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All That Passion Suddenly Erased

Winds were among first to notice
Fragrant air blowing fresh breeze 
Stemming from your pristine vicinity
Extolling prospects of your visit,

Announced by the birds in flight
Message circulated far and wide
Into the emerging scenic twilight
Pushing far away the opaque skies,

Cotton clouds then adorned charm
Scattered in ways of scenic art form
In orange hues peeking from blue
Amid aerial vistas painted for you,

Sprinkling rays on mosaic colors
Layers of fabric spun florid display
Anxious for you to take your step
Into this arena of majestic stage,

But all that passion suddenly erased
Prompting egress of darker motifs
When sun plunged below horizon,
Dismayed that you never showed up. 

April 12, 2018
Placed first in contest 515 by Brian Strand

Copyright © Vijay Pandit | Year Posted 2018

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Valsa George Date: 7/24/2022 6:16:00 AM After such eager anticipation , the sudden plunge into disappointment is truly unbearable ! The wonderful images used are exhilarating ! You alone can craft such a poem of passion in a language so picturesque....and most poignant! Login to Reply

Vladislav Raven Date: 11/12/2018 4:15:00 PM Hi Vijay, dropping by with my congratulations on your win with this excellent write. Have a wonderful Tuesday. Your friend always....Mike. Login to Reply

Line Gauthier Date: 11/11/2018 7:22:00 PM Lovely, Vijay. Congrats on your top win. Login to Reply

Brandy Nicole Date: 11/10/2018 8:03:00 PM Your thoughts have wings. I feel as though I could caress your words and fly. (I would, if that were possible) Even though love, beauty and magical moments linger- a touch of sadness tugs deeply at the heart, while reading this. Very emotional indeed. Congratulations Vijay, on this win. ~ Brandy Login to Reply

Oliver Furlong Date: 5/7/2018 4:06:00 PM A wonderfully well-captured atmosphere of disappointment. Very well crafted Vijay, very nice! Login to Reply

John Hamilton Date: 5/6/2018 9:13:00 AM Great write Vijay, loved your use of unique word combinations, "prompting egress of darker motifs" wonderful writing!! Login to Reply

Pandita Sietesantos Date: 5/5/2018 9:35:00 AM It is so disappointing when we look forward to the experience of a great love and it's not reciprocated! Then a day full of sunshine turns to storm clouds! What a very insightful, awesome piece this is, my friend! Excellent write as usual! Best regards. Pandita Login to Reply

Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 4/25/2018 8:15:00 PM Hello Vijay, as I was reading this poem, i felt like i was part of it. have a nice evening my friend. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/27/2018 4:28:00 PM Thank you Darlene.

Akkina Downing Date: 4/14/2018 8:12:00 PM Yeah I definitely like this a lot! Going into my faves... hugs :) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/15/2018 8:00:00 AM Happy to read your kind words..many thanks Akkina.

James Swartz Date: 4/14/2018 4:05:00 PM Wow Vijay! I'm making this a fave of mine. You put your soul into this and it is strong and brilliant. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/14/2018 4:35:00 PM Many thanks James..always appreciate your visit and kind remarks.

Kyle Kriticos Date: 4/14/2018 7:18:00 AM Epic piece here Vjay, glad I stopped by! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/14/2018 11:17:00 AM Thank you Kyle.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/13/2018 5:25:00 PM what a lovely poem of personfication, Vijay. Very well done. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/14/2018 6:08:00 AM Thank you Andrea...appreciate your supportive comments.

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 4/13/2018 1:48:00 PM - Make me feel sad ... but beautifully written, Vijay :) - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/13/2018 3:51:00 PM Thank you Anne-Lise..this is not for contest.

Probir Gupta Date: 4/13/2018 9:30:00 AM May the candles of hope keep kindling ... the crimson canvas will sure turn up ... especially in the wake of this beautiful poem ... well crafted with the words in multichrome ... Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/13/2018 10:01:00 AM Many thanks Probir--appreciate your kind words.

Janice Canerdy Date: 4/13/2018 8:39:00 AM I'm impressed with the smooth progression from beauty to disappointment--the way you connected them, Vijay! Janice Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/13/2018 10:00:00 AM Thank you Janice..always happy to read your thoughtful comments.

Winged Warrior Date: 4/13/2018 5:10:00 AM Well done my passionate friend...pitty how sometimes love can go up in a puff of smoke...stay in the light^WW^ Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/13/2018 8:25:00 AM So true--appreciate your visit and kind words, WW.

Arturo Michael Date: 4/13/2018 2:26:00 AM Nice setting...and a glorious ending...not as planned...but what can you do...Like a lovely painting...All the best Vijay... Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/13/2018 8:25:00 AM Many thanks Arturo..appreciate your kind words.

Freddie Robinson Jr. Date: 4/12/2018 5:16:00 PM Beautifully expressed dark romantic poetry, Vijay. I LOVE the dark somber tone of this poem. Great lines throughout ... But all that passion suddenly erased. Prompting egress of darker motifs. When sun plunged below horizon, dismayed that you never showed up. Marvelous poem. Love and smiles. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/13/2018 8:24:00 AM Thank you Freddie--appreciate the kind feedback.

Paul Callus Date: 4/12/2018 4:16:00 PM You have painted the beauty of Anticipation with captivating imagery, Vijay. What a pity to be let down...the last stanza is heartbreaking. Regards // paul Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/13/2018 8:23:00 AM Thank you Paul--appreciate the kind feedback.

Nette Onclaud Date: 4/12/2018 3:07:00 PM isn't it painful to be stood up or abandoned? vijay, this is a biting, wonderful melody.. huggs Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/12/2018 3:20:00 PM Thank you nette--appreciate your feedback.

Kim Rodrigues Date: 4/12/2018 9:57:00 AM Very well done, Vijay! Such glory in the expecting, only to be let down! The despair in the end. The plunging sun... Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/12/2018 10:07:00 AM Appreciate your feedback Kim..many thanks for your visit and kind words.

Mike Gentile Date: 4/12/2018 8:32:00 AM I can truly relate to your story, Vijay as the sun has plunged for me to at times, So well expressed and beautiful !!! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/12/2018 10:05:00 AM Thank you Mike--appreciate reading your kind words..thank you again for your supportive comments.

Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/12/2018 8:27:00 AM This is so sad but written to beautifully. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/12/2018 10:04:00 AM Thank you Richard.

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 4/12/2018 7:27:00 AM Anticipation, yearning, awaiting, disapointment , devastation! What a magnificent display of feelings expressed so vividly in a heavenly language dear friend, Vijay. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 4/12/2018 10:04:00 AM Always a pleasure to read your supportive comments..many thanks my friend, Demetrios.