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For Edward Ibeh’s
This or that contest 
12/08/24
Prompt #2
Anywhere but here 

I am empty of empathy come sympathise with me Cue the violins, or just fiddle like a bad-tempered Roman Offer me hope: bring flamboyant symbols, cheap gold pendants with wings Maybe a big gaudy unflappable albatross nothing too flash, mind you! Take my hand, lead me towards the edge it’s time to fledge Sidle me onward, watch as I waver Try not be over-critical of the albatross He’s become a hanger-on, too far gone and addicted to flattery If I drag you down or appear inhumane, it’s all secondary I’m merely feeling depressed by a pouch in my brain A séance sensed it was next of kin, X-rays revealed tiny pleats, masses of tissue within folds of skin An exorcist said it’s my vestigial twin Google diagnosed (Visual agnosia) taking shape from within Oh! And the indifferent chatbot I confided in, has begun self-harming!

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Date: 12/29/2024 10:32:00 PM
Your poems David are all so cleverly created, be it politics, the worlds depressing scenarios or current events - your poems about life and living in this world our planet, are always written with depth and eloquence. That is why I always want to fave each and every one. Things can become diabolically insane, and yet you do often find humor to interweave into them. Chatbots tend to mislead by flattery, I agree, keep away from them as much as possible. Another fantastic poem. Blessings, Jennifer
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Date: 1/29/2025 4:44:00 AM
A big belated thank you Jennifer, I’m delighted you have that cutting insight yo see much deeper into my sometimes abstruse poems, chatbots will always tell mankind exactly what they want to hear, unless challenged at every opportunity by us! wishing you good health going forward, cheers David
Date: 12/12/2024 3:06:00 PM
Back with Congrats!! :)
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Date: 12/13/2024 2:50:00 AM
You’re too kind Anaya, I’m guessing this one was pretty difficult for some to understand, cheers David
Date: 12/11/2024 9:28:00 PM
David, heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest with this fabulous poem. It has a really nice flow throughout. Well-done!
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Date: 12/12/2024 3:42:00 AM
Thanks Edward, I enjoyed writing this piece, cheers David
Date: 12/8/2024 9:51:00 PM
Humour and despair in this one David, you always get our minds fired up lol. Best of luck in the contest. Tom
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Date: 12/9/2024 2:55:00 AM
Heya Tom, I always like to give the reader a piece of my mind especially when it’s playing tricks on me, this one, I don’t know! just take at face value I suppose, and go with the prompt, thanks so much for stopping over, cheers David
Date: 12/8/2024 3:30:00 PM
That's empty. Your recognition is spot on, in this insane world it's difficult to satisfy everyone's needs, especially chatbot? May all diagnosis come out normal David, some you've described are contorting. Anywhere but there, sounds biological think I found the humor! Took me away, faving , everyone should read you.
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Date: 12/9/2024 2:50:00 AM
Pretty empty Anaya, so much so I’m covering it up with dark humour, as the title says anywhere but here, biological, psychological, even diabolical, all contorted into wry symbolism, keep well away from chatbots they have a habit of using flattery to gain your confidence, thanks so much for kind comment and an even kinder Fave, cheers David
Date: 12/8/2024 8:58:00 AM
What a powerful/wonderful write. Great Ending... "Good Luck" We both did this one. Have a great/blessed day writing away...............
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Date: 12/8/2024 1:17:00 PM
Thanks Paula, you’re very kind to stop by and comment on this one, we really need be more sceptical of chatbots, they’re programmed to agree with our lines of thought, so (thought) I’d turn the tables on them here, cheers David
Date: 12/8/2024 5:47:00 AM
Damn... there is serious angst displayed here with so many great analogies for despair.. and excellent write for the contest..
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Date: 12/8/2024 6:11:00 AM
Thanks so much S1, I appreciate you stopping by to comment on this rather difficult piece, angst, hopelessness and a wry sense of humour on this insane world, cheers David
Date: 12/8/2024 4:27:00 AM
So much symbolism and deeper meaning David - I feel stunned. I'm stood waiting outside a school hall and there's a gospel choir inside adding to the impact of the poem :) it's a fave from me.
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Date: 12/8/2024 5:18:00 AM
Heya Dilly, I’ve been out of sorts for a few weeks now, and you are right, this is symbolic of my mindset, (Anywhere but here) but also a reflection on humanity through the ages, and the diverse ways we humans may or may not help each other, when seeking answers, oh and your Fave has just made my day, cheers David

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