Get Your Premium Membership

As Always, With Chagrin

Poet's Notes
(Show)

Become a Premium Member and post notes and photos about your poem like Andrea Dietrich.


Dark hair in ringlets softly frames her face, the style her mother likes to see her wear, and her new gown looks pretty trimmed in lace while near the wall, she occupies a chair. She gazes at a crowd of boys and girls - the boys, like small men, dressed in shirts and ties; the girls, like her, dolled up, their hair in curls. What thoughts might lie behind her dark jade eyes? Young women not yet asked to dance have flocked together. Seeing her, they burst into a fit of giggles. Is she being mocked? She drops her gaze, unsure of what to do. Her hope, a tiny bird, away has flown. As always, with chagrin, she sits alone. Posted Aug. 7, 2017 for Ever Roper's "She Sits Alone" Poetry Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

12
Date: 8/18/2017 10:57:00 AM
Sad and evocative piece, Andrea. Well-deserved congratulations on First Place! Regards, John.
Login to Reply
Date: 8/17/2017 8:50:00 AM
I feel like you were writing about me. That's how I felt at dances. Not a great way to feel. You captured this so well and I know you were never one to be sitting alone.
Login to Reply
Date: 8/16/2017 8:30:00 AM
Back for your pat on the back, congratulations Andrea...
Login to Reply
Date: 8/14/2017 7:57:00 PM
Hi Andrea: Skillfully done. Reminds me of my sister 0n one of her cotillons.
Login to Reply
Date: 8/14/2017 7:55:00 PM
Skillfully done, Andrea! Reminds me of my cistern one of those cotillons
Login to Reply
Date: 8/14/2017 7:55:00 PM
Skillfully done, Andrea! Reminds me of my cistern one of those cotillons
Login to Reply
Date: 8/14/2017 10:24:00 AM
As soon as I'd read your line, 'Her hope, a tiny bird, away has flown', I thought you'd probably be a winner. Also, in your Shadow Poet poem you might have an extra 'shall' in your sixth line. Congrats on your top win!
Login to Reply
Date: 8/14/2017 8:06:00 AM
"What thoughts might lie behind her dark jade eyes?". A rip tide line shift that pulls you away into the loneliness. Congrats on the top spot
Login to Reply
Date: 8/13/2017 11:01:00 PM
Very pretty! Congrats Andrea!
Login to Reply
Date: 8/13/2017 8:17:00 PM
Thank you for entering my contest, Andrea. Love the setting you have created. Like always very well-crafted poem with, fantastic flow and rhyme. Congratulations on your win. ~*
Login to Reply
Date: 8/13/2017 7:42:00 PM
Congrats on your win Andrea
Login to Reply
Date: 8/13/2017 7:25:00 PM
How beautiful, skillfully-written--and sad! People can be so mean. Congrats on your win. Janice
Login to Reply
Date: 8/13/2017 6:05:00 PM
Congratulations Andrea :)
Login to Reply
Date: 8/13/2017 5:43:00 PM
Congrats on your fine win.
Login to Reply
Date: 8/13/2017 5:37:00 PM
Hi Andrea, a beautiful and heartfelt sonnet. Congratulations on your win!
Login to Reply
Date: 8/11/2017 2:30:00 PM
Adolescence is such a difficult time to endure. I can really relate to your girl Andrea. This poem has much colorful detail. I hope it is a high winner! : )
Login to Reply
Date: 8/11/2017 12:38:00 PM
That makes me sad. No one should have to sit alone and deal with those growing pains. Nicely written. love phyl
Login to Reply
Date: 8/11/2017 9:50:00 AM
Sooo sad,yet so powerful, this an emotion that will have touch many..as for those dark jade eyes well the mind boggles? i must look more closely next time....
Login to Reply
Date: 8/10/2017 11:41:00 PM
Sad and touching, Andrea, should place high:)
Login to Reply
Date: 8/10/2017 6:49:00 AM
Excellent and very touching write. But sad too. Thanks for sharing it.
Login to Reply
Date: 8/10/2017 6:27:00 AM
a beautiful poem framed in reality of growing pains. Very well done Andrea I feel it Bob D
Login to Reply
Date: 8/9/2017 8:43:00 PM
Sadness percolates...I feel for her...a beautiful poem for the picture.
Login to Reply
Date: 8/9/2017 6:16:00 PM
You verse sits alone...1'st place that is...god bless...^WW^
Login to Reply
Date: 8/9/2017 9:31:00 AM
Beautiful interpretation Andrea... Loved it... Good luck with the contest...
Login to Reply
Date: 8/9/2017 8:39:00 AM
I wish I had the talent to write such sonnets, but alas, I am only a poor poet unlike the one who wrote the above. Thank you, Andrea, for giving us a standard to follow.
Login to Reply
12

Book: Shattered Sighs