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Written for Ink Empress's Cinquain poetry contest.

The traditional cinquain is based on a syllable count.

line 1 - 2 syllables

line 2 - 4 syllables

line 3 - 6 syllables

line 4 - 8 syllables

line 5 - 2 syllables

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crumbling leaves drift with wind naked branches shiver crisp scarlet, gold carpet is laid onwards misty fog fills the air masking grey gloomy skies brisk breeze blows pinecones into puddles odours of faint wood smoke like an earthly perfume infuse dawn's dewdrops on iced fields ahead hungry blackbirds hover searching for sweet berries blanket of dark clouds cover sky home time!

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Lisa Ricci

Date: 12/8/2023 2:19:00 AM

Good Morning Silent. Hello. Yes, Autumn is wondrous. This is marvelous in execution imagery and expressions. I very much like the third stanza which I found most expressive but rest easy that this entry is solid in its entirety starting with the title to which you did not stray. It was a privilege turning to your page this morning. Thank you for sharing your skilled talent with us. Peace and Blessings always. (smile)

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 11/10/2023 3:36:00 AM

Wonderful poems! Lovely read! Have a great day ~ AA

Daisy Meadows

Date: 10/28/2023 9:59:00 AM

A clever Autumn poem and good description. Well done

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 10/19/2023 3:25:00 PM

Hello Silent One, I enjoyed the stroll in the forest. It made me feel like I was there. Enjoy your evening my friend. /Darlene\

Valsa George

Date: 10/18/2023 10:17:00 PM

Such beautiful string of cinquains.... every scene, so unique of Autumn....! "brisk breeze blows pinecones into puddles". I see this before me. So visual and so beautiful, dear Silent One !

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/17/2023 8:16:00 PM

Wonderful imagery. Love the last verse with the blackbirds and sweet berries.

Hilo Poet

Date: 10/17/2023 9:59:00 AM

Another mark of excellence, unsurprisingly, courses its way to you, Silent One. This Cinquain Form was accomplished effortlessly, my friend. My sincerest compliments and blessings on your placement! Aloha, William

Ink Empress

Date: 10/17/2023 4:42:00 AM

This is absolutely stunning! Who would have thought of using alliterations and painting imagery so seamlessly in an artistic manner, using the form cinquain besides you! I love how you’ve ended this and also the detailed descriptive lines throughout. From crumbling leaves drifting with the wind to, pinecones into puddles… as well as faint wood smoke, odor. So clever how your word touch all the senses of a reader in such eloquence! This is the best cinquain iv read ever in ages! Thank you for

Ink Empress
Date: 10/17/2023 4:43:00 AM

Writing! Congratulations on winning! Your way with words is like a breath of fresh air for my soul! I am sure all your readers will agree

Brandy Nicole

Date: 10/16/2023 7:42:00 PM

Colors collide in such a beautiful way, when you scribble beyond the shadows. You should allow your pen to dip into this side of poetry a lot more. My best to you, Silent One. ~ Brandy

Paige Hind

Date: 10/16/2023 3:58:00 PM

Very beautiful... I liked the rhyming of the last two lines!

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/16/2023 2:36:00 PM

You have flawlessly crafted a series of stunning autumn images, my friend. Your exceptional use of descriptive language brings your canvas to life, even within the limitations of syllable counts.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2023 10:12:00 AM

lots of cool autumn scenes you painted with your descriptive words. Well done

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/15/2023 4:09:00 PM

Very descriptive one about this time of year. I enjoyed reading it today. Thanks for sharing your creativity with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/15/2023 6:18:00 AM

Beautiful, linked autumn images--splendidly delivered my friend. Excellent descriptions paint your canvas despite the syllable constraints, SO.

Maria Williams

Date: 10/15/2023 4:37:00 AM

Beautifully presented Cinquain. Looks complicated . I'm not a poet who can get these things right, so I'll leave it up to you experts. Good luck in the contest . Hugs

Hiya Sharma

Date: 10/15/2023 4:35:00 AM

Woah, this cinquain poem took me on a journey which twirled with brisk autumnal essence whilst also waved at the upcoming iced winds.. Your wordplay is so poetically enriched, painting such vivid and breathtaking imageries.. "crisp scarlet, gold carpet is laid", " Branches shiver" Ahh, that's really impactful.. "masking grey gloomy skies", "brisk breeze blows pinecones into puddles" Love the alliterations there! "faint wood smoke", "earthly perfume" Woww, I'm mesmerized!"hungry blackbirds hover"

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/15/2023 4:36:00 AM

-They create an intriguing element in the poem, along the end.. With dark clouds covering the sky.. A really artistic and creative take for the contest and I'm sure, one of the top ones as well! I aways enjoy reading your poems :)

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 10/15/2023 2:39:00 AM

branches shiver crisp scarlet, gold carpet is laid onwards….masking grey gloomy skies brisk breeze blows pinecones ..ooo those imagery !!! blanket of dark clouds cover sky home time!!! Brilliant end to a brilliant piece brothaaaa