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An Old Grist Mill

Hiking a dry creek bed, at the mountain's base
I happened on an old grist mill, a prisoner
of time, serving life in isolation.

A few rotten boards scattered about
was all that remained of it's dilapidated Norse wheel
The broken millstone lay silent on it's bed
the thick green ivy walls, closing in.

Guarded by giant pin oaks and river ash,
yet one could easily see evidence of visitors.
I was trespassing, not on land
but on another time, another's dream.

What was most likely, once a busy road
for horse drawn wagons had become 
a clearing for utility poles and wires

I did not enter but I stood there 
envisioning yesterday. mountains on both sides, 
creek of fresh running water and the 
serenity of this lush mountain valley.

Then cynically muttered,..."Progress"


   5/27/2018

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Date: 7/4/2018 11:25:00 AM
Back to congratulate you again for your win again! Your imagery always puts me right in the scene. Well done! :)
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Date: 7/3/2018 6:32:00 AM
I was stumped on what t write for this contest but you wrote with such ease. Great poem all around! You never cease to amaze me dear Daniel! thank you for your entry and congratulations on your placement :)-luloo
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Date: 6/24/2018 9:19:00 AM
Hello Danny, Congratulations on your win here!! This is a marvelous free verse with a wondrous theme and message. I read this one several times to get a very good feel for the theme and for the precise and descriptive nature of your words and imagery. Most Excellent!! A true pleasure to read!! Cheers and Best Wishes, Gary
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Date: 6/24/2018 11:10:00 AM
Thank you, Gary. You are so kind. Nice to see you again. I always enjoy your visits.
Date: 6/22/2018 5:59:00 PM
I KNEW this one would win (and that mine would not) Congrats, Danny. Actually, several people agreed with me that they never heard the word grist before!! Mill is sufficient to know it's for making flour!! I'm a Miller and I say so.
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Date: 6/22/2018 6:15:00 PM
Textiles are made in mills. Thank you Andrea, I felt honored to make the list. A lot of really good entries. Have a wonderful weekend!
Date: 6/22/2018 9:19:00 AM
Yes! There are so few remaining. Great writing, Daniel. Many congrats on your win. Elaine
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Date: 6/22/2018 7:01:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this well-written poem of reflection. This seemed different for you and I like it. Your description had me right there, and I could faintly hear you muttering at the end... :)
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Date: 6/18/2018 9:28:00 PM
Congratulations Daniel. Tom.
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Date: 6/6/2018 2:41:00 PM
Lovely reminiscing in your poem. I especially love the lines "I was trespassing, not on land but on another time, another's dream". There is something special about coming across remnants from the past.
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Date: 6/4/2018 10:54:00 PM
Poetically nice reflections ... The progress developers unfortunately are not poets ... Nor philosophers seeking to live and let live ... You have penned it with your excellent poetic skill ...
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Date: 6/3/2018 5:44:00 PM
Coming back to see yours one more time and hopefully will be again once the winners' list is made. I saw several that were so well written. I did mine the way I did it for a reason. Don't expect to win, but I had fun!! (did the gristmill in GWTW actually say the word gristmill on it?)
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Date: 6/3/2018 6:03:00 PM
No. I doubt any of them did. One just knew by looking. How did you think they made their flour? Oh well. still a pleasure visiting with you. Thanks again for stopping by:)
Date: 6/2/2018 8:29:00 AM
You happened on, Daniel, and i plus many many others are so glad you did,,this is amazing poetry...
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Date: 6/2/2018 2:33:00 PM
Thank you, Harry. I really appreciate it. I am glad you liked it:)
Date: 5/30/2018 11:52:00 AM
It would be great if things such as this were restored to the beauty of their day and serve as a lesson to the youth. Hard work and perseverance pay off.
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Date: 5/30/2018 3:06:00 PM
Tim, we gotta face it. Our ways have gone the way of the dodo. Thank you for dropping by. Really great to see you again:)
Date: 5/30/2018 9:59:00 AM
You are so so talented, dear. What an awesome piece. Progress...indeed. To go back to idyllic days would be so amazing. Thanks for this trip through your poem.
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Date: 5/30/2018 11:47:00 AM
Thank you sweetie, All I would need is a good woman, like you:) Take care and please drop by anytime:)
Date: 5/30/2018 9:54:00 AM
Yes! So few remaining of a by-gone era that paved the way for today. Great writing, Daniel. Sure to be on the winner's list. Elaine
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Date: 5/30/2018 11:46:00 AM
Thank you, Elaine. Fingers crossed! Not my normal form for sure. i do appreciate your kind remarks. Hoping you are well:)
Date: 5/30/2018 9:03:00 AM
Great imagery and fantastic finish. This is top shelf writing.
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Date: 5/30/2018 9:54:00 AM
Thank you, Richard. I appreciate your kindness. Really nice to see you again:)
Date: 5/30/2018 8:40:00 AM
Nice to see a free verse poem from you my friend.. I would be the same, probably not enter either..
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Date: 5/30/2018 9:52:00 AM
Thank you S1. Writing free verse was tough for me. I am glad you liked it:) Nice to see you again. Hoping all is well with you.
Date: 5/29/2018 9:56:00 PM
Times seems to move forward, yet we long for the old fashioned ways, I love the way you appreciate the old grist mill here, thanks for the good read Daniel.
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Date: 5/30/2018 8:14:00 AM
Hello again, Pixie. Not my normal form, free verse. I thought I would try something new. Thank you for friendly visits and wonderful comments:)
Date: 5/29/2018 8:39:00 PM
A compelling, captivating and elegant free verse, Daniel. Your superb imagery 'I was trespassing, not on land but on another time, another's dream.' - set the nostalgic stage beautifully and your last line is the perfect closer. I loved seeing this through your eyes! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Daniel Turner
Date: 5/30/2018 8:12:00 AM
Susan, you are too kind. Thank you so much for the lovely comments. I always enjoy your company:)
Date: 5/29/2018 7:58:00 PM
Please do try free verse more often. Once in a while I am able to get a good one like this out of myself too. Try it more and more. I think you can be great with it.
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Date: 5/30/2018 8:11:00 AM
We'll see. Thanks again sweetie:)
Date: 5/29/2018 9:53:00 AM
Nostalgic poem, I can relate to this one :)
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Date: 5/30/2018 8:10:00 AM
Thank you, Yazmin. So nice to see you again. I appreciate your time and support:)
Date: 5/28/2018 5:27:00 PM
wow, yours is amazing. I have not posted mine yet but it's a sure "loser" because of the way I took the topic!!!
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Date: 5/29/2018 8:55:00 AM
Thank you, Andrea. This is my first attempt at free verse. I am glad you like it:)
Date: 5/28/2018 3:29:00 PM
Oh, I have been into places like this.. they are so refreshing .. it is like a time travel back to the past.. lovely imagery..Thank you so very much for your encouraging compliment on my poem “From Now On”. My hubby has shown a lot of strength.. Him and I thought there for a while he wasn't going to make it.. Hugs Eve
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Daniel Turner
Date: 5/29/2018 8:54:00 AM
Hello sweetie:) Thank you, Eve and yes me too. I have a vivid imagination and it works overtime when I am out exploring. Wonderful to see you again:)
Date: 5/28/2018 2:33:00 PM
- Your thoughts travel far back in time ... gives me a vivid image in front of my eyes ... a pleasure to read, Daniel :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/29/2018 8:52:00 AM
Thank you sweet Anne Lise. It is always my pleasure when you drop by. Hoping you are well:)
Date: 5/28/2018 1:49:00 PM
Hi Danny! I love this one. It has a wistful tone to it and it reminds me of when I lived in North Little Rock. There was an old mill right down the street from our house and I used to go there and sit ...and dream of how it must have been back when....I'd love to go back there. A FAV for sure. Carole :D
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Date: 5/28/2018 6:26:00 AM
Your aptitude for writing free verse is clear, Danny. It's a well done piece of nostalgia. Not all changes are for the better.
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Date: 5/28/2018 9:37:00 AM
It was very difficult for me to write and not rhyme. Sorta like writing a short story. Thank you, Lin. How kind of you to say such nice things:) Hope you have a wonderful memorial Day.
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