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(Kimo & reverse Kimo)

Avoiding Chores for Poetry

Avoiding Chores for Poetry

Mom’s folding laundry as muse pinches me
sheets flapping with ink scolding
I get beat from both sides

unlined bedding is blessed
the future shakes out Mom’s frown
turns it upside down when she reads my best

strike while the iron is hot and frame it
give it to Mom in present
‘fore she passes away

covered with a clean sheet
no poem disturbs her rest
Mom never beat me with her busy hands
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Baker Avatar
April 15, 2024 at 4:14 PM
It seems I'm losing this battle, Kim. I'm having more and more challenges to finding time to write my poetry. I need about 3-4 more hours in each day. A creative write, my friend. I like it! Have a pleasant day. Hugs, Bill
Rodrigues Avatar
April 15, 2024 at 7:44 PM
Yes, the challenge is getting other things done…lol. Hugs ~ Kim
Fowler Avatar
April 11, 2024 at 8:45 AM
Interesting with the flip of the form. I like it! :)
Rodrigues Avatar
April 15, 2024 at 7:42 PM
Thank you, Linda! :)
Hind Avatar
April 9, 2024 at 5:15 PM
How unique, Kim- the metaphors using here are simply excellent. A privilege, hugs xx
Rodrigues Avatar
April 9, 2024 at 6:49 PM
Thank you! Hugs ~ Kim
Dietrich Avatar
April 9, 2024 at 12:54 PM
so interesting that you reversed it, Kim. I enjoyed your experimental poem
Rodrigues Avatar
April 9, 2024 at 1:11 PM
Thank you, Andrea!
Kendrick Avatar
April 9, 2024 at 7:51 AM
Yes, mom's are so busy with trying to get it all done there isn't time leftover for beatings. Abuse still happens though. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. I haven't gotten back in there to work on the poem yet. Sara K
Kendrick Avatar
April 9, 2024 at 2:16 PM
Okay, sorry for the misunderstanding. I was not thinking that you were getting beaten though. Thanks for the correction of my thoughts. Sara K
Rodrigues Avatar
April 9, 2024 at 8:54 AM
Thanks, Sara. The getting beat from both sides has to do with writing. From childhood chores to chores as adults, we fit in our writing. Mom’s hands were so soft and gentle.
Rodgers Avatar
April 9, 2024 at 6:40 AM
Dear Kim, You captured a tender moment amidst the mundane tasks of life. I loved the thought that laundry folding becomes a canvas for your creativity, with each line infused with emotion and reflection. Your words show the power of art to transcend the everyday and touch the hearts of those we love. Through your artistic poem, you honor your mother's presence and influence, blending her into the fabric of your verse. It's a beautiful tribute to the bond between parent and child and the enduring legacy of love. - Blessings, Daniel
Rodrigues Avatar
April 9, 2024 at 9:20 AM
Thank you, Daniel! I appreciate your kind thoughts.
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