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Battling the Rust

“Ashes to ashes, dust to dust”
But nobody warned me of this rust

Swirling memories recall times I was robust
Aging brings aches; sometimes I've cussed

Tonics and pills might remove some of the crust
But I can’t even remember what it means to lust“



Entry for Brian's contest

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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 1/14/2012 12:04:00 PM

LOL Great Poem, Carolyn. A winner I am sure! You made me laugh...a much needed laugh, too. Big Smiles. Love to you!

Harry Horsman

Date: 12/31/2011 6:47:00 AM

This is so sad Carolyn, i almost can feel the pain behind your pen. a winner in the contest though. exceptional poem. harry

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 1/14/2012 12:06:00 PM

I took it totally differently, Harry. Maybe that is because I am rusting, too! lol Age (among other things that we sometimes must ignore) does that. I hope I wasn't too insensitive. Besides, I DO NOT believe the last line one bit! LOL (Just kidding, Carolyn. You know I love you. Big Smiles.)

Joe Maverick

Date: 12/28/2011 7:10:00 AM

Well You're certainly bringing memories to mind here Carolyn,, and all the best for the contest..)

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 12/27/2011 8:22:00 PM

Me either...lol...good one dear..I cant seem to get anything together for this one. BG

Russell Sivey

Date: 12/27/2011 4:03:00 PM

I thought this write was a wonderful piece of poetry! The flow is perfect and the rhyming is great! I understand what you mean by the rust! Yes and some of that is certainly in the aches and even pains! I love this poem! Awesome Work!!

Russell Sivey
Date: 12/27/2011 4:03:00 PM

Good luck in the contest!!