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Betrothed O! Love! My Love! Witholdeth not thine heart! What guile be this upon thy pit'ous lot? Beknownst this day my father--King--didst start, Not I, but he! What grief o'ercomes! Fie! Plot! O! Love, love. My Love! Thyself beauty's rose This night mine armour hies anon--thy thrall To findeth: Thou whom holds mine heart--exposed-- An' carry thee unto yon castle hall. I am ensnared, entangled full with thee! Both moon an' stars--they coveteth thy light. O! Love, love. My Love! Ere fixed be Thy mark! Thou--alone--my constant, delight. Aye! Me! Fret not my love! Thy Kiss awaits... Betrothed are we--my queen--thus...'tis thy fate. Deborah Burch©4/21/2012 English/Shakespearian sonnet Using Old English dialogue *Often, if Shakespeare wished to draw attention to certain areas or lines in his work he would leave a syllable out...thereby 9 instead of 10 syllables in the line...or variations...riddles and mysteries.... :)

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Date: 12/9/2016 2:48:00 AM
This really is Shakespearean, not only in the form with the Iambic Pentameter, but also the choice of words. If ever I wanted to ask you about elision, here's my answer :D... All that aside: I LOVE it. If he and you were painters, your painting could easily be painted by Shakespeare.
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Deborah Burch
Date: 12/9/2016 3:00:00 AM
Lol. I thought you would like it. It's one of my fav. Thank you. Hugggs.
Date: 11/22/2016 8:51:00 AM
TAKE A BOW FOR SUCH DEPTH AND CREATIVITY IN SONNETEERING MY FRIEND. ADDED TO MY FAV LIST. A true pleasure to read this morn..
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Deborah Burch
Date: 11/30/2016 8:39:00 PM
Thank you Robert!! Very much!! Big hugs. Deb
Date: 2/10/2013 6:26:00 PM
GRIN such a romantic! Fie Miss Scarlett...Congrad's on your win! Light & Love
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Date: 2/8/2013 5:21:00 PM
deborah, it's been a while since I read your poetry. this is wonderful and I love that you mentioned the thing about Shakespere. Because I hate when people insist on exactly ten syllables per line. I counted a few of his sonnets with even 11 or 12 syllables in some of the lines. How are you doing anyway? Well, congrats on your win. hope you will stop and see me sometime.
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Date: 2/7/2013 2:19:00 PM
love your winning poem*SKAT
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Date: 2/7/2013 12:29:00 PM
- BRAVO!!! - FIRST PLACE IN CONTEST-CONGRATULATION - A poem that really deserved its "gold price" - - Love it my friend! - Have a nice afternoon. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/7/2013 10:33:00 AM
Wow!...Congratulations Ms Doreen Birchtree!...This is a sonnet? Honest??...and a very well done sonnet too...hast thou done studied Shakespeare in thy by-gone days?... Alas, I must take my leave fairest maiden...I bid thee fairwell - Tyson
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Date: 2/7/2013 10:06:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Debs xx
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Date: 2/7/2013 9:02:00 AM
This is just lovely...I'm really getting into some of this old english...who knew ?? I disliked it so when I was in school... Congrats on your win !!
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Date: 2/6/2013 9:23:00 PM
Deborah.. :-) congratulations on your well deserved winning poem. Have yourself a good night* always & forever. P.D.
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Date: 4/23/2012 7:37:00 AM
Truly an awesome write! Enjoyed the read! Lori
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Deborah Burch
Date: 4/27/2012 10:21:00 PM
Thank you Lori very much! love,deb :)
Date: 4/22/2012 9:19:00 AM
beautiful sonnet, my friend - a sure winner here
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Deborah Burch
Date: 4/22/2012 9:30:00 AM
Thank you Jack so very much my friend! :)
Date: 4/22/2012 7:43:00 AM
ooh good one, well done debs love it - and thanks for you great comments xx
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Deborah Burch
Date: 4/22/2012 9:32:00 AM
:) Thanks ~GG~ Always a pleasure my dear!! big hugs,love deb

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