Betrayed

Woman weeping wondering why Distraught she is betrayed Faithless fellow flirtation foiled Much to his dismay. Revulsion, Retribution, Revenge Feelings so abhorrent to her life Lying, Licentious lecher Has disillusioned faithful wife Adoring , Absolute adoration The sun shone from his eyes How hard he has hit her With his philandering and lies. Beast , Betrayer , Bastard The thoughts she has of him now Pathetic perpetrator pleading Desperate to escape the row. Marvellous marriage muddied Her heart broken and in pain Wonderful woman, Wronged ex wife Vows never to weep again.

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Jan Allison

Date: 4/26/2014 3:00:00 PM

Such an intense emotional poem Darren I love the alliteration - well deserved winner. hugs Jan x

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 3/3/2014 4:51:00 PM

Congratulation, Darren, on your win and on your piece. Weeping lasts for the night, joy comes in the morning when she moves on. A dazzling write,

Darren Watson
Date: 3/4/2014 1:06:00 AM

Thank you the morning did arrive eventually but there were a lot of dark nights before the dawn came .

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/3/2014 8:23:00 AM

Thought provoking write on betrayal. Congrats on the win, darren

Darren Watson
Date: 3/4/2014 1:03:00 AM

Thank you . Your comments mean a great deal to me .

Monterey Sirak

Date: 3/3/2014 7:56:00 AM

Congrats on your win. You brought the feelings of betrayal to vivid life with this one.

Darren Watson
Date: 3/3/2014 8:21:00 AM

Thank you Just being allowed to be part of the contest was reward enough , There are so many great writers on here as you know.

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 3/3/2014 7:34:00 AM

Congrats on the win Darren .A great one is this.

Darren Watson
Date: 3/3/2014 8:14:00 AM

Thank you it is always nice to get a mention but I'm not kidding myself , I have seen how many wonderful poets there are on here . I have a long way to go to catch them up but I intend using them to inspire me to become better .

Kim Van Breda

Date: 2/17/2014 8:51:00 AM

Excellent write. I love the way you have used alliteration in this to emphasize the destruction this can bring to a marriage. Thanks for sharing xx

Darren Watson
Date: 2/17/2014 9:26:00 AM

Thank you Kym I know my mother tried to get my sister to forgive but my sister couldn't forget and for her , If she couldn't forget , She couldn't forgive.

Herzel Poshiwa

Date: 2/14/2014 4:31:00 AM

deep true poem that expresses every hurt of a woman. But Im also thankful for those are just fragments that will have us learn how to love deeper.......I enjoy reading your poetry.

Darren Watson
Date: 2/14/2014 6:27:00 AM

The poem was based on the hurt I saw my sister going through , I'm delighted to tell you she is married again now to a very gentle man and they love each other to pieces.