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Autumn Memories

across tree-lined yards leaves dance in colorful frocks -- distant school bell chimes through open windows the scent of pumpkin spice drifts -- an orange moon rises under charcoal skies rain dampens mouldering leaves -- a lone snowflake falls By Rhonda Johnson-Saunders, August 29, 2012 for Autumn Splendor Contest (Russell Sivey)

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Date: 9/20/2012 9:56:00 AM
Congratulations on your very well deserved win in Russell's "Autumn Splendor" contest Rhonda. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/17/2012 7:00:00 AM
RHONDA Congrats with your win~ SKAT
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Date: 9/16/2012 9:44:00 AM
One of my favorite haiku sets I have seen in a while here. Just love how you accented each month of the season thru haiku. A VERY well deserved and unique winning entry. Congrats, Rhonda.
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Date: 9/15/2012 11:39:00 PM
Once again Rhonda.. congratulations with your awesome imagery in Russell Sivey's " Autumn Splendor " beautiful contest. Always nice to support all contest when possible~ Good night :-* PD
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Date: 9/15/2012 9:05:00 PM
CONGRATS RHONDA ON A NOTHER GORGEOUS WRITE AND WIN LUV .. AWESOME WORDS ..
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Date: 9/15/2012 4:55:00 PM
Joyce, Autumn splendor indeed! A lovely verse! Congratulations on your 1st place win! Cynthia
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Cynthia Alvez
Date: 9/15/2012 5:00:00 PM
Rhonda, OOPs! My apologies, I called you Joyce...I seem to be moving too fast. My comment is just as sincere..."a rose by any name...!" I do truly love your verse! Cynthia...again Congratulations!
Date: 9/15/2012 1:41:00 PM
Autumn stretches from summer to winter and does her own thing in between. Nicely done. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 9/3/2012 12:37:00 AM
All absolutely lovely! Cynthia
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Date: 8/31/2012 8:40:00 AM
wow, you went all out with your haiku. I only gave him one! That last one was my favorite, the foreshadowing of winter, and I loved the orange moon rising. Very haiku-ish!!!
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Date: 8/30/2012 7:26:00 PM
YES Rhonda now they are undeniably tradition haiku, now that does not mean you will win BUT see the meditative state your mind must be in to disregard the subjective, to not impose your opinion, to not color the readers mind..this learning will help you be a better writter in general. Help you have a calmer life for you understand the difference between OBJECTIVE & Subjective/ TELLING & SHOWING. Our opinions are not truths and fact..they are merelt our subjective opinions
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 8/30/2012 7:26:00 PM
hey LOL now I have to compete against YOU..hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
Date: 8/30/2012 4:23:00 PM
Ok Rhonda, what I am going to say doesn't apply to these small jewels as poems, or as entries for Russ, they are exquiste little verses perfect as they are in discription for both things. If we look at them as trying to be traditional haiku, the first line of each of the 3 RE-states a season,so, you have told us the season in both parts of the haiku. [in traditional haiku you would use a season word (1) in modern haiku you need not even use (1)] cont.
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Date: 8/30/2012 4:28:00 PM
take another pass at each of the line ones, what else was happening when the leaves fly in the air? what do you smell, what do you hear?/verse 2 you used scent so think? what else might you hear? what else might you see?/ verse 3 again a wonderful use of scent..what else is in the [frame] is a snowflake falling? the single line must connect and give MORE info a wee surprise
Date: 8/30/2012 12:46:00 PM
Hey Rhonda IF you want haiku feed back let me know i will take a second pass, for now I will just let you know..we all know the fragment is the hardest part ;) Light & Love
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Date: 8/30/2012 6:13:00 AM
Beautifully written and described- all the senses energized. love, bren- a winner in this one, Rhonda : )
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Date: 8/30/2012 6:04:00 AM
Indeed this write expresses all the essins of autumn, I left my mind drift to autumn season , as the southern hemispere is heating up for summer lol I it was very good ride you took me on got experience my fav season even though it was for a while. thank you
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Date: 8/30/2012 1:06:00 AM
This one should do GREAT in the contest. It has it all!
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Date: 8/29/2012 11:46:00 PM
So descriptive, it placed vivid images of autumn days in my mind.
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