Autoum

orange, yellow, red fall is past tense already dead caught in suspense fall is past tense lingering still caught in suspense impact won't kill lingering still lazily falls impact won't kill circling, stalls lazily falls already dead circling, stalls orange, yellow, red ---------- for the Autumn Pantoum Poetry Contest sponsored by Caren Krutsinger written on 10/23/22

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Sotto Poet

Date: 10/24/2022 7:42:00 AM

Jeff, you've written a rather interesting pantoum here. The simple lines make it a very attractive design. Thanks for sharing your great work.

Jeff Kyser
Date: 10/24/2022 7:46:00 AM

So glad you enjoyed! I struggle with the re-use of the lines in a pantoum, so I thought, why not try some shorter phrasing? I sort of liked it as well

L Milton Hankins

Date: 10/23/2022 6:23:00 PM

This is really a cool pantoum, Jeff. The stark lines are really compelling. I feel like such a wordy person!

Jeff Kyser
Date: 10/23/2022 6:40:00 PM

Lol, I think I'm all worded out right now. BTW, saw your other poem with the strange health issue - if that's a real one, I hope they get it approved and diagnosed soon!