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As You Sleep

There is a certain quiet in watching you sleep That’s not unlike the flow Of observing a river's movement, As it slowly bends its way down Past morass and ferns on the coast To somewhere new and heretofore unknown-- The current, steady rhytmn of your breath Circles through an unconscious world, Bringing you respite from any troubled ridge And pulling you down to a route of dreams Where I like to feel you, Clear as a rippling water Gushing ever gently into me-- And how your eyes quiver , still Your heave bidding me closer Like the river beckons the thirsty to drink : Would that I could drink your calmness So you really did glide through me Quench me And bestow on me your innate joy. --------------------------- Impact and Metaphors Contest of William Kekaula ~ spelling of 'unconscious' corrected... bad internet 9/27/2020

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Date: 10/3/2020 4:33:00 PM
Fluid words of gentle motion of silent love.
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Date: 10/3/2020 2:42:00 PM
Pleasantly absorbing, Nette, an entrancing morning reading that truly welcomes the awaken, blessings on your honorable placement, Aloha! William
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Date: 9/28/2020 1:36:00 AM
A very romantic poem. I like the river metaphor. ~~
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Date: 9/27/2020 11:44:00 AM
Nicely done! Aloha! Rico
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Date: 9/27/2020 11:34:00 AM
Your flowing poem has had an impact on me, hope it does for the judges too. Sending you love and light, xo
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