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Bag of Spiders Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Matt Caliri  
Date written: 13th June 2023

The itsy bitsy spider went up the water spout. The loss, it had happened quite slowly at first; suddenly she had to be constantly nursed. He held her tremulous hand; blank eyes stared out. Down came the rain and washed the spider out. In a rare lucid moment, to him she said; "It feels like a bag of spiders in my head, they wriggle around inside, kick things about." Then out came the sun and dried up all the rain. "They leave cobwebs on things, so I cannot see what is this, what is that, and what they should be, they sting, fight, bite, and cause incredible pain." So the Itsy bitsy spider went up the spout again. He went, thinking everything he'd done was right; She left to stay, be alone again that night. Slowly, the bag of spiders made their refrain.

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Date: 6/30/2023 11:25:00 AM
Very original in taking a bag of spiders to the confusion in mind so many of us experience, particularly those with dementia. Top notch creativity. Congratulations! Brian
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Terry Miller
Date: 7/24/2023 2:27:00 AM
Thank you Brian.
Date: 6/17/2023 3:16:00 AM
Nice oneTerry, really liked this one with nice rhyme and flow. Hope smiths sunshine, it's getting clouded now North of the border. Have a great weekend, Gordon
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Terry Miller
Date: 6/20/2023 9:02:00 AM
Thank you, Gordon; we now have rain here too. I appreciate your visit and kind comments
Date: 6/14/2023 9:14:00 PM
So suggestive ! It gives the feeling of a bag of spiders wriggling all around. Really enjoyed reading your poem, Terry !
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Terry Miller
Date: 6/20/2023 9:00:00 AM
Thank you Valsa
Date: 6/14/2023 12:36:00 AM
Wow! This is mind blowing poetry, Terry, should be a winner:)
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Terry Miller
Date: 6/14/2023 1:12:00 AM
Thank you so much, Joanna; I enjoyed writing this one.
Date: 6/13/2023 3:09:00 PM
So good, Terry! Great write! A winner, I think!
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Terry Miller
Date: 6/14/2023 1:12:00 AM
Hi Kim, thanks for dropping by and for your kind comments.
Date: 6/13/2023 2:55:00 PM
what a unique take on the contest Terry! hugs jan xx
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Terry Miller
Date: 6/14/2023 1:13:00 AM
Thank you, Jan

Book: Shattered Sighs