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Battling the Rust

“Ashes to ashes, dust to dust” But nobody warned me of this rust Swirling memories recall times I was robust Aging brings aches; sometimes I've cussed Tonics and pills might remove some of the crust But I can’t even remember what it means to lust
“ Entry for Brian's contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 1/14/2012 12:04:00 PM
LOL Great Poem, Carolyn. A winner I am sure! You made me laugh...a much needed laugh, too. Big Smiles. Love to you!
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Date: 12/31/2011 6:47:00 AM
This is so sad Carolyn, i almost can feel the pain behind your pen. a winner in the contest though. exceptional poem. harry
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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 1/14/2012 12:06:00 PM
I took it totally differently, Harry. Maybe that is because I am rusting, too! lol Age (among other things that we sometimes must ignore) does that. I hope I wasn't too insensitive. Besides, I DO NOT believe the last line one bit! LOL (Just kidding, Carolyn. You know I love you. Big Smiles.)
Date: 12/28/2011 7:10:00 AM
Well You're certainly bringing memories to mind here Carolyn,, and all the best for the contest..)
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Date: 12/27/2011 8:22:00 PM
Me either...lol...good one dear..I cant seem to get anything together for this one. BG
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Date: 12/27/2011 4:03:00 PM
I thought this write was a wonderful piece of poetry! The flow is perfect and the rhyming is great! I understand what you mean by the rust! Yes and some of that is certainly in the aches and even pains! I love this poem! Awesome Work!!
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Russell Sivey
Date: 12/27/2011 4:03:00 PM
Good luck in the contest!!
Date: 12/27/2011 3:40:00 PM
Ya gave me a little smile with this one. :o)
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Date: 12/27/2011 3:31:00 PM
Carolyn, this appears to be a great triple couplet for Rick's rust contest.
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