Among the Copper Trees

Enhanced by peaceful solitude, in twilight, crimson crowned
There, in tensile grace she stood, enchantment in disguise
Lightly splashed in backlight, where the tender grass had grown

A monumental moment, as she stood before my eyes
First stabbed by startled fear, new trust came pouring down
There, in tensile grace she stood, enchantment in disguise 

Caressed in beauty, and sun embraced, revealed for me alone
Dare I break the silent calm, with breath or just a sigh?
First stabbed by startled fear, new trust came pouring down

A white tailed doe, was grazing there, aware and keen of eye
She perked up ears, alert for sound, yet, still she had not flown
Dare I break the silent calm, with breath or just a sigh?

Or take a step, in chance my foot could rustle twig or loam?
This stance of wills...intense and poised, a fleeting chance to flee
She perked up ears, alert for sound, yet still she had not flown

Eyes made of glass, as windows are, in which the iris tongue
We made no move...each one transfixed, no air in lungs to breathe
So inter-laced, with life force crossed, in universal one
Our spirits twined against the sky, beneath the copper trees
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Poteet Avatar
April 5, 2014 at 4:10 PM
Beautiful, Carrie, a carefully written piece of innocent doe. Still beyond imagination even. Congratulations on your well-deserved win.
Roberts Avatar
April 3, 2014 at 2:24 AM
Carrie words fail me, to say how wonderfully written this is....congrats. Seren
Stephens Avatar
April 2, 2014 at 3:59 AM
Hi Carrie, Congrats on your 1st place win. Absolutely breathtakingly beautiful. There are so many twinkling gems of insightfulness in every line. Could read it again and again. A published book of similar poems would certainly be a bestseller ! Regards Theresa xx
Mehta Avatar
April 2, 2014 at 1:47 AM
A fine form you have chosen for the theme of your poem. Congrats on the fine win, carrie
Dom Avatar
April 1, 2014 at 10:42 PM
You captured that moment nicely. Congratulations on your glory. Cheers!
Johnson Avatar
April 1, 2014 at 6:17 PM
How exciting for you. And worth the high win. congratulations. Love, Joyce
Smith Avatar
April 1, 2014 at 4:22 PM
What an absolutely beautiful piece Carrie . Congrats on the win....Tim
Phookan Avatar
April 1, 2014 at 11:39 AM
Thank you Carrie for your poem! Thank you for honoring my contest...You wrote in a splendid form,, and I was struck by the beauty in your verse and how you delivered your lines. Congrats on your 1st place win in the contest! love you...
Hamilton Avatar
March 24, 2014 at 4:53 PM
oh Carrie this is exquisite and beautiful tender and loving written hugs 7 and fav
Dietrich Avatar
March 23, 2014 at 10:43 AM
Beautifully rhymed in terzanelle form, Carrie. Is it for Deb's contest about finding God in nature, etc? For me, it would fit that category. Debs is picky though and when I mentioned to her in her blog doing mine on dogs, she didn't seem to want me to do it (but it's already done and just not posted yet) hahaha
Gorelick Avatar
March 22, 2014 at 6:05 PM
What a lovely phrase, "beneath the copper trees"..a lovely poem. BG
Chircop Avatar
March 22, 2014 at 4:43 PM
Hi dear..Such an amazing and stunning poem..and the title attracts the eye..Awesome!!! : )
Mohn Avatar
March 22, 2014 at 9:39 AM
Wow … This really is special Carrie - to take a moment in time and weave so much texture and feeling
Roberts Avatar
March 21, 2014 at 11:11 PM
this is stunning Carrie, just beautiful
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