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As The Last Petal Falls Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Sara Jama 03/03/2005

as the last petal falls

            as the last petal falls 

              daisy cutters boom
         the last petal falls to earth 
      ~ mushrooms take full bloom

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Karen Jones

April 1, 2025 at 7:31 PM

Love the imagery

David Kavanagh

April 2, 2025 at 5:35 AM

Thanks so much Karen, one of my better ones I thought, cheers David

Andrea Dietrich

March 9, 2025 at 2:35 PM

Oh wow. This is so clever. This contest got judged already, right? Did it win? If not. Enter in one of Brian's contests . Sometimes he recognizes a really great haiku.

David Kavanagh

March 9, 2025 at 2:46 PM

Thanks Andrea, unfortunately bottomed out in the contest lol! I don’t think Sara really wanted a haiku, but she was generous to me in her previous contest so can’t complain, I might just save this one for another go in a future contest if allowed, cheers David

Zyrool Gifford

March 5, 2025 at 12:18 PM

Hello David, this is a beautiful haiku. Reality at its best. One falls and another rises. Have a wonderful day, my friend.

David Kavanagh

March 5, 2025 at 3:01 PM

Thank you Zyrool, perhaps duality both beautiful and ugly, but reality nonetheless, hope you enjoyed your special day today, cheers David

I Am Anaya

March 4, 2025 at 9:56 AM

Excelled! All four lines, I love a well thought out Haiku. "daisy cutters" whoa

David Kavanagh

March 4, 2025 at 1:17 PM

Those big boys don’t mess around Anaya, I had my thinking hat on here, more for protection from that last petal falling :) cheers David

Tom Cunningham

March 3, 2025 at 10:42 PM

Life always finds a way to return, sometimes it defies all logic. Good luck in the contest David. Tom

David Kavanagh

March 4, 2025 at 5:48 AM

We live on an extraordinary planet Tom, possibly the only one in the universe with sentient life, and humans are well in charge of its fate, we really don’t want mushrooms appearing overhead, cheers David

Ink Empress

March 3, 2025 at 12:20 PM

Dear David, its only very rarely we get to read haikus that are so deep and haunting. Which conveys so much in such a subtle and seamless manner. This is one of those that speaks volumes and made me pause and think and see the petal as fragility and how it falls in the hands of cruelty! What a most soul hitting haiku for this contest! Powerful! Pleasure reading this! Best wishes for the contest. Sending you light always

David Kavanagh

March 4, 2025 at 5:44 AM

High praise Ink! I always like to give the reader something extra to think about, I hadn’t got a full poem in me, so went with the haiku form, and I’m delighted and reassured you see the bigger picture I had in mind when writing this one, I’ll snap up that light you sent my way, and say cheers in return, David