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As Time Ticks Away

As time ticks away into twilight dusk Sun in fathomless waters will plummet The Earth will then wear an assassin’s mask This in endless succession shall repeat The grass in silken meadows will wither Trees clad in green livery will go bare Youth into infirmity will slither Body, through years of rugged use will wear Every beauteous form will lose its charm All to death’s stygian vault shall return Until then, lead life without any sham A good name is all you can strive to earn You are a dumb player in life’s pantomime Act your part well until you're merged in Time (10 syllables each in every line with a total of 140 syllables) Placed First in the Contest Sonnet's Salutation Poetry Contest Sponsor- William Kekaula

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Susan Ashley

Date: 1/2/2022 10:09:00 AM

Indeed, dear Valsa, your prophetic sonnet is a beauteous form that will not lose its charm. Beautifully expressed, especially your couplet. Congratulations for your fine win in William's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 12/9/2021 4:22:00 PM

Hello Valsa ...life is the ultimate gift. Too many lack its appreciation and many suffer for it - thanks for a fine sonnet Valsa - Lindsay

Valsa George
Date: 12/11/2021 4:16:00 AM

Yes, indeed life is a precious gift... We have an obligation and responsibility to make it as fruitful as possible . Thanks Lindsay! Stay blessed !

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 12/8/2021 6:32:00 PM

"You are a dumb player in life’s pantomime Act your part well until you're merged in Time" - what a strong message. Excellent sonnet, Valsa. Warm wishes ~ Mala

Valsa George
Date: 12/11/2021 4:13:00 AM

I am not at all experienced in writing sonnets. I am rather diffident to experiment with difficult poetic forms... Just made a trial and I am happy, you all liked my sonnet ! Thanks a lot Malabika for infusing confidence in me.

Bill Baker

Date: 12/8/2021 4:48:00 PM

Good sonnet Valsa, strong message and a good summary in last two lines. I liked it. Good luck in the contest. Your friend, Bill

Valsa George
Date: 12/8/2021 6:04:00 PM

Thanks a lot dear Bill ! Have a beautiful season ahead !

Debra L Brown

Date: 12/8/2021 3:19:00 PM

A beautiful Sonnet. Life is short, live it to the fullness. Good luck in the contest. Blessings ~ Debra

Valsa George
Date: 12/8/2021 6:03:00 PM

Thank you so much Debra for your lovely words of encouragement !

Rico Leffanta

Date: 12/8/2021 10:10:00 AM

Well said and done, but I have seen a remarkable number of French women in their 80s and 90s with flawless skin and smiles that put young girls to shame . . ..

Valsa George
Date: 12/8/2021 6:02:00 PM

Years cannot wither everyone. Some escape the vagaries of time. They are exceptional ! Thank you Rico

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/8/2021 7:27:00 AM

A wonderful sonnet, Valsa. There's a serious message and plenty of visual imagery. The quirks of time have us all scurrying to accomplish good actions. Life-affirming songs are often accurate—a piece of terrific advice.

Valsa George
Date: 12/8/2021 8:22:00 AM

Very glad for your uplifting comment, Lasaad. Feel humbled and encouraged. Thanks a lot !

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 12/8/2021 6:21:00 AM

Brilliant sonnet. So much imagery and a message we should heed. Best for a win, dear Valsa.

Valsa George
Date: 12/8/2021 8:20:00 AM

I am not used to writing sonnets. Glad my inexperienced writing is appreciated ! Thanks a lot Victor!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/8/2021 5:28:00 AM

Everyone takes a ride on vagaries of time, ---doing good deeds while we can. Much truth explored in these verses on life. Great advice my friend.

Valsa George
Date: 12/8/2021 8:18:00 AM

Thanks a lot dear Vijay !