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As The Last Petal Falls Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Sara Jama 03/03/2005

as the last petal falls daisy cutters boom the last petal falls to earth ~ mushrooms take full bloom

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Karen Jones

Date: 4/1/2025 7:31:00 PM

Love the imagery

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/2/2025 5:35:00 AM

Thanks so much Karen, one of my better ones I thought, cheers David

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/9/2025 2:35:00 PM

Oh wow. This is so clever. This contest got judged already, right? Did it win? If not. Enter in one of Brian's contests . Sometimes he recognizes a really great haiku.

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/9/2025 2:46:00 PM

Thanks Andrea, unfortunately bottomed out in the contest lol! I don’t think Sara really wanted a haiku, but she was generous to me in her previous contest so can’t complain, I might just save this one for another go in a future contest if allowed, cheers David

Zyrool Gifford

Date: 3/5/2025 12:18:00 PM

Hello David, this is a beautiful haiku. Reality at its best. One falls and another rises. Have a wonderful day, my friend.

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/5/2025 3:01:00 PM

Thank you Zyrool, perhaps duality both beautiful and ugly, but reality nonetheless, hope you enjoyed your special day today, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 3/4/2025 9:56:00 AM

Excelled! All four lines, I love a well thought out Haiku. "daisy cutters" whoa

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/4/2025 1:17:00 PM

Those big boys don’t mess around Anaya, I had my thinking hat on here, more for protection from that last petal falling :) cheers David

Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/3/2025 10:42:00 PM

Life always finds a way to return, sometimes it defies all logic. Good luck in the contest David. Tom

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/4/2025 5:48:00 AM

We live on an extraordinary planet Tom, possibly the only one in the universe with sentient life, and humans are well in charge of its fate, we really don’t want mushrooms appearing overhead, cheers David

Ink Empress

Date: 3/3/2025 12:20:00 PM

Dear David, its only very rarely we get to read haikus that are so deep and haunting. Which conveys so much in such a subtle and seamless manner. This is one of those that speaks volumes and made me pause and think and see the petal as fragility and how it falls in the hands of cruelty! What a most soul hitting haiku for this contest! Powerful! Pleasure reading this! Best wishes for the contest. Sending you light always

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/4/2025 5:44:00 AM

High praise Ink! I always like to give the reader something extra to think about, I hadn’t got a full poem in me, so went with the haiku form, and I’m delighted and reassured you see the bigger picture I had in mind when writing this one, I’ll snap up that light you sent my way, and say cheers in return, David

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 3/3/2025 10:22:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful Haiku write. As one petal falls another will bloom. "Good Luck" Have a great time writing away.....................

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/3/2025 10:44:00 AM

Heya Paula, this one is not all it seems at first glance, or maybe it is, and I just have a dark imagination, cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 3/3/2025 10:02:00 AM

The end of more than that flower if mushrooms take full bloom....With current events, I'll not take any bets.

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/3/2025 11:06:00 AM

Yes indeed Lin, the duality of nature and man’s nature!

Lin Lane
Date: 3/3/2025 10:53:00 AM

My first vision when reading that was of Hiroshima.

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/3/2025 10:42:00 AM

All bets are off as you wisely say Lin, on the surface my haiku looks pretty harmless, but deeper down all hell is breaking loose, cheers David

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 3/3/2025 8:26:00 AM

A turning of seasons and blooms. Beautifully done! I am so looking forward to both blooms (buried under a ton of snow at the mo). xomo!

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/3/2025 10:38:00 AM

Oh dear! Buried under a ton of snow my little Mo! try stay warm, hopefully spring is in the air, and not the mushrooms, cheers David

Di11y Da11y

Date: 3/3/2025 5:40:00 AM

You make me wish I were more intelligent David! If only I could see the world in 4D like you and grasp several layers of reality :) I had to look up daisy cutters as I suspected we weren't talking lawn mowers. So that little cheat did open up the dual meaning for the rest of the poem. This is an excellent twist on the prompt, best of luck in the contest.

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/3/2025 6:02:00 AM

Oh you’re way more intelligent than you give yourself credit for Dilly, and thanks to that curious mind of yours you found the duality of my haiku, I can only hope others will find it too, perhaps too short for the contest, but packs a punch nonetheless, cheers David