Beehave

Two bees, speed date on the phone One’s a queen, and me I’m a drone Her hive’s empty, she’s feeling alone Ask’s me over, to make some clones I went buzzing, in the twilight zone My stinger’s pointed, so well honed When I arrived, she lay there prone A hornet had ripped her to the bone I took over, put my ex on the throne Life’s a honeypot, I will never atone Bee Creative Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Matt Caliri 20/06/22

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Karen Jones

Date: 7/24/2022 5:54:00 PM

Congrats this was fun to read

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/25/2022 12:13:00 AM

Thank you Karen, nature is both cruel and funny, when we try personify and understand it, a bit like ourselves, cheers David

Terry Flood

Date: 7/19/2022 3:30:00 PM

Honestly; the filth and smut we now get on Soup… LOVE IT! Ha ha… congrats on your win, David. Keep it up… (ooh er, missus)

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/25/2022 12:09:00 AM

Thanks Terry, it’s the clones I’m more concerned about, what sort of example I’m setting for them, cheers David

Terry Miller

Date: 7/19/2022 2:43:00 AM

Congratulations, super creative and witty

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/19/2022 4:21:00 AM

Thank you Terry, I’m delighted it turned out well, once I got the idea together seemed like a monorhyme might work it best, cheers David

Karam Misra

Date: 7/18/2022 11:58:00 PM

Congratulations on your stellar placement. Loved the whimsical drama.

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/19/2022 1:05:00 AM

Thank you Karam, I had great fun and a little pain figuring this one out in monorhyme, but I’m delighted it paid off in the end, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 7/18/2022 7:21:00 PM

Congratulations David on your win! It's a stingy one. I love all your bee jokes!

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/19/2022 1:02:00 AM

Thank you Anaya, it’s full of innuendo and allusion, with perhaps a little plausibility to the human psyche, (Jokes indeed) cheers David

Greg Gaul

Date: 7/18/2022 6:02:00 AM

David, such a bad boy. But you do know how to "beehave". Congrats.

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/18/2022 8:27:00 AM

Thank you Greg, I certainly do have some bad boy Beehaviour issues, ah to bee human, hey that’s not right! Cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 7/17/2022 6:43:00 PM

Congratulations on your top win, David. Such a great poem with creativity, humor, and rhyme. Blessings dear friend.

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/18/2022 12:41:00 AM

Thank you Lasaad, for seeing through my intentions here, I’m delighted with the win, cheers David

John Lawless

Date: 7/17/2022 3:48:00 PM

I'll have the "behiveurist" look into this issue. Nice job David, well done

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/18/2022 12:39:00 AM

Well, I think they’ll find, all’s in order, natural order is always restored, cannot be silenced or denied, cheers David

Ann Peck

Date: 7/17/2022 3:22:00 PM

HaHa! Really clever! Gary's right ~ sounds like nature, and perhaps some humans. Congratulations!

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/18/2022 12:35:00 AM

Heya Ann, most definitely a human fable using bee’s to compliment the hijinks, cheers David

Gary Radice

Date: 7/17/2022 1:52:00 PM

Funny, cruel and real. Just like nature itself. Great work David. Congratulations. Cheers - Gary

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/18/2022 12:31:00 AM

Just like nature indeed Gary, when a void comes along it’s filled pretty quick, in my case quite literally no time to grieve, cheers David

Paulette Calasibetta

Date: 7/17/2022 12:44:00 PM

Congratulations on your 1st place win in the contest....delightful! :)Paulette

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/17/2022 1:10:00 PM

Thank you Paulette, I’m totally delighted myself, wasn’t expecting the win so a big welcome surprise, cheers David

Jenna Logan

Date: 7/17/2022 11:25:00 AM

I'm BEEing busy, buzzing around with congrats for your win!

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/17/2022 1:08:00 PM

Thank you so much Jenna, you always liked this one, me too is buzzing now, after a museless week or so, hopefully this win will inspire me to write soon, cheers David

Matt Caliri

Date: 7/17/2022 10:42:00 AM

Congrats on 1rst place in my contest out of 55 entries!!! What a feat! I thought yours was a nice mix of humor and rhyme, with a very original twist. There was also a level of naughtiness I appreciated.

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/17/2022 1:05:00 PM

Thank you Matt, you just gave me the lift I needed I’m museless at the moment, but totally delighted to get top spot in your contest, I totally enjoyed putting this one together, cheers David

Timothy Ray

Date: 6/20/2022 1:25:00 PM

very imaginative and clever....an X on the throne is a tad scary...but i suspect you a rapscallion so nothing surprises me....LOL...let her sleep in peace with one eye open...great poem

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/20/2022 1:49:00 PM

Heya Timothy, thank you for stopping by, a rapscallion indeed I am, I thought nobody would have noticed my ulterior motive for putting an X on the throne, was there ever even a hornet, lol, cheers David

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/20/2022 8:03:00 AM

Taking advantage of a bad situation, how often we see that in real life. Good luck David. Tom

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/20/2022 8:37:00 AM

All too often Tom, but hey we learned from inglorious nature, snooze you lose, lol Cheers David

Jeff Connelly

Date: 6/20/2022 7:16:00 AM

Jajaja David!!! Another, as ALWAYS, brilliant poem. (And my prediction: Another contest winner.) Thanks for the smile this morning...

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/20/2022 8:33:00 AM

Heya Jeff you have more faith in me than me do in I, contests are always a peculiar beast to assess, so glad you enjoyed my poem, cheers David

Jenna Logan

Date: 6/20/2022 7:13:00 AM

Well, that certainly was a case of taking advantage of a golden opportunity. A honeypot situation. Fun read, David.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/20/2022 10:12:00 AM

Aw-shucks!

Jenna Logan
Date: 6/20/2022 9:56:00 AM

:) I always have time to buzz you.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/20/2022 8:28:00 AM

Bee does what bee sees, nature is cruelly tasteful, thank you for buzzing by on your busy POTD day, cheers David