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Anger (Double Tanka)

spider in its web waiting where all waiting sleeps held in constant check yes but the weaving is done those thousands of deeds and thoughts spider in its web can you see him? look closely he appears to sleep head and eyes fixed straight ahead but oh it’s an angry world

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/15/2010 4:04:00 PM

oooh, scary anger there. I LIKE this. I came here two hours ago hoping to rate my contest entries, and guess what? I got NOTHING done except commenting to my bloggers and soupmail, etc. OH BOY, when will I ever have time?? Luv, andrea

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/16/2010 7:41:00 AM

and the weaving is never done! GOOD ONE! light & Love

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 2/6/2010 11:38:00 AM

I like this alot. read it several timesw before. get's better every time.... but oh it's an angry world... Love it -Robert

Donna Golden

Date: 8/26/2009 10:31:00 PM

Oooh! Chilling and spooky! Love it, Daver! Donna

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 8/23/2009 9:04:00 AM

Daver, Here's a picture gift. http://daneann.redbubble.com/sets/77430/works/3406208-2-bannana-spider I hope you enjoy it as much as I enjoyed your poem. Spiders are amazing. We used to have bananna spiders all among the trees at just about face level. But this year, many have built their webs 60-100 feet high in the trees. Smart move don't you think? BIG SMILE!!! Lovingly, Dane

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 8/22/2009 9:03:00 AM

excellent tanka with a good message--charma

Date: 8/20/2009 2:37:00 PM

Thought provoking with a message for the reader to think about. The question works well. Good use of imagery. Keep on writing!! Karen

Veronica Joseph

Date: 8/20/2009 9:34:00 AM

a good warning! I enjoyed this very much.

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/20/2009 9:31:00 AM

Terrific tanka....rather dark and eery....makes me wonder what happens in the next stanza!!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/20/2009 8:40:00 AM

Sounds like a trap. Spider webs are beautiful especilally if dew sprinkled. I have taken pictures of them but I hate to feel them. Like your expressiveness here. Keep writing. Sara Look at "Come Softly Love" see what you think.

Christopher Higgins

Date: 8/20/2009 8:37:00 AM

I love this piece alot..the second stanza is so well done..love how you closed this piece...