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How does poem happen? A paper , a pen , I think. I had so many reservations about posting this piece of which I am now very proud of. The brilliant mind of Cay Cay Jennings inspired me when I thought I was done for. I humbly escaped from the shallows and remembered I can swim and also I have Gods buouncy although waters are deep and islands are far, I can still get there. Song of Solomon, is that controversial? Here I go...
Unblouse  your breast
Where to nuzzle and warm
Areola to moisten and mouth
Urgency need, I scarce was born
Unclothe me in all unrighteousness
Sing for me no lullabye
Fetus reflection in alabaster eyes

Yours will forgive me, so softly they plead
The call in my eyes , so loving beguiled
Answers my whisper
Inaudibly you whimper
Reaching for the hearth of your home
Furthermost far, the call of the grave
But if I should die, please bury me here

We slipped passed the guards, their caution neglect
Our passion en-garde, the phallus erect
Discover a pebble in fissurely crag
Rolling in wonders and nacred in pearl

Both of us crying exhortations of love
Loving ungainly like giraffe on the run
Speaking in gibberish, talking in tongues
Becoming immortal banging the drum
Surpassing the portal the bloodhounds unleash
I Mount Vesuvius, youre so within reach

Im falling for you in tubular bells
Demolition crawls
Pots and pans all over the place
Flaming torpedos pock-mark the Earth
Harpooning the squid in ink fibrillation
Ecclectic joy in sense celebration
Two souls arriving from deep within
In baptismal breath I was born once again

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Date: 3/1/2018 6:53:00 PM
Goodness...such gentle human love...wonderful
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 3/2/2018 12:49:00 AM
Hi James. Thank you for popping in and the kind compliment
Date: 1/30/2018 8:32:00 PM
Oh..Wow! A great poem Jannie. Have anice evening my friend.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 1/31/2018 6:31:00 PM
Yoour welcome.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/30/2018 9:50:00 PM
Thank you "Darling*
Date: 1/24/2018 4:36:00 PM
Woah what a vocabulary...this is a sensual one... ladies will love it..
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/25/2018 7:32:00 AM
Thank you S.O. you are so right there
Date: 1/23/2018 12:22:00 PM
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/23/2018 2:15:00 PM
Omg. Youre back. I was very worried. Thank you Patricia
Date: 1/21/2018 9:18:00 AM
wow Jannie i need a cold shower after reading this hot hot hot poem - sensual and sexy and so well written:-) hugs jan xx
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/21/2018 8:52:00 PM
Well Cay Cay is standing in front of the freezer , you and Leanne.are taking showers. Sorry I made you burn. Thank you . Please pass the soap
Date: 1/20/2018 5:49:00 AM
BadabingBadaBoom! This is one for D.H. Lawrence, forget Anais Nin. Loving it. I now need to go have a cold shower. x
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Leanne Lovejoy-Burton
Date: 1/24/2018 2:09:00 PM
Funny. LOVE IT.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/21/2018 8:31:00 AM
Ok well see you when you come out. Ha ha .
Date: 1/2/2018 11:22:00 PM
Oh my saucy sassy poem, sensual eloquence I must say. I like the mention of squid ink as there are such sea pens, squids who squirt ink in the sea, u know about them eh. Kudos.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/3/2018 1:42:00 AM
What the heck, thank you for your kindness and input - valued
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/3/2018 1:40:00 AM
Zaynab,.you are downright hilarious. Throwing this back at me makes me squirm. Somehow I have to get you back. You mocker of sensitive souls. Ha ha.
Date: 1/2/2018 6:14:00 AM
Jannie, I enjoyed this deep, sensual poem. Nicely done. John
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/2/2018 3:30:00 PM
Thank you for stopping over John
Date: 1/1/2018 4:53:00 AM
Phew Jannie - this is an explosive write, filled with metaphors and uber hot. No wonder the whole house was a 'war struck zone' after that bout ...Lol...Maria
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/1/2018 11:30:00 PM
Hi Maria, I was waiting for a comment like yours ha ha. Thank you for stopping over . I will reciprocate
Date: 12/28/2017 10:06:00 AM
This is an enticing and sensual write very eloquently and professionally done. Yes. It works great in connection with my man and woman
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 12/28/2017 12:24:00 PM
Thank your swapping our poems in this relevance. Hi Rhoda
Date: 12/27/2017 5:34:00 PM
I love the entire poem and just can't fit all that love in this box. I will read it again and again. When you write, Jannie, you bring it and I imagine I'll always be eager to read it. Please go to Rhoda Tripp's page and look/read her concrete form poem, called Man and Woman, I believe. You must see it! I'm off to stand in front of the freezer. Yosser. Love ... CayCay
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/28/2017 10:05:00 AM
Wow! Thank you CayCay for the promo. You are a Dear.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 12/28/2017 1:21:00 AM
I did go to Rhoda and left my footprints. Howd she do it? I am outright grateful and pleased. You taught me to be" authentic" Love also
Date: 12/27/2017 5:32:00 PM
Hot stuff, get your your hot stuff. OK, I've read the poem 4 times and still when I get to this box, I stare at the screen. I don't know where to start. Ew la la, yes, even a bit shocking, I mean you said phallus. This is erotica served with some mind blowing, frantic almost, imagery. I love the giraffe comment, like two teenagers in a car. Next box ...
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 12/28/2017 1:17:00 AM
I still thank God for your input in my writes. I almost gave up . When at first I started I thought, what a lot of drivel and then it changed and I thought wait a minute. This could be good. Yet later it became a piece I can be proud of . It had a " yes" all over it. Thank for the kind inspiration.
Date: 12/27/2017 2:20:00 PM
OMG Jannie! No one can write with the unharnessed freedom you share. This blows me away! I must fave it! I hope things have improved and that you had a wonderful Christmas my friend. Love you, Connie : )
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 12/28/2017 1:11:00 AM
Connie I so thrilled about your response and being the first being slightly anxious what to expect. You are such a stalwart friend. All good this end. I dipped my pen in controversial territory and so humbled by your super words. You guide and goad me on.