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At St Anthon Garden

We walk alone, towards the sight
There are the fragrant roses bright,
Bees sip nectar, queen kisses drone.
Towards the sight, we walk alone.

In our old age, we hail flowers.
Grown tall after the last showers:
Tulips and bluebells are the rage.
We hail flowers, in our old age.

See the great pond, with insects bright,
As dragonflies fly, what a sight.
Making love for they have a bond.
With insects bright, see the great pond.

In the large pool, swans glide along,
Some cygnets follow growing strong,
Best for them not to play the fool.
Swans glide along, in the large pool.

The small bell rings, it's closing time.
Back home, rickety stairs we climb.
Happy for now we feel like kings.
It's closing time, the small bell rings.
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Dietrich Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 9:36 PM
So nice, Victor. A relaxing lovely day. Congrats
Fowler Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 7:50 AM
Nicely swaped quatrain Victor. ;) You paint a lovely picture. :)
Edmonds  Avatar
June 13, 2024 at 1:37 AM
A wonderful Swap Quatrain, the poetry form isn’t easy, well done to you… Beryl
Hind Avatar
June 11, 2024 at 3:16 PM
Lovely poetry- the rhyme and flow were so beautiful- wise with age
Roper Avatar
June 11, 2024 at 3:11 PM
Love the imagery and the feel in your poem. Just a stunning garden. Hugs my friend
Anaya Avatar
June 11, 2024 at 2:05 PM
June days and nights are filled with such beauty and sightseeing, ponds, pools, waterways. Great swap poem Victor bol~
Andresen Avatar
June 11, 2024 at 12:51 AM
- A beautiful picture, to be enjoyed with your words, Victor :) - hugs
Proxenos Avatar
June 10, 2024 at 12:48 PM
This is bound to do well in the contest - you and your romantic writes are just splendid Victor, keep writing them with your gifted talented and your gifted pen. Blessings, and hugs, Jennifer.
Nicholsen Avatar
June 10, 2024 at 12:29 AM
This is simply beautiful such a lovely write I adore the gardens as well I’ve always been so fond of flowers watching insects and hummingbirds feast on the nectar wonderful write Victor many blessings.
One Avatar
June 9, 2024 at 10:23 AM
Wonderful poetic storytelling and imagery here ...
Seeker Avatar
June 9, 2024 at 3:32 AM
Superb swap quatrain ~ if it is for the contest, all the best, it should do well
Williams Avatar
June 9, 2024 at 3:17 AM
Isn't Nature the best. I love visiting gardens in every country we have visited. I especially loved the Rose Gardens in Osaka Japan. Quite spectacular. Your gardens sound just as incredible. You have described them most poetically and beautifully dear Victor...Hugs
Greenhough Avatar
June 8, 2024 at 9:39 PM
You've taken the reader on a journey to a garden, but with a happy return home. An everyday moment becomes a golden occurrence in the style of this poem. Joie de vivre.
Buehler Avatar
June 8, 2024 at 6:31 PM
It is wonderful to recollect days like this when we grow old, Victor. Your words captured the magic of a beautiful, romantic day very well. Best wishes for the contest.
Rodgers Avatar
June 8, 2024 at 5:32 PM
Hello Victor, your words transported me to nature's wonders - wher roses are fragrant, bees are sipping nectar, and dragonflies are bonding. I think your poem has exquisite imagery showing us of the simple joys awaiting us in life's twilight. Blessings, Daniel
Babbit Avatar
June 8, 2024 at 5:06 PM
Beautiful imagery.
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
June 8, 2024 at 12:50 PM
Beautiful, Victor, it draws the reader inwardly as Andrea kept it short. I'd written a swap liken to Joseph's version but they told me Andrea wanted a 8 syllable and not Joseph's 10 syllable, so I ended up with two quatrains both swap but different styles. My stairs are fine, I'm the rickety one, Aloha, William
Fernandez-Garcia Avatar
June 8, 2024 at 11:35 AM
It sounds lovely St. Anthon garden. Lots to see and admire there for you to have that good inspiration to write it down. Beautiful and delicate piece, Victor. Blessings!
Rodrigues Avatar
June 8, 2024 at 8:39 AM
Lovely! Hugs ~ Kim
Kendrick Avatar
June 8, 2024 at 8:08 AM
Ahh!! So nice to go to a public garden that one does not have to tend. They are usually so well kept. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K
Poet Avatar
June 8, 2024 at 8:04 AM
A serene composition, wonderful in its spareness, enriched with your vivid images and analogies. Victor, your thoughts are passionate and sentimental on every level. Good luck in the contest.
George Avatar
June 8, 2024 at 7:27 AM
Lovely piece and well crafted. When that time comes, nature holds us still. We live in the beauty of them and feel in their purity. Cheers Victor.
Empress Avatar
June 8, 2024 at 5:55 AM
Wow this is absolutely stunning and so philosophically wise and deeply meaningful! I think this is one of my new faves from you! So well written and so well articulated in a very creative and poetic manner! So artistic! Well delivered dear victor! I see through your words, so picturesque! Fave it is
Onclaud Avatar
June 8, 2024 at 3:33 AM
Sentimental at all levels with expressive lines, Victor... I can't join contests; how???
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