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Oh how I hate the winter where my limbs are exposed and seen I just adore the springtime; I wear my dress of emerald green Draping myself in lush foliage, not an inch of body you can see Until warm winds of autumn arrive and begin to undress me Then I start to shiver as my gown of golden leaves falls away Leaving me cold and naked until spring returns again one day Originally written on 08~22~15 N/A In personification contest finalised on 10/19/16 I worked so hard on my personification Then looked at the list with consternation Saw the sponsor gave it an N/A Perhaps he’d had a tough day …. I now look to Constance for mitigation! 11~11~16 5 Line rhyme for Broken Wings Take the dagger from my heart please 3 Contest

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John Lawless

Date: 12/8/2016 9:51:00 PM

Jan, terrific personification....I could see and feel the "goose bumps" on the tree limbs. Wonderful portrait of the naked lady.

Jan Allison
Date: 12/9/2016 11:37:00 AM

Thanks John I am really pleased with the way the personification turned out in this poem:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 12/8/2016 8:49:00 AM

Jan, CONGRATULATIONS on your win in my contest with this wonderful Personification poem, this is a favorite form of mine, and you did it beautifully, you captured the feelings of the tree and I like your images too. In Canada our birch trees wear gowns of white in the wintertime, well done ~

Jan Allison
Date: 12/8/2016 8:53:00 AM

Thanks so much Constance I am delighted to place so well in your contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe

Date: 12/7/2016 7:54:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Jan. I love beech trees; we don't have many in our area.

Jan Allison
Date: 12/8/2016 1:06:00 AM

They are very beautiful Agnes:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 12/7/2016 5:07:00 PM

This is so beautiful, Jan, colors of the seasons are wonderful. Congratulations on your win Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 12/7/2016 5:09:00 PM

Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Mark Martin

Date: 12/7/2016 3:22:00 PM

Love both poems! Congrats! :-)

Jan Allison
Date: 12/7/2016 3:23:00 PM

Thanks so much Mark:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White

Date: 12/7/2016 11:21:00 AM

And back atcha with congratulations :)

Jan Allison
Date: 12/7/2016 11:24:00 AM

cheers me dear:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White

Date: 12/3/2016 8:45:00 AM

Heh, I love your personification, I hope it gets recognised as a brilliant poem. Good Luck in the contest :)

Jan Allison
Date: 12/3/2016 9:23:00 AM

Thanks Darren:-) It did very well in the original contest then got an N/A in another:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 11/12/2016 7:37:00 AM

This is a very good example of personification, Jan. And yes, you did work hard on it:) Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 11/12/2016 9:51:00 AM

I'm really proud of the poem Paul :-) It did place in Charlotte's original contest last year - that was an accolade for me:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Hauser

Date: 11/11/2016 3:20:00 PM

This is really good! One I wish I'd thought of!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/11/2016 3:22:00 PM

Aww thanks Mike it is an old poem and I'm very fond of it:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/11/2016 2:20:00 PM

ohh jan, this is beautiful...it will do well at constance's, i bet!..huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 11/11/2016 2:32:00 PM

I hope so Nette I have learned so so much since I started writing I am very fond of this particular poem:-) hugs jan xx

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 11/11/2016 2:03:00 PM

I really liked this personification poem, Jan. It was smartly written w/a touch of wry humor. Forgive the pun, but it was a very personable poem. It was a great poem though. Hope you win, friend. Much love to you.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/11/2016 2:31:00 PM

Thanks Freddie I love the pun:-) lol. I did place with the poem in the original contest it was written for in 2015 but got an n/a in the personification contest:-) hugs jan xx

Duke Beaufort

Date: 11/11/2016 10:55:00 AM

We have a 100 year old cooper beech in our yard. Just yesterday, the leaves were coming down like rain. The colors are always miraculous and can be seen through many of our windows. It's a real gift and your poem reflects that. Since I am in NY, I expect I will be showing up at Trump Tower to protest in the near future. I decided to wait until he is in office before doing that because I don't want to seem unfair. I expect it will be bad, but we'll see. It will be satire rich times.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/11/2016 11:10:00 AM

Your tree sounds absolutely spectacular to see Duke... as for satire with Trump have a look at the limerick collaboration lol Please feel free to join in lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 11/11/2016 10:51:00 AM

Hi Jan, I'm with the others it was a good personification piece. It read as a winner to me. Great limerick as well. Good luck in BW's contest: -) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 11/11/2016 11:11:00 AM

Thanks Alexis:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 11/11/2016 9:20:00 AM

I think I was ostracized in that contest as well. Great lim at the end.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/11/2016 11:13:00 AM

Thanks Tim - I think it was a premiere contest so placements were limited :-) hugs Jan xx

White Wolf

Date: 11/11/2016 8:29:00 AM

That's a beauty, Jan. Good luck with this one.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/11/2016 8:29:00 AM

Thanks Rick:-) hugs Jan xx

Stephen Pennell

Date: 11/11/2016 8:20:00 AM

spot on as I look out the window few trees in the buff now stephen

Jan Allison
Date: 11/11/2016 8:29:00 AM

ha ha ha naked trees - shouldn't be allowed we need spring now!:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/11/2016 7:34:00 AM

- If I was just as clever as you, Jan .... this could be my poem .... I have the same feelings for the winter - a lovely poem - Best wishes in the contest and for a peaceful weekend :) - big warm hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 11/11/2016 7:49:00 AM

Thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Green

Date: 11/11/2016 6:29:00 AM

This was beautiful Jan. I love how you brought that tree to life by giving it a personality. I also love the way she looked at the seasons and how you used her leaves as clothing. This was really cool.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/11/2016 6:44:00 AM

Thanks Chris :-) the poem had placed in the original contest it was written for but didn't get placed in the personification contest:-) hugs jan xx