Deborah Burch Poet Sonnet

Betrothed

Betrothed


O! Love! My Love! Witholdeth not thine heart!
What guile be this upon thy pit'ous lot?
Beknownst this day my father--King--didst start,
Not I, but he! What grief o'ercomes! Fie! Plot!

O! Love, love. My Love! Thyself beauty's rose
This night mine armour hies anon--thy thrall
To findeth: Thou whom holds mine heart--exposed--
An' carry thee unto yon castle hall.

I am ensnared, entangled full with thee!
Both moon an' stars--they coveteth thy light.
O! Love, love. My Love! Ere fixed be
Thy mark! Thou--alone--my constant, delight.

Aye! Me! Fret not my love! Thy Kiss awaits...
Betrothed are we--my queen--thus...'tis thy fate.


Deborah Burch©4/21/2012



English/Shakespearian sonnet
Using Old English dialogue 


*Often, if Shakespeare wished to draw attention to certain areas or lines in his work he would leave a syllable out...thereby 9 instead of 10 syllables in the line...or variations...riddles and mysteries.... :)

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Darren White December 9, 2016 at 2:48 AM This really is Shakespearean, not only in the form with the Iambic Pentameter, but also the choice of words. If ever I wanted to ask you about elision, here's my answer :D... All that aside: I LOVE it. If he and you were painters, your painting could easily be painted by Shakespeare. Deborah Burch December 9, 2016 at 3:00 AM Lol. I thought you would like it. It's one of my fav. Thank you. Hugggs.

Robert Lindley November 22, 2016 at 8:51 AM TAKE A BOW FOR SUCH DEPTH AND CREATIVITY IN SONNETEERING MY FRIEND. ADDED TO MY FAV LIST. A true pleasure to read this morn.. Deborah Burch November 30, 2016 at 8:39 PM Thank you Robert!! Very much!! Big hugs. Deb

Debbie Guzzi February 10, 2013 at 6:26 PM GRIN such a romantic! Fie Miss Scarlett...Congrad's on your win! Light & Love

Andrea Dietrich February 8, 2013 at 5:21 PM deborah, it's been a while since I read your poetry. this is wonderful and I love that you mentioned the thing about Shakespere. Because I hate when people insist on exactly ten syllables per line. I counted a few of his sonnets with even 11 or 12 syllables in some of the lines. How are you doing anyway? Well, congrats on your win. hope you will stop and see me sometime.

Skat A February 7, 2013 at 2:19 PM love your winning poem*SKAT

Anne-Lise Andresen February 7, 2013 at 12:29 PM - BRAVO!!! - FIRST PLACE IN CONTEST-CONGRATULATION - A poem that really deserved its "gold price" - - Love it my friend! - Have a nice afternoon. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Tim Ryerson February 7, 2013 at 10:33 AM Wow!...Congratulations Ms Doreen Birchtree!...This is a sonnet? Honest??...and a very well done sonnet too...hast thou done studied Shakespeare in thy by-gone days?... Alas, I must take my leave fairest maiden...I bid thee fairwell - Tyson

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl February 7, 2013 at 10:06 AM Congratulations on your win Debs xx

Debra Squyres February 7, 2013 at 9:02 AM This is just lovely...I'm really getting into some of this old english...who knew ?? I disliked it so when I was in school... Congrats on your win !!

Poet Destroyer A February 6, 2013 at 9:23 PM Deborah.. :-) congratulations on your well deserved winning poem. Have yourself a good night* always & forever. P.D.

Lori Lucas Mcclure April 23, 2012 at 7:37 AM Truly an awesome write! Enjoyed the read! Lori Deborah Burch April 27, 2012 at 10:21 PM Thank you Lori very much! love,deb :)

Jack Horne April 22, 2012 at 9:19 AM beautiful sonnet, my friend - a sure winner here Deborah Burch April 22, 2012 at 9:30 AM Thank you Jack so very much my friend! :)

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl April 22, 2012 at 7:43 AM ooh good one, well done debs love it - and thanks for you great comments xx Deborah Burch April 22, 2012 at 9:32 AM :) Thanks ~GG~ Always a pleasure my dear!! big hugs,love deb