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Autumnal Sponsored by: Sotto Poet

A tribute to my son's birthday on Oct 3rd

 

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Autumnal

Walk me through a continues path
No one, hath aroused of its sleep.
Let me bathe in the autumn's cool breath.
To a painted scene of green that slowly fades
From a perfect stage of spicy spices colors,
Leaving behind flickering flames upon the limbs.
As briskly leaves flutter like scattered butterflies,
Settle and snag among collaborating blades.
A graceful brown sugar amongst the ground
Relaxing to the ambiance of rain and sunshine
And golden ears harvest of the humble earth.
To perching mockingbirds charmed lullabies that quiver
A weft line staff and pinwheels round eternal skies.

Walk me through memories most distant 
And unforgotten cries of a newborn melting my soul. 


10/2/2023
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Kingston Avatar
November 8, 2023 at 8:37 PM
So many enjoy fall. It gives poets so much material to write about. Your imagery is truly lovely. I lived in Vermont for a while and it was breath taking just outside the door. I enjoy writing about this season as well. Your line that begins, A graceful brown sugar ..is wonderful !!!!! I would love to jump into your poem :)
Baker Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 9:43 PM
Congratulations on your contest win, Eve. This is a beautiful poem with lovely imagery. You included so many things of Autumn. It was a joy to read, my friend. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
Andresen Avatar
October 5, 2023 at 10:40 AM
- Bathe in colors .... with "graceful brown sugar amongst the ground" ... and really enjoy ... so beautiful, Eve :) - Congratulations on your win in the contest :) - hugs
Poet Avatar
October 5, 2023 at 10:04 AM
Dear Eve, congratulations on your win in my contest. This exquisite piece of poetry is a true feast for the senses, overflowing with an abundance of vivid and captivating imagery. Your mastery of language is evident in the flawless composition of this well-crafted poem. Within its verses, you skillfully portray the transitions with such intricate precision, I also like the voice version and the video.
Roper Avatar
October 5, 2023 at 10:29 AM
than you so much for my placement and the wonderful compliment. hugs eve
Goldsmith Avatar
October 5, 2023 at 8:15 AM
Congratulations on your win. A lovely write/picture. A great time of the year. Have a blessed day writing away....................
Greenhough Avatar
October 5, 2023 at 6:39 AM
Ahh, this was sweet. Happy birthday to your son. Poem was a gentle miracle
Buhagiar Avatar
October 4, 2023 at 4:32 AM
Oh how I loved reading your poem. There's lively imagery here, and colours. Also emotions are important. Hugs and blessings.
Gasun Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 8:15 PM
From a perfect stage of spicy spices colors, Leaving behind flickering flames upon the limbs. As briskly leaves flutter like scattered butterflies, Settle and snag among collaborating blades.....Wow! Exquisite beauty my dear poet friend Eve! I read this artistic/creative write many times to bask in the mesmerizing wonder of the season. Thank you so much for sharing. Best wishes always. Hugs
Roper Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 8:47 PM
Thank you, my friend, for the wonderful compliment. Hugs and blessings
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 6:57 PM
A fine tribute of elegant scenes that emanate shimmering ripples for all ages. The happiest birthday to a fortunate soul. Eve, you are blessed, my friend! Aloha William
Roper Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 8:48 PM
Thank you, William, for the wonderful compliment. Yes, my middle son turned 52. Time flies to fast. Hugs and blessings
Sharma  Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 7:02 AM
Awwn, this was such a heartwarming read and it brought a smile to my soul.. Your phraseology is so intriguing and creative here and the vivid layers of imagery here especially breathtaking.. I love so many lines here like "bathe in the autumn's cool breath.", "briskly leaves flutter like scattered butterflies", "graceful brown sugar amongst the ground" So enchanting and blissfully mesmeric.. I wish your son a very happy birthday and this is such a wonderful tribute.. Enjoyed reading this :)
Roper Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 8:48 PM
Thank you, Hiya, for the wonderful compliment. Hugs and blessings
Empress Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 3:34 AM
The way you paint imagery and flow your poems is beyond impeccable and so very captivating! I love the way you’ve started the poem and the serene rhythm of your words, especially loved “ as briskly leaves flutter like scattered butterflies,” wow! Thats creative and artistic! So good! I wish your son a very happy birthday too. Pleasure reading this soul warming autumnal poem
Roper Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 8:49 PM
Thank you, Ink, E., for the wonderful compliment. Hugs and blessings
Jones Avatar
October 2, 2023 at 8:39 PM
A beautiful birthday tribute.
Roper Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 8:49 PM
Thank you, Karen. Hugs and blessings
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