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As You Were Sleeping

The clouds are torn down they're hers as they mist where pillow seeps; where dark, no woman sleeps for she's knotted a cruel twist in female sheets — secret fingers long where short the dreams Eyes nestle a phantom or a tree — shut closet, my innermost girl has me wafting above her keep — asleep

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Sotto Poet

Date: 6/8/2025 6:58:00 PM

The night is vividly described in this beautiful poem, which has vivid imagery, Paige.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/5/2025 9:35:00 AM

I see your eyes opening and shutting as dreams take hold

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/4/2025 12:46:00 PM

- A restless night of dreams... great written, Paige :) - hugs

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 6/4/2025 5:44:00 AM

Dear Paige, It is like a half-remembered dream that is so haunting, intimate, and beautifully unresolved. Your imagery is both delicate and raw, filled with the secret twists and phantom longings that visit us in sleep. Very evocative piece. Poetry can cradle our innermost selves, even as we drift above the world. Spring Blessings, My Dear Paige, Daniel

Sam Kauffman

Date: 6/3/2025 2:26:00 PM

Everything takes on a new meaning in the dark, Paige. You have wonderfully expressed that experience with your unique images. Thank you for sharing this poem. Enjoyed! Blessings.

Lin Lane

Date: 6/3/2025 12:11:00 PM

Sleep could only be restless in such turmoil, Paige. Tears as mist from clouds... sadness lingers.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/3/2025 5:25:00 AM

A wonderful poem, great imagery and a wonderful description of night.

Ink Empress

Date: 6/3/2025 3:15:00 AM

Sometimes i see the clouds the same way, and the night sky as youv described, how evocative and heartfelt are your lines! And i love how you use nature and create metaphors and express in such original and unique ways! Pleasure reading your poem today! Sending you light always

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/2/2025 11:17:00 PM

To me it sounds like a woman haunted by her past. Great atmosphere especially at the end

I Am Anaya

Date: 6/2/2025 5:37:00 PM

whilst she sleeps others come as clouds above in astonishment i presume and of skeletons in the closet perhaps, many have many don't we tho? ~ enjoyable read, Paige!