a Kyrielle before Jan! I admire your efforts to attempt this form with such natural flow of imagery and humor. This is brilliant! Congratulations on your win :) Much love!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders July 7, 2020 at 1:08 PM I love your kyrielle, Jan...the beautiful imagery and fun lines weaved through. Reminds me of being at the beach when I was a little girl and a seagull swooped down out of nowhere stealing my brother's hotdog right out of the bun. Boy did he cry! I had to walk back to the pier to get him another one. Thanks for bringing back the memory and congrats on the win. Blessings, Rhonda xx

John Hamilton July 6, 2020 at 1:52 PM Nice write Jan, congrats on placing this time 'round!

Arturo Michael June 9, 2020 at 2:58 PM You have such control of your words...I admire that...there beauty and power in your pen...Nice write Jan Allison June 10, 2020 at 7:05 AM thanks Arturo I do appreciate your supportful comments:-) hugs Jan xx

Maurice Rigoler June 8, 2020 at 11:37 AM Written from experience, no doubt? I've had the same since I live almost on the ocean. Nasty birds those seagulls are / they'll eat fresh road kill viscera / and bits of food thrown from a car / Even their own kind when it's a need / when by traffic squashed they didn't heed such is the seagull's appetite and greed. Love your poem's easy read. Maurice

Sandra Adams June 6, 2020 at 10:29 PM love this... being I visit the beach often and know this scene you speak of, minus the white splatter... often they are already walking the beach going between people looking for food to steal...I have watched them steal a bag off someone's blanket and run off... they do fly on the boardwalk and swoop down and steal pizza and French fries... wonderful write... enjoyed reading it :) hugs Jan Allison June 7, 2020 at 3:16 PM There is a local cafe where they have notes on the table not to leave food .. but people don't take any notice and the gulls swoop and steal food. just LOVE your latest for Craig's contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart June 6, 2020 at 8:34 PM They say getting hit with bird poop is good luck. Poops away for a win in the contest! ;), xomo Jan Allison June 7, 2020 at 3:15 PM thanks Mo:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer June 6, 2020 at 3:01 PM you've done very well with a new-for-you style, jan! i enjoyed and give you credit for trying out a new format (something i'm not really up for doing...) Jan Allison June 6, 2020 at 4:54 PM your rhyming style with its beautiful flow is just wonderful Ilene you have no need to change my friend:-) hugs jan xx

Rico Leffanta June 6, 2020 at 2:43 PM Krikey! Well done for a first go! Aloha! Rico Jan Allison June 6, 2020 at 4:53 PM thanks Rico it was fun:-) hugs Jan xx

Lisle Ryder June 6, 2020 at 1:56 PM And Jan, your kyrielle takes me right to the coast I miss. Jan Allison June 6, 2020 at 4:53 PM I live on a little Island and we can be plagued by these birds dive bombing when food is around:-( hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong June 6, 2020 at 5:49 AM They can be quite aggressive when they are hungry and see they can steal your food. The poo part you really need to wear a hat! I enjoyed your first Kyrielle Jan. You did great! I think it will be on her winner's list! Blessings xxoo Jan Allison June 6, 2020 at 4:50 PM Thanks Connie it was fun to try a new form:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A June 6, 2020 at 1:44 AM They can fool you when they fly above. Cute, but, but, gosh they are so annoying. Believe it or not, I've been splattered on. Eww... I use to love feeding them on purpose, I too love getting on people's nerves. LoL. A pleasure to read. Linda Jan Allison June 6, 2020 at 4:50 PM lol Linda I love your spirit your tale certainly made me smile, hope all is well with you and the family. I am SO SO glad you are back:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane June 5, 2020 at 7:36 PM Like the gulls in your chosen photo, you're spreading your wings and flying over a new form. It's a good write, Jan, and I'm sure it's been noticed that you wrote a kyrielle and still stayed true to your poopy writes. Jan Allison June 6, 2020 at 2:00 PM you know me I couldn't resist a bit of poop lol but it is apt with the poem subject!:-)

Eve Roper June 5, 2020 at 7:29 PM lovely write, Jan, those seagulls are pesky . Good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve Jan Allison June 6, 2020 at 2:00 PM they certainly can be a menace!-) hugs Jan xx

Ann Gilmour June 5, 2020 at 5:58 PM I love this Jan, so well written and I can certainly relate to those pesky seagulls... they practically steal the food from out of your mouth down here, haha. I have not heard of this form before, good luck in the contest Jan, with kindest thoughts Ann xx Jan Allison June 5, 2020 at 6:24 PM they are such a pest Ann, this has never happened to me but it just flowed so well with the theme:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich June 5, 2020 at 5:50 PM hey, that was awesome for your first one. Geeez, I have done so many forms. How will I find one to try? hahaha. GREAT job, Jan. I adore this form, by the way. Jan Allison June 5, 2020 at 6:21 PM Thanks Andrea it was a fun challenge to write:-) hugs Jan xx

John Gondolf June 5, 2020 at 5:07 PM An excellent poem for your first attempt at a Kyrielle, Jan. Those pesky seagulls can be bothersome at time. Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, John Jan Allison June 5, 2020 at 5:18 PM thanks John it was quite fun to write - have never experienced being attacked by them for food but years ago one pooped and messed on hat lol:-) hugs Jan xx

JC Brul June 5, 2020 at 4:35 PM This is cute! I vividly see what you see..very relaxing piece! well-writ. Goodluck for the win. Jan Allison June 5, 2020 at 4:50 PM thanks JCB:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen June 5, 2020 at 3:30 PM - ... yes, seagulls are greedy :))) ... they don't care ... where the poop lands :))) -Everything is ok ... lately carpenters have finished the house inside ... everything turned on its head ... phu ...tired ... very tired ... - Luck in the contest and have a lovely weekend, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Anne-Lise Andresen June 5, 2020 at 4:22 PM - Much easier to breathe :) Jan Allison June 5, 2020 at 4:00 PM I am so happy for you Anne Lise - a total fresh start with a wonderful new house I know you will both be so happy my friend:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Green June 5, 2020 at 3:29 PM This one soars my friend. Nicely done. Best wishes in the contest Jan Allison June 5, 2020 at 3:58 PM thanks for the sweet comment so lovely to see you back Chris:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham June 5, 2020 at 3:24 PM Moral of the story, always carry a brolly lol. Good luck Tom Jan Allison June 5, 2020 at 3:57 PM lol Tom its one thing NOT to have on the Island as it is often very windy:-) hugs Jan xx