Jan Allison Poet Free verse

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At the Footbridge 2

With trembling fingers I’d opened the bloodstained envelope
But I shouldn’t have been surprised at the state of the paper …
you work as a butcher

Your message was short -
Meet me at the footbridge at midnight
I’ll bring the blue tartan blanket .. I have a surprise for you

My heart skipped a beat when I recall the last time we met
We had a moonlight feast then made mad passionate love
Our bodies rising and falling like the tide
Then came crashing back down to earth on the blue tartan blanket

I hastily gathered together some tasty treats for our picnic
then put on my white gypsy top with black ribbon lacing
which accentuated my curvaceous figure
You could feast your eyes on me whilst we dined!

Hurrying along the towpath; my black cloak swirled in the autumn breeze
I felt like red riding hood carrying my brown wicker basket

I could see you standing on the footbridge
Your huge frame silhouetted in the moonlight
You ran to greet me and your lips crushed into mine
Arm in arm we strolled to the shelter of the gnarled oak tree
I spread out the blanket, unpacked the picnic and we ate hungrily

You asked me to close my eyes …I smiled and waited for my surprise

Two days later a dismembered body was found
Lying on a blood soaked tartan blanket
24th August 2016

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Warren Dickman February 8, 2024 at 10:07 AM It's gruesome, but hopefully could wake up some foolish young women to the ever-present danger out there!

Arthur Vaso June 14, 2017 at 6:07 PM I came by to read this one again too!!! I love the dark ones! :) Jan Allison June 14, 2017 at 6:15 PM Thanks Arthur I do appreciate your continued support - the blog has caused a renewed interest in the collaboration poem and I am adding more poems to it as they come in:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. August 27, 2016 at 9:16 AM Hi Jan, I didn't know where you were going with this one. But I must say you had my full attention and the twist at the end was just brilliant. A without a doubt seven: -) Alexis Jan Allison June 14, 2017 at 7:40 AM Thanks Alexis sorry I've just seen your comment:-( hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso August 25, 2016 at 8:52 PM Wow, I am getting out stalked by Seren and Jan! I better stock up on some new poems!!! Great one Jan! Jan Allison August 25, 2016 at 8:58 PM ha ha ha I'm amazed Seren wrote such a dark stalker poem on the same day - we must be influenced by you lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts August 25, 2016 at 1:41 AM Lol Jan it's so funny we both did a second Stalker poem at same time . Great one my friend .... Seren Jan Allison August 25, 2016 at 1:42 AM It's because we know the same person lol - he's the link lol lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe August 25, 2016 at 12:24 AM Wow - fantastic write - you are certainly a great story teller - extremely vivid. Scary thoughts though. Mark Jan Allison August 25, 2016 at 1:11 AM Thanks Mark its a little bit of a change from my humourous writes!:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Schneiter August 24, 2016 at 6:43 PM Jan, Among the countless things at which you excel is creating a mood. Virtually every word in this masterful write has been chosen with that in mind. That is what makes the ending so shocking and so powerful. Magnificently done, Jan. hugs xxx Paul Jan Allison August 25, 2016 at 1:10 AM Thanks Paul - a little bit od a dark read for me but I have no control over my muse I never know what she will come up with next!:-) hugs Jan xx

Thomas Martin August 24, 2016 at 5:39 PM Hi Jan, So sorry not to be around lately but will always remember you as a special poetic friend and a mutual lover of islands! This one is wonderful, Jan, and the ending is quite a surprise! Take care. . . Tom Jan Allison August 24, 2016 at 5:42 PM So lovely to see you back Thomas - its a little dark and away from my usual humourous style but I had to go with the twist at the end ... I do worry about my muse some times! Hugs jan xx

Paul Callus August 24, 2016 at 4:55 PM What a contrast when compared to your Footbridge1, Jan! Entertained by the narrative and final twist. I am wondering whether any missing body parts were on sale in the meat shop!! ~ Hugs // paul Jan Allison August 24, 2016 at 5:02 PM ha ha ha Paul - yes it is a total contrast but I thought the title was worth using for this one too:-) I do worry about my muse as I have no idea where the inspiration for this poem came from lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Vincent Flannery August 24, 2016 at 4:46 PM Wow! That was a very well written piece and the ending was a total shocker. Great writing throughout. Look forward to reading part 1. Take care! Jan Allison August 24, 2016 at 4:53 PM Part one is a limerick I wrote and about 17 other poets added their lines - its a total contrast to this poem which is far from my usual humourous style:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith August 24, 2016 at 1:01 PM Reminds me of Jack the Ripper...excellent write Jan Jan Allison August 24, 2016 at 1:50 PM Thanks Tim:-) I have no idea where the idea came from and this is a pretty dark write for me but I have to go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith August 24, 2016 at 12:22 PM Must have been a dietary reaction of some sort. Her bad... Loved it! Jan Allison August 24, 2016 at 12:25 PM LOL Charlie - it's a little different to my usual humourous style, but I have to go with the flow of my muse and she wanted a twisted ending:-) hugs jan xx

Wendy Rycroft August 24, 2016 at 11:14 AM What a surprise at the end, I was shocked, very very captivating but that was the idea, did not expect that, can I not go back in time and warn her, could your next story be a time traveler, a beautiful handsome prince who saves her x Excellent x well written x Jan Allison August 24, 2016 at 11:27 AM Thanks Wendy - I have absolutely no idea what inspired this write I have no control over my muse - will see if the muse comes up with a sequel:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis August 24, 2016 at 10:46 AM Poor "curvaceous figure" it is no longer accentuated. What a pity for such a built up to have this tragic end! Fascinating and captivating story, enjoyed it a lot but the...conclusion! Great writing dear, Jan, or should I say...Agatha? A seven! Jan Allison August 24, 2016 at 11:28 AM LOL Demetrios I wanted the story to have a surprise ending and from the reaction in the comments I think I achieved my aim:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars August 24, 2016 at 10:42 AM Jan, this is a great sequel! :)-luloo Jan Allison August 24, 2016 at 11:29 AM The title is the only link lol:-) I don't know if my muse can come up with another tale even I am surprised at the ending of this one lol:-) hugs jan xx

Jean Murray August 24, 2016 at 9:04 AM Not a quell bonne surprise for you then Jan. Jan Allison August 24, 2016 at 9:14 AM Not at all Jean!:-) hugs jan xx

Lynn Marie August 24, 2016 at 8:34 AM This is fantastic Jan :-) A 'noir' poetic tale woven as expertly as the "brown wicker basket"...with great passion, mystery and your famous 'trademark' ..humour. A definite fave, 7+..A terrific read :-) blessings, lynn Jan Allison August 24, 2016 at 9:40 AM The dietitian said plain choc is ok as are most things in moderation ...and not to bother with 'diabetic' foods at all:-) hugs Jan xx Lynn Marie August 24, 2016 at 9:14 AM Ooh..I feel for him...there is diabetic chocolate..I will check here for quality ones :-) Jan Allison August 24, 2016 at 8:59 AM MMM maybe not he's now diabetic!:-( hugs Jan xx Lynn Marie August 24, 2016 at 8:54 AM ...lol oh well there is always chocolate :-) Jan Allison August 24, 2016 at 8:44 AM Thanks Lynn - I read it to hubby over the phone I think he was all for dashing home until the ending lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Barry Stebbings August 24, 2016 at 8:21 AM Very dark but funny, Jan, lol. Barry Jan Allison August 24, 2016 at 8:25 AM Thanks Barry - It just a LITTLE bit different to my normal style lol but I have to go with the flow of my muse:-) hugs Jan xx