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Alone In Glass Bottom

Davy Jones: Do you fear… death? Do you fear that dark abyss? All your deeds laid bare, all your sins punished?

                —Pirates of the Caribbean: Dead Man’s Chest 2006

ALONE IN GLASS BOTTOM

Alone in glass bottom,
with plankton underneath -
boat’s in midriff of sea.
I’ve plenty of water.
Sink or swim - am I free?

Alone in glass bottom
Should I write a message?
Bottle it up or send…?
Could be my last chance to
navigate and defend.

Alone in glass bottom
Should I fish for a shark
and devour great white fin -
drive it deep in my heart?
Would that too be a sin?

Alone in glass bottom
swirling last gulp of rum,
the famous Davy Jones
frees the gold…and I grieve,
as the deep binds my bones.

4/6/2022
Contest: Form M - Monchielle
Sponsor: Constance La France
Theme: Ocean/Sea
RhymeZone and HowManySyllables.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2022

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Hind Avatar
August 17, 2024 at 7:24 PM
Amazing poem, a fav- <3 love the repeating line" alone in glass bottom"
La France Avatar
April 17, 2022 at 3:52 PM
Kim, congratulations on your win in my Monchielle contest with your wonderful poem and I like the quote ~Constance
Rodrigues Avatar
April 17, 2022 at 5:37 PM
Thank you! I enjoyed the format too! :)
Ray Choudhury Avatar
April 16, 2022 at 6:16 PM
Congratulations, Kim. I really love your unique theme - the form with repeating lines is perfect for the story. BW ~ Mala
Rodrigues Avatar
April 17, 2022 at 5:37 PM
Thank you, Mala! xx
Kendrick Avatar
April 16, 2022 at 4:30 PM
Congrats on your winning work. Way to go. Sara
Rodrigues Avatar
April 16, 2022 at 5:33 PM
Thank you, Sara!
Goldsmith Avatar
April 15, 2022 at 10:27 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a creative/fun~~story/write. Have a Great/Blessed Day and Blessed Easter..............
Rodrigues Avatar
April 16, 2022 at 5:20 PM
Thank you so much, Paula! Happy Easter!
Miller Avatar
April 15, 2022 at 7:37 AM
Congratulations on a well-deserved win.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 16, 2022 at 5:17 PM
Thank you, Terry!
Alex Avatar
April 14, 2022 at 8:47 PM
Treasures shown in "Alone in glass bottom" - Beautiful. Congratulations!
Rodrigues Avatar
April 16, 2022 at 5:16 PM
Thank you for your continued comments! I appreciate it! Thank you!
Poet Avatar
April 14, 2022 at 11:56 AM
Congratulations on a very well-deserved win dear, KIM. Blessings
Rodrigues Avatar
April 16, 2022 at 5:13 PM
Thank you! Bless you too!
Krutsinger Avatar
April 12, 2022 at 10:39 PM
I love the way your thoughts are the thoughts of a compassionate caring pirate Kim "Could be my last chance to navigate and defend."
Rodrigues Avatar
April 13, 2022 at 4:23 AM
Thanks, Caren ;)
DiMino Avatar
April 7, 2022 at 6:54 AM
A glass bottom; a glass house; life is a sail, more precarious for those with fragile faith. Excellent write!
Rodrigues Avatar
April 7, 2022 at 6:59 AM
Thank you, Joe! The danger apparent, visible and when one is alone with their thoughts, their sin magnifies and their apparent treasure holds no real value. Thank you for your collaborative comments! I always enjoy when a reader sees more! You have my mind spinning! Thanks!
Buhagiar Avatar
April 7, 2022 at 1:09 AM
Perfect poem for the contest. Well done and best for a win. Hugs.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 7, 2022 at 6:46 AM
Thank you, dear friend!
Brul Avatar
April 6, 2022 at 9:35 PM
What a glorious poem! Definitely a fave!!
Rodrigues Avatar
April 7, 2022 at 6:49 AM
Thank you so much, JCB!
Baker Avatar
April 6, 2022 at 3:49 PM
This one kept me interested throughout, Kim. Good luck in the contest! Bill
Rodrigues Avatar
April 6, 2022 at 6:11 PM
Awesome! So glad for the feedback!
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 6, 2022 at 3:10 PM
Love the shark stanza Kim, in fact the whole poem is so well written, great quote too, all the best for contest, cheers David
Rodrigues Avatar
April 6, 2022 at 3:28 PM
Thanks so much, David!
Brown Avatar
April 6, 2022 at 2:07 PM
Kim, I loved the story, well penned. Blessings ~ Debra
Rodrigues Avatar
April 6, 2022 at 2:14 PM
Thank you, Debra! Thank you for all your comments!
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