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Pick a Title: Vol 46 Contest by Edward Ibeh  10/7/24

She lived in an Edenic world, a paradise, this child-like virgin of only sixteen years. Moonlight glowed in her virtous blue eyes, unaware that life could fill them with tears. A budding beauty whose petals were tender, and fragile were her wings, not yet able to fly. Fallen from grace when she chose to surrender, for the loss of her purity, she had reason to cry. Robert Frost wrote, 'Nothing Gold can Stay.' His metaphor for innocence is a poignant line. Whether her naivete was given or taken away, it can never be restored. For it, she can only pine. Child-like she will be no more; as a plucked flower whose petals have fallen. Lost are her angelic wings. No longer an innocent maiden kept in a castle tower. 'Oh, to be a child again,' the mournful song she sings.

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Date: 10/20/2024 8:01:00 AM
Well done Lin, on your well deserved poetry contest win. did you notice my comment rhymed,if you never well that's fine. Xx
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Date: 10/20/2024 8:46:00 AM
lol John, I'm an editor AND a rhymer at heart. I noticed. Thanks
Date: 10/17/2024 3:27:00 PM
Congrats Lin. What we trade our innocence for, in the end, it is never worth it.
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Date: 10/20/2024 8:45:00 AM
Hi Rob. Sorry I didn't see this sooner. Lots of out of town family and lots of fun. Thank you for the comments, and your words are truth.
Date: 10/17/2024 5:10:00 AM
Powerful and poignant poem, Lin. I love the "Nothing Gold Can Stay" reference by Robert Frost. It's one of my favorite poems of his! Amazing stuff. Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest!
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Date: 10/17/2024 8:48:00 AM
Thank you for finding it worthy of a place on your winning list, Edward. I look forward to your contests.
Date: 10/8/2024 6:14:00 AM
Lin, this is something to mourn...this loss. While we only hope we can nourish the child within us by the way we deal with our memories and deal with things going forward, you capture this moment with very powerful sentiment and you capture this sadness. You're making me think about life and happiness in a profound way. This is a very potent poem and I shall make it a favorite to read it several times. The transition to adulthood is serious business.
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Date: 10/8/2024 6:36:00 AM
It's very serious. Thanks for the comments and the fave,
Date: 10/7/2024 5:10:00 PM
So many first experiences create a loss of innocence, this one is one of the most sacred. Lovely presentation throughout this heart touching poem, Lin. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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Date: 10/8/2024 6:35:00 AM
Thanks for commenting, Bill.
Date: 10/7/2024 2:20:00 PM
Such a story of a young girls innocence. It is sometimes heartbreaking and wishing to have held on for her everlasting mate. There is a sadness here. Thank you for sharing Lin..
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Date: 10/7/2024 2:26:00 PM
Yes, there is, Michael and I felt that way when I had the idea for what to write for this one. Thanks a bunch.
Date: 10/7/2024 11:52:00 AM
I hope that innocence was given freely rather than taken away Lin, but of course that is not the point here, you capture the elegy of innocence quite poignantly and beautifully, oh to be a child again, perhaps just sometimes, cheers David
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Date: 10/7/2024 2:25:00 PM
I'm going to say it was given, since it's fiction but all too often true. That song came to mind when I was writing this one... seemed fitting. Thanks, David and so glad you're back.
Date: 10/7/2024 10:35:00 AM
nice poem. great metaphor.
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Date: 10/7/2024 2:24:00 PM
Thank you.
Date: 10/7/2024 10:03:00 AM
So very sad. Love the Robert Frost metaphor and your thoughts about the loss of innocenc.
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Date: 10/7/2024 10:07:00 AM
Thank you very much, Kim.

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