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This poem is a Swap Quatrain

 

MID APRIL 2018 PREMIERE CONTEST,ANY FORM OR NONE,ANY THEME,UP TO A MAX OF 20 LINES

Contest Judged:  4/18/2018 7:13:00 AM
Sponsored by: Brian Strand | Send Soup Mail

 

Awarded:  FIRST PLACE

All Too Soon Premiere Contest Winner

One windy night upon my breast
I felt the kiss of winter’s breath
A breath that blew me into flight 
Upon my breast one windy night

A leaf once green now bathed in red
With coat of spring and summer shed
True color bursting at the seams
Now bathed in red a leaf once green

Upon your breath I learned to fly
A flame of glory in the sky
Not knowing that the price was death
I learned to fly upon your breath

But all too soon I came and went
The seasons of my life were spent
A bud in spring that came to bloom
I came and went - but all too soon

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Date: 11/7/2023 7:33:00 AM
Congratulations Elaine and thank you for writing poetry that will live forever.
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Date: 4/19/2018 7:58:00 AM
I like this-- it is wistful and reminds me of some of the 19C Romantic poets-- congrats on your win, Elaine!
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Elaine George
Date: 4/21/2018 5:06:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your comments.
Date: 4/18/2018 11:29:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this beautiful beautiful poem. I absolutely love it.
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Elaine George
Date: 4/21/2018 5:07:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments, Susan...much appreciated. Sincerely. Elaine.
Date: 4/18/2018 8:38:00 PM
So sadly beautiful, Elaine. I love the form and the deep metaphors. Congratulations on your well-deserved Trophy win! Fave! Hugs, Sandra
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Elaine George
Date: 4/21/2018 5:08:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments, Sandra...and for the fave...that means so much to me. Sincerely. Elaine.
Date: 4/18/2018 4:54:00 PM
I've added this straight to my faves, exceptional poetry and I've never seen a swap quatrain before, many many congrats on your very well deserved trophy win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Elaine George
Date: 4/21/2018 5:10:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments, Jan and for the fave...much appreciated. Sincerely. Elaine.
Date: 4/18/2018 10:35:00 AM
Congrats Elaine..awesome poetry!
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Elaine George
Date: 4/21/2018 5:10:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your comments, Vijay...much appreciated. Sincerely. Elaine.
Date: 4/18/2018 10:03:00 AM
Your poetry is always exceptional, dear Elaine. This is another breathtaking beauty! Lovely work, and always top notch !! Congratulations !
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Elaine George
Date: 4/21/2018 5:11:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments, Carrie...much appreciated. Sincerely. Elaine.
Date: 4/18/2018 9:02:00 AM
Congrats.wonderful work
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Elaine George
Date: 4/21/2018 5:11:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments, Sneha...much appreciated. Sincerely. Elaine.
Date: 4/18/2018 8:53:00 AM
Ilene, I've not been around PS very much lately, but I'm delighted to read this wonderful Quatrain offering from you. I can certainly see why it was chosen as the top winner. Congratulations on your beautiful lines. Your ability to swap words in the lines enhances its meaning and your talent.
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Elaine George
Date: 4/21/2018 5:12:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments, Lin...much appreciated. Sincerely. Elaine.
Date: 4/18/2018 8:21:00 AM
Wow - thank you for introducing me to this awesome form of poetry. You did it justice in a magnificent way. Your poem is a FAVE for me. Congrats on your most deserved gold medal win, Elaine.
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Elaine George
Date: 4/21/2018 5:13:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments and for the FAVE, Line...this means so much to me. Sincerely. Elaine.
Date: 4/18/2018 8:20:00 AM
- Congratulations a well deserved 1st place, Elaine :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Elaine George
Date: 4/21/2018 5:14:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by...and for your kind comments, Sunshine...much appreciated. Sincerely. Elaine.
Date: 11/23/2016 12:03:00 PM
Elaine so beautifully penned and CONGRATULATIONS on your win in the contest.
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Elaine George
Date: 11/28/2016 9:40:00 AM
Thank you, dear Constance. Elaine
Date: 11/22/2016 9:06:00 PM
Lovely! Congrats!
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Elaine George
Date: 11/28/2016 9:34:00 AM
thank you, Sushma. Elaine
Date: 7/2/2014 11:00:00 PM
Life is too brief. Just when we get close to figuring out what not to do it ends. The lucky ones are the ones that somehow figure it out decades sooner and actually act upon having that knowledge. Truly great write my friend! It was as smooth as silk!!!!!
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Elaine George
Date: 7/2/2014 11:04:00 PM
Thank you for dropping by, Robert. Lainie
Date: 4/10/2014 12:46:00 PM
I love the rhyme here. have you entered my rhyme battles before? Very interesting thoughts displayed here. I love it!!! So profound. Great write. Beautiful words and beautiful flow as always. have a wonderful week. ~Juli-Michelle
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Date: 4/2/2014 6:58:00 AM
- Elaine, this is really a beautiful poem - and I love the ice rose - Hope all is well with you. - Have a lovely day. - In Norway's finally the spring arrived !!! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/31/2014 8:04:00 PM
But like all things we will come again, perhaps not the same but surely parts of us will. So nice to see your name here again. Light & Love
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Date: 3/30/2014 10:52:00 AM
Life and the seasons. Love this one. Good to hear from you, Lanie. Love, daver
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Date: 3/27/2014 6:16:00 PM
this knocked my socks off!!! this was great! I loved it all the way through. I have to fav it. this really impressed me. I'm glad it was one of the first i read today. Don't forget to put it in the contest. any contest. It's a sure winner. john
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Date: 3/16/2014 3:32:00 AM
I am SO glad to see you posting again Elaine...I sent you a Soup Mail...
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Date: 3/11/2014 8:59:00 PM
thanks for letting me know that this contest inspired you. how wonderful to see you here again and good luck with your novel.
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Date: 3/9/2014 12:26:00 PM
So good to see you posting..you never disappoint. Congrats. BG
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Date: 3/9/2014 11:19:00 AM
I love the message in this beautiful gem, Elaine. Thanks so much for entering my contest. I so seldom get to see you. The last two stanzas are for me, flawless. congrats on your win.
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Date: 3/9/2014 9:45:00 AM
Just loved the flow and content, congratulations.
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Date: 3/9/2014 4:56:00 AM
Congratulations on the fine win. Enjoyed the rhyme perfect, elaine
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