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And Then I Opened That Door- For Comp

(For Competition 'And then I opened THAT door', sponsor- John Lawless) My relationship had broken down, when love ran out of gas so down life's dark and lonely road I dragged my sorry ass. Could have done with company on such a painful walk my passenger I'd left behind, no-one to hear me talk a light (could it be hope?) I'm sure I saw not far ahead so I took the avenue called naive to see just where it led. The house of Her, it's elegant facade, I really was impressed not sure if I should ring the bell, being not ideally dressed my cares were worn and dreams were torn, not sure if all that matters holes right through my optimism and happiness in tatters no harm in stopping by, I thought, so hey-ho, what the hell just take the bullshit by the horns, go up and ring the bell. No answer, but a sudden gust of wind opened the door and I stepped in, whilst wondering had I been here before. The corridor stretched out before me, doors to left and right Not sure how many, since I was too young to see the light. The first door was denied to me, and so were all it's kin but since I was alone, I thought I'll just go kick it in. The first room it enticed me with it's beauty, grace and form, a fire of passion crackled in the grate that made me warm. The next room was a cellar, Magnums full of ruby wine full bodied and intoxicating, all this could be mine. The third room swathed in velvet, silk and lace, so smooth and cool, to not lie in such luxury would make a man a fool excited and emboldened now from all I'd seen before spoiled child rampaged from place to place and then opened THAT door. The blast took me right off my feet, I crashed into the ground the house of Her shook violently upon the Banshee sound full force, indignant anger, outright rage, fury unleashed as only then I understood the nature of the beast. My welcome suddenly outstayed, my fault, for had I known it though I had been invited in, walked round as if I owned it The room hissed in an icy tone as she laid bare my crime that I would have been more welcome taking one room at a time but men will open every door to fulfil all their needs the key to each door is respect, no barrier to greed. Tornado fire, the Vixen's ire ripped me into the yard winded, no breath left in me, my ego landed hard. Got up slowly, brushed myself down and rubbed my aching head eagerness had bled right out and brashness torn to shreds. Staggered back out through the gate and turned along the lane raised my collar round my neck and headed home again. You see, my relationship had broken down, when love ran out of gas so down life's dark and lonely road I dragged my sorry ass. A light...................... 18th June 2015

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Date: 7/25/2016 7:58:00 PM
Shine a light - I've seen the light - you have given me a torch . . . : )
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/26/2016 12:01:00 AM
Don't do it, Indiana- noooooooooo!!!.......
Date: 6/28/2015 2:06:00 PM
Congratulations on your win a 7.Hugs Eve
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/28/2015 10:43:00 PM
Thanks Eve . Viv x
Date: 6/27/2015 2:53:00 PM
Dark, troubling and funny all rolled into one...Throw in a good life lesson, insight and wisdom and what have you got? A DAMN good piece of work! Congratulations Viv! - Tim
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/28/2015 12:42:00 AM
Thanks, Tim, appreciate your comment. Regards, Viv
Date: 6/26/2015 1:52:00 AM
:) to Viv!
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Date: 6/26/2015 1:18:00 AM
I am back to wish you congratulations for your super poem... It's *viv*acious! Julia, xx
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/26/2015 1:35:00 AM
your appreciation *juli* accepted. Viv x
Date: 6/25/2015 11:18:00 PM
Hi Viv, a deep entry, it's called dust yourself off. Super love the poem. Congrats. **SKAT**
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/26/2015 12:43:00 AM
Thanks, Skat, appreciate your appreciation. Viv x
Date: 6/25/2015 10:42:00 PM
WOW, I see why this was on the winning list. Awesomely done Viv, congratulations on your win. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/25/2015 10:51:00 PM
Thanks, Linda, a wonderfully diverse selection in the list, and a pleasure to get involved. Viv x
Date: 6/25/2015 9:04:00 PM
oh, I absolutely love this one. Wow, I've seen three of the top poems and love them all. BIG congrats.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/25/2015 9:52:00 PM
Thanks, Andrea. John always gifts us a good theme. Hope you're looking after my Doozy. Viv x
Date: 6/25/2015 7:53:00 PM
Viv, this is an ingenious take on the theme and a intriguing read. Especially like the end...."A light.......? Ya gotta stop heading for that light.....thanks for entering the contest.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/25/2015 9:45:00 PM
Thanks, John, you never fail to pull an intriguing subject out of the hat, which produces terrific entries. Oh, and mine. Keep it up. Regards, Viv
Date: 6/23/2015 8:55:00 AM
Splendid write, Viv! I enjoyed this very much. Congratulations for winning the POTD! Sorry for being late, was away from soup for a bit. Still catching up. :-)
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/23/2015 8:40:00 PM
Thanks Kim, nice to see you back. Viv x
Date: 6/19/2015 11:50:00 PM
Viv, congratulations on poem of the day with this wonderfully written poem
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/20/2015 12:14:00 AM
Thanks, BW, a jolly nice end to the week. Viv x
Date: 6/19/2015 7:36:00 PM
You've weaved an entertaining, poetic tale, Viv...I enjoyed! Big congrats on TPOD!! Hugs, Rhonda
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/20/2015 12:15:00 AM
You can't beat a good weave, Rhonda. Thanks for popping by. Love to all, Viv x
Date: 6/19/2015 12:32:00 PM
This is excellent, Viv!!! Very creative and imaginative, with a message to go with it. Top marks to you! Congrats on POTD honour. // paul
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Paul Callus
Date: 6/19/2015 3:04:00 PM
Thank you, Viv:)
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/19/2015 12:53:00 PM
Thanks, Paul, very kind, and nice to hear about your PM gift, well deserved. Regards, Viv
Date: 6/19/2015 12:12:00 PM
Please forgive the name mistake, my eyesight isn't the best right now.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/19/2015 12:56:00 PM
That's Ok, Connie, I do it all the time. Viv x
Date: 6/19/2015 12:09:00 PM
John, this is absolutely brilliant! Congratulations on it being selected as POTD!
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/19/2015 12:56:00 PM
Thanks, Connie, for the kind comment. Viv x
Date: 6/19/2015 9:31:00 AM
Congratulations on being honored with POTD Viv!! Best Wishes, Gary
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/19/2015 12:57:00 PM
Cheers, Gary, appreciate you stopping by. Regards, Viv
Date: 6/19/2015 8:40:00 AM
Excellent choice for poem of the day!
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/19/2015 12:57:00 PM
Thank you, Richard, quite a surprise for me. Regards, Viv
Date: 6/19/2015 7:01:00 AM
Wonderfully done! You have done great with the poem of the day :-) You're awesome viv :)
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/19/2015 8:14:00 AM
Thanks, Casarah, very kind of you. A nice surprise. Viv x
Date: 6/19/2015 4:28:00 AM
you penned this very beautiful, that is how God work, when one door is close another one will open. good luck in the contest........A.M.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/19/2015 8:17:00 AM
Thanks, Afolabi, I appreciate your comments. Regards, Viv
Date: 6/19/2015 3:13:00 AM
- Happy for you opened the door to p.o.t.d. .... Congratulations and good luck in the contest, Viv !!! - hugs and have a great weekend // Anne-Lise :)
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/19/2015 8:20:00 AM
Thanks, Anne-Lise, you too. Velsignelser , Viv x
Date: 6/18/2015 10:48:00 PM
G'day Viv... ah what a tale and what a dose of reality. When one door shuts another one opens, and this is where you learn whether history is about to repeat itself - good luck Viv - Lindsay
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/19/2015 12:53:00 AM
Cheers, Cobber.
Date: 6/18/2015 9:34:00 AM
Super 7 on this fine poem, smooth and with superb rhyme. Great story, message and deep thinking . Adding this to my fav list. PM on the way..
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/18/2015 3:06:00 PM
Thanks, Robert, much appreciated. Modified verse as mentioned in my PM. your humble servant, Mister Viv, esquire, lately of this Parish. Bon viveur, raconteur, man about town, Dandy, Fop, Buffoon, (any excuse to use old words), humble servant etc. Blessings.
Date: 6/18/2015 6:02:00 AM
Great descriptive story with vivid imagery Viv:-) Good luck in the contest:-) Hugs jan xx 7
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/18/2015 6:23:00 AM
Thanks, Jan, I'm a Gentleman really. Quite posh, too- I cut my toast diagonally. Viv x
Date: 6/18/2015 1:51:00 AM
very nice ending, very nice
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/18/2015 2:14:00 AM
Thanks, Courtney. Viv x
Date: 6/18/2015 1:23:00 AM
Viv - What a tale! I can see you enjoyed writing it... Good luck! Julia, xx
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Viv Wigley
Date: 6/18/2015 1:27:00 AM
Will us men ever learn, I ask myself..... Thanks for popping by, Julia. Viv x
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