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Baitless Abeyance A man of some years with a face of little value, Had a raggedy satchel and a beat up tackle box, Both of which, were worth more than a face, It set next to an opened cooler exposed to sun, Therein, sat a jar with a punctured cover, 'Twas home for wiggling worms to keep, Several times when he had cast his line, Several times only minnows took his bait, Frustrated was he, he grabbed the cooler, And he went to the middle of the stream, Tied the cooler to him and took to his pole, Just ahead upstream he saw something leap, It appeared to be a very big largemouth bass, As it came closer, it leaped several more times, But suddenly, no more did he see of it, He had pondered the thought that it had passed, Then he saw underwater a dark shadow moving, It was coming directly towards him, unwavering, So he threw down his pole and grabbed the cooler, Opened it and dropped it into the stream, Then he heard splish and splash from the cooler, And quickly closed the lid and snapped its lock, He then grabbed the cooler, his pole and the rest, And off to the truck he went and as he went, He grinned to splish and splash sounds from within.
a big largemouth bass swims effortlessly downstream~~ free of its minnows
2019 June 03 *1st Place* Hey, Write a Happy Haibun ~~Caren Krutsinger

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Date: 8/2/2019 3:47:00 PM
A vivid haibun, William. Your story telling skills are captivating. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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Date: 8/17/2019 2:08:00 PM
Humbling words of encouragement, I should go back to writing stories--Hmm? ~ Aloha always William
Date: 8/2/2019 6:06:00 AM
I love this William, especially because I love bass fishing. Trout fishing is my specialty though. Great write! Congratulations my friend on your 1st place win. Charlie
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Date: 8/2/2019 2:23:00 PM
I think fried trout is best for me, thanks Charlie ~ William
Date: 8/1/2019 3:41:00 PM
A lively and fun write though I wouldn't want to be the poor fish. Congratulation, William!
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Date: 8/1/2019 5:40:00 PM
The bass survived and the minnows are open to interpretation, thanks Kim ~ William