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Betrayal of Blossoms

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Some days poetry flows sometimes it is just words. In the final spring - a poet yearned for an immaculate blossom, for his fingertips to bring a painting into life - to meticulously cultivate and craft a masterpiece. I recall an opal oasis full of pearl petals, glittering with rows of diamond orchids, citrine marigolds, moonstone lotuses, and garnet roses surrounded by amethyst lavender and sapphire bluebells. craving for his mastery. In a distant meadow, consumed with faithless flock grazing dead leaves - there you bloomed from bronze roots, an enchanting flower held by an emerald sepal. In your flattery, he became a willing devotee, seduced by the scent of your paradisiacal petals. But in your admiration he neglected his selfless blooms, unaware of wicked weeds wandering in eidolic fields. At sunset he would mirror the stars and follow you like fireflies at midnight, Serenade you with mystical lullabies, evoking a sense of serenity, but in the deception of dawn you prioritised the sun, over his soothing moonlight, so you wilted, withering, dripping in dewdrops. In your servitude, he placed you in the greenhouse of his heart, to protect you from the arrival of autumn, but gaslighting gardeners, sliced all of his intimate stems, allowing satanic rain to poison your spirit. In the darkness, which dilates his eyes, the pain still penetrates like a bitter blade and he has become a forgotten gardener, with dead seeds of scepticism sowed into his soul.

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Date: 5/6/2025 10:20:00 AM
Deep, deep emotion- truth, in those lines, compassion
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Date: 5/6/2025 9:54:00 AM
SO, this seems to be about devotion and the pitfalls associated with it. It's interesting to think about how all that is good can (if taken to far) lead to all kinds of bad. How hard it is indeed to be aware of everything around us and especially if we are in awe of something or someone. We should try to keep our wits about us. Smiles!!
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Date: 4/28/2025 10:02:00 AM
This is a powerful poem and so well penned. Have a blessed day. love phyl
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Date: 4/14/2025 11:45:00 PM
Hello SO, this is a brilliant write. Heartfelt, sincere and very touching. Loved it. Stay Blessed and have an amazing day my friend.
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Date: 4/12/2025 10:26:00 PM
beautiful, powerfully penned - great last stanza
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Date: 4/6/2025 7:05:00 PM
ya know dear poet, they don't allow me to write many Werdz in comments, if any at all it states because i'm not a paid member. i'll pen mine accolades for your impressive write here this way....I acknowledge Jehovah God Almighty "Created it all"...and he cauze'd; "rule"...I think that He left (save His Inspired Words) the writing to I, and I mean you too dear poet...I gotta read your other one which lug'd mine see ;)
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Date: 4/3/2025 12:31:00 PM
Time to pull out the weeds. Love is not dead or a misdeed. Its spring and time to reseed. You know why? You are alive. And the ocean currents bring you scents of mysticism and hints of more miss adventures and miss deeds you have not met. And one of them will help whet your wick for life. And set you afire again. We need to hear you blaze on. It sets the rest of us off. Don't you know?
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Date: 4/2/2025 8:35:00 PM
What a beautiful write. The way that you use words itches my poetic brain. I love your analogies, your darker phrases, and the paradoxes created. WOW.
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Date: 4/2/2025 5:05:00 PM
Oh my gosh, you tingle frosted all my poetic parts, especially the last, 2nd to last and 3rd to last stanzas which I FELT as outstanding. The imagery, whoa - just wonderful. Got goosebumps. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 4/1/2025 6:37:00 PM
Dear, S.O., Through the prism of a poet's connection with a muse, your poem skillfully expresses the dichotomy of inspiration and disappointment in the creative process. It draws attention to the conflict between romanticized ideals of beauty and the sad truths of deterioration and neglect in relationships and creative pursuits. The poem makes use of analogies including flowers and gemstones to paint a picture of exquisite craftsmanship and vibrant imagery. The use of words like "serenity," "wicked weeds," "gaslighting gardeners," and "immaculate" evokes feelings of awe and desire, but "seriously," "enchanting," and "meticulously" provide a darker tone, juxtaposing the initial beauty with themes of devastation and hopelessness.
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Date: 3/31/2025 10:36:00 PM
Dear S1,your poem,is truly beautiful. The way you describe the garden with all those gemstone-like flowers creates such a vivid and magical scene. I felt transported into that world.Your portrayal of the poet's journey, his devotion, and the challenges he faces is deeply touching. It really made me reflect on the balance between caring for others and oneself. You will never become a forgotten gardener .Your talent shines through every line. Keep writing and narrating—your words have a special way of resonating...Hugs
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Date: 3/31/2025 9:34:00 PM
ahhh, bitter this pain of abandonment that i wonder if slightly back-and-blue poetry were your personal thumbprint...that being said, your busyness makes you a better bard? devastatingly lovely, S
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Date: 3/30/2025 9:15:00 PM
This poem is marked with deep longing and melancholy. The disappointment over thwarted love is palpable from every line. "At sunset he would mirror the stars and follow you like fireflies at midnight, Serenade you with mystical lullabies, evoking a sense of serenity, but in the deception of dawn you prioritised the sun, over his soothing moonlight",.... Lines that are so touching.... lines flowing from the heart of one who suffers from the pangs of betrayal in love. Amazing diction, beautiful metaphors and striking alliteration.
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Date: 3/30/2025 9:35:00 AM
What a wonderful write you have here. So True, "Some days poetry flows sometimes it is just words." The gardener may have been forgotten but the writer Never will be. Happy Spring Blessings To You As You Write Away.........
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Date: 3/30/2025 6:34:00 AM
Dear silent one, as it is eid for me i am not on here but just wanted to comment on your poem which is woven with such sumptuous metaphors and brilliant diction that emanates the betrayal of blossoms in such eloquence, theres a pinch of melancholy and pain and the bleeding truth of a heart that has been gaslit! Too many gaslighters too many betrayals, life is as such and one can only dream of a field that is fair and would prioritise the moon that phases as constellations too change their spark! Exquisite use of gems and flowers and symbolism! And your use of alliterations always is poetically pleasing! Well written and delivered and the flow of your lines truly is seamless! One worthy of all the accolades! Pleasure reading you today! Sending you light today and always
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Date: 3/30/2025 5:27:00 AM
Gotta love the gaslighting gardeners line. Following her like fireflies? Awesome too. You've got a way with free verse, for sure
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Date: 3/30/2025 3:39:00 AM
Wow, intense! I love the opening lines of "some days poetry flows sometimes it is just words." and "at sunset he would mirror the stars and follow you like fireflies at midnight". Beautiful and full of yearning and melancholy.
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