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Autumn Memories

across tree-lined yards
leaves dance in colorful frocks --
distant school bell chimes

through open windows
the scent of pumpkin spice drifts --
an orange moon rises 

under charcoal skies 
rain dampens mouldering leaves --
a lone snowflake falls


By Rhonda Johnson-Saunders, August 29, 2012
for Autumn Splendor Contest (Russell Sivey)

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Carol Sunshine Brown

September 20, 2012 at 9:56 AM

Congratulations on your very well deserved win in Russell's "Autumn Splendor" contest Rhonda. Love, Carol

Skat A

September 17, 2012 at 7:00 AM

RHONDA Congrats with your win~ SKAT

Andrea Dietrich

September 16, 2012 at 9:44 AM

One of my favorite haiku sets I have seen in a while here. Just love how you accented each month of the season thru haiku. A VERY well deserved and unique winning entry. Congrats, Rhonda.

Poet Destroyer A

September 15, 2012 at 11:39 PM

Once again Rhonda.. congratulations with your awesome imagery in Russell Sivey's " Autumn Splendor " beautiful contest. Always nice to support all contest when possible~ Good night :-* PD

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

September 15, 2012 at 9:05 PM

CONGRATS RHONDA ON A NOTHER GORGEOUS WRITE AND WIN LUV .. AWESOME WORDS ..

Cynthia Alvez

September 15, 2012 at 4:55 PM

Joyce, Autumn splendor indeed! A lovely verse! Congratulations on your 1st place win! Cynthia

Cynthia Alvez

September 15, 2012 at 5:00 PM

Rhonda, OOPs! My apologies, I called you Joyce...I seem to be moving too fast. My comment is just as sincere..."a rose by any name...!" I do truly love your verse! Cynthia...again Congratulations!

Joyce Johnson

September 15, 2012 at 1:41 PM

Autumn stretches from summer to winter and does her own thing in between. Nicely done. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

Cynthia Alvez

September 3, 2012 at 12:37 AM

All absolutely lovely! Cynthia

Andrea Dietrich

August 31, 2012 at 8:40 AM

wow, you went all out with your haiku. I only gave him one! That last one was my favorite, the foreshadowing of winter, and I loved the orange moon rising. Very haiku-ish!!!

Debbie Guzzi

August 30, 2012 at 7:26 PM

YES Rhonda now they are undeniably tradition haiku, now that does not mean you will win BUT see the meditative state your mind must be in to disregard the subjective, to not impose your opinion, to not color the readers mind..this learning will help you be a better writter in general. Help you have a calmer life for you understand the difference between OBJECTIVE & Subjective/ TELLING & SHOWING. Our opinions are not truths and fact..they are merelt our subjective opinions

Debbie Guzzi

August 30, 2012 at 7:26 PM

hey LOL now I have to compete against YOU..hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

Debbie Guzzi

August 30, 2012 at 4:23 PM

Ok Rhonda, what I am going to say doesn't apply to these small jewels as poems, or as entries for Russ, they are exquiste little verses perfect as they are in discription for both things. If we look at them as trying to be traditional haiku, the first line of each of the 3 RE-states a season,so, you have told us the season in both parts of the haiku. [in traditional haiku you would use a season word (1) in modern haiku you need not even use (1)] cont.

Debbie Guzzi

August 30, 2012 at 4:28 PM

take another pass at each of the line ones, what else was happening when the leaves fly in the air? what do you smell, what do you hear?/verse 2 you used scent so think? what else might you hear? what else might you see?/ verse 3 again a wonderful use of scent..what else is in the [frame] is a snowflake falling? the single line must connect and give MORE info a wee surprise

Debbie Guzzi

August 30, 2012 at 12:46 PM

Hey Rhonda IF you want haiku feed back let me know i will take a second pass, for now I will just let you know..we all know the fragment is the hardest part ;) Light & Love

Brenda Victoria Northeast

August 30, 2012 at 6:13 AM

Beautifully written and described- all the senses energized. love, bren- a winner in this one, Rhonda : )

Ronny Madonsela

August 30, 2012 at 6:04 AM

Indeed this write expresses all the essins of autumn, I left my mind drift to autumn season , as the southern hemispere is heating up for summer lol I it was very good ride you took me on got experience my fav season even though it was for a while. thank you