Notes About The Poem

This poem is a Swap Quatrain

 

MID APRIL 2018 PREMIERE CONTEST,ANY FORM OR NONE,ANY THEME,UP TO A MAX OF 20 LINES

Contest Judged:  4/18/2018 7:13:00 AM
Sponsored by: Brian Strand | Send Soup Mail

 

Awarded:  FIRST PLACE

Premiere Contest WinnerAll Too Soon

One windy night upon my breast
I felt the kiss of winter’s breath
A breath that blew me into flight 
Upon my breast one windy night

A leaf once green now bathed in red
With coat of spring and summer shed
True color bursting at the seams
Now bathed in red a leaf once green

Upon your breath I learned to fly
A flame of glory in the sky
Not knowing that the price was death
I learned to fly upon your breath

But all too soon I came and went
The seasons of my life were spent
A bud in spring that came to bloom
I came and went - but all too soon
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Schiavina Avatar
November 7, 2023 at 7:33 AM
Congratulations Elaine and thank you for writing poetry that will live forever.
Carber Avatar
April 19, 2018 at 7:58 AM
I like this-- it is wistful and reminds me of some of the 19C Romantic poets-- congrats on your win, Elaine!
George   Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 5:06 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your comments.
Gentry Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 11:29 PM
Congratulations on your win with this beautiful beautiful poem. I absolutely love it.
George   Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 5:07 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments, Susan...much appreciated. Sincerely. Elaine.
Haight Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 8:38 PM
So sadly beautiful, Elaine. I love the form and the deep metaphors. Congratulations on your well-deserved Trophy win! Fave! Hugs, Sandra
George   Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 5:08 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments, Sandra...and for the fave...that means so much to me. Sincerely. Elaine.
Allison Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 4:54 PM
I've added this straight to my faves, exceptional poetry and I've never seen a swap quatrain before, many many congrats on your very well deserved trophy win:-) hugs Jan xx
George   Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 5:10 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments, Jan and for the fave...much appreciated. Sincerely. Elaine.
Pandit Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 10:35 AM
Congrats Elaine..awesome poetry!
George   Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 5:10 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your comments, Vijay...much appreciated. Sincerely. Elaine.
Richards Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 10:03 AM
Your poetry is always exceptional, dear Elaine. This is another breathtaking beauty! Lovely work, and always top notch !! Congratulations !
George   Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 5:11 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments, Carrie...much appreciated. Sincerely. Elaine.
Nair Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 9:02 AM
Congrats.wonderful work
George   Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 5:11 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments, Sneha...much appreciated. Sincerely. Elaine.
Lane Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 8:53 AM
Ilene, I've not been around PS very much lately, but I'm delighted to read this wonderful Quatrain offering from you. I can certainly see why it was chosen as the top winner. Congratulations on your beautiful lines. Your ability to swap words in the lines enhances its meaning and your talent.
George   Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 5:12 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments, Lin...much appreciated. Sincerely. Elaine.
Gauthier Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 8:21 AM
Wow - thank you for introducing me to this awesome form of poetry. You did it justice in a magnificent way. Your poem is a FAVE for me. Congrats on your most deserved gold medal win, Elaine.
George   Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 5:13 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments and for the FAVE, Line...this means so much to me. Sincerely. Elaine.
Andresen Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 8:20 AM
- Congratulations a well deserved 1st place, Elaine :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
George   Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 5:14 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments, Sunshine...much appreciated. Sincerely. Elaine.
La France Avatar
November 23, 2016 at 12:03 PM
Elaine so beautifully penned and CONGRATULATIONS on your win in the contest.
George   Avatar
November 28, 2016 at 9:40 AM
Thank you, dear Constance. Elaine
Singh Avatar
November 22, 2016 at 9:06 PM
Lovely! Congrats!
George   Avatar
November 28, 2016 at 9:34 AM
thank you, Sushma. Elaine
Lindley Avatar
July 2, 2014 at 11:00 PM
Life is too brief. Just when we get close to figuring out what not to do it ends. The lucky ones are the ones that somehow figure it out decades sooner and actually act upon having that knowledge. Truly great write my friend! It was as smooth as silk!!!!!
George   Avatar
July 2, 2014 at 11:04 PM
Thank you for dropping by, Robert. Lainie
Michelle Avatar
April 10, 2014 at 12:46 PM
I love the rhyme here. have you entered my rhyme battles before? Very interesting thoughts displayed here. I love it!!! So profound. Great write. Beautiful words and beautiful flow as always. have a wonderful week. ~Juli-Michelle
Andresen Avatar
April 2, 2014 at 6:58 AM
- Elaine, this is really a beautiful poem - and I love the ice rose - Hope all is well with you. - Have a lovely day. - In Norway's finally the spring arrived !!! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Guzzi Avatar
March 31, 2014 at 8:04 PM
But like all things we will come again, perhaps not the same but surely parts of us will. So nice to see your name here again. Light & Love
Austin Avatar
March 30, 2014 at 10:52 AM
Life and the seasons. Love this one. Good to hear from you, Lanie. Love, daver
Loving Iii Avatar
March 27, 2014 at 6:16 PM
this knocked my socks off!!! this was great! I loved it all the way through. I have to fav it. this really impressed me. I'm glad it was one of the first i read today. Don't forget to put it in the contest. any contest. It's a sure winner. john
Ryerson Avatar
March 16, 2014 at 3:32 AM
I am SO glad to see you posting again Elaine...I sent you a Soup Mail...
Dietrich Avatar
March 11, 2014 at 8:59 PM
thanks for letting me know that this contest inspired you. how wonderful to see you here again and good luck with your novel.
Gorelick Avatar
March 9, 2014 at 12:26 PM
So good to see you posting..you never disappoint. Congrats. BG
Dietrich Avatar
March 9, 2014 at 11:19 AM
I love the message in this beautiful gem, Elaine. Thanks so much for entering my contest. I so seldom get to see you. The last two stanzas are for me, flawless. congrats on your win.
Lamoureux Avatar
March 9, 2014 at 9:45 AM
Just loved the flow and content, congratulations.
Mehta Avatar
March 9, 2014 at 4:56 AM
Congratulations on the fine win. Enjoyed the rhyme perfect, elaine
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