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An Old Woman Weeps

~ O’er this frail valley, darkness doth eclipse Winter fans death, o’ lonely wishes fall Blood of weakened flesh, high mountaintop drips Puddles reflect forms, shadow’d mourners call Beasties lurk, sin collects damaged wages Curtains drawn project shadowed silhouettes Horseback ministers breach chain fastened cages Slashing victims falling, blade n’er forgets Deafened screams echo cries o’ tortured souls Ashen flames smother, breaths exhaling fear Baptized dreams drown midst shallow murky shoals Sanity evades, crusades disappear Sunrise, smoke filters, blue skies unaware An old woman weeps, hunched in sad despair ~ English Sonnet I just wanted to try one

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Funom Makama

Date: 1/10/2020 10:56:00 AM

This is beautiful. I love this masterpiece. Happy new year friend. Keep the lines blessing.

Chris Green
Date: 1/10/2020 12:52:00 PM

Thank you so very much for your kind thoughts. I appreciate your visit and am thrilled you liked this one so much.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 1/7/2020 11:15:00 AM

This poem is a gem Chris - your talent shines like like a bright star on soup! Blessings my friend, Jennifer.

Chris Green
Date: 1/7/2020 11:44:00 AM

Thank you Jennifer so very much. I am thrilled you enjoyed this one.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/4/2020 10:56:00 PM

Just trying an English sonnet, eh?! This is a remarkably evocative write, my friend. Shades of Nathaniel Hawthorne's 'Young Goodman Brown,' the final couple of pages. Bravo, Gershon

Chris Green
Date: 1/6/2020 9:26:00 AM

Thanks my friend. That is a high compliment. I am thrilled you liked this one.

Heidi Sands

Date: 1/4/2020 12:21:00 AM

Wow ! This is very good. I like how you can shift in the way you do with your writing. You are so talented, Chris. Keep it up. I always enjoy reading your poetry :)

Chris Green
Date: 1/6/2020 9:26:00 AM

Thank you Heidi for always making me smile

Ronald D Thompson

Date: 1/3/2020 5:34:00 PM

Impressive as a first sonnet Chris. Powerful imagery. Well done my man!! Best of luck in the contest. Best wishes..Ron

Chris Green
Date: 1/6/2020 9:25:00 AM

Thanks again Ron. This one wasn't written for a contest. I appreciate you my friend.

Sandra Adams

Date: 1/3/2020 4:59:00 PM

not only can you write a sonnet but you can hang with the best of them... this is exquisite Chris....(this form is on my weekend list to attempt) i think you did an amazing job with it... Bravo... you should write them more often... hugs

Chris Green
Date: 1/3/2020 5:04:00 PM

Thank you so very much my friend. I'm not sure how many I will write, this wasn't easy...I have been working on it for a few days. : ) I appreciate you Sandy and all of the kindness you send in my direction.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/3/2020 4:39:00 PM

Now you know that you can not only write a sonnet, but a very good one at that. The imagery is excellent, Chris. You ought to think about entering Emile's contest. Hugs, Carolyn

Chris Green
Date: 1/3/2020 4:47:00 PM

Thank you so much Carolyn, not this time around but I appreciate you saying so.

Juliet Ligon

Date: 1/3/2020 4:32:00 PM

Powerful images. Anticipating a high placement in contest.

Juliet Ligon
Date: 1/4/2020 2:56:00 PM

Enter it in the contest!

Chris Green
Date: 1/3/2020 4:35:00 PM

Thanks so much Juliet but I won't be entering this in a contest. I just wrote it to see if I could write one that was worthwhile. I am thrilled you enjoyed it.