Vijay Pandit Poet Free verse

All That Passion Suddenly Erased

Winds were among first to notice
Fragrant air blowing fresh breeze 
Stemming from your pristine vicinity
Extolling prospects of your visit,

Announced by the birds in flight
Message circulated far and wide
Into the emerging scenic twilight
Pushing far away the opaque skies,

Cotton clouds then adorned charm
Scattered in ways of scenic art form
In orange hues peeking from blue
Amid aerial vistas painted for you,

Sprinkling rays on mosaic colors
Layers of fabric spun florid display
Anxious for you to take your step
Into this arena of majestic stage,

But all that passion suddenly erased
Prompting egress of darker motifs
When sun plunged below horizon,
Dismayed that you never showed up. 

April 12, 2018
Placed first in contest 515 by Brian Strand

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Valsa George July 24, 2022 at 6:16 AM After such eager anticipation , the sudden plunge into disappointment is truly unbearable ! The wonderful images used are exhilarating ! You alone can craft such a poem of passion in a language so picturesque....and most poignant!

Vladislav Raven November 12, 2018 at 4:15 PM Hi Vijay, dropping by with my congratulations on your win with this excellent write. Have a wonderful Tuesday. Your friend always....Mike.

Line Gauthier November 11, 2018 at 7:22 PM Lovely, Vijay. Congrats on your top win.

Brandy Nicole November 10, 2018 at 8:03 PM Your thoughts have wings. I feel as though I could caress your words and fly. (I would, if that were possible) Even though love, beauty and magical moments linger- a touch of sadness tugs deeply at the heart, while reading this. Very emotional indeed. Congratulations Vijay, on this win. ~ Brandy

Oliver Furlong May 7, 2018 at 4:06 PM A wonderfully well-captured atmosphere of disappointment. Very well crafted Vijay, very nice!

John Hamilton May 6, 2018 at 9:13 AM Great write Vijay, loved your use of unique word combinations, "prompting egress of darker motifs" wonderful writing!!

Pandita Sietesantos May 5, 2018 at 9:35 AM It is so disappointing when we look forward to the experience of a great love and it's not reciprocated! Then a day full of sunshine turns to storm clouds! What a very insightful, awesome piece this is, my friend! Excellent write as usual! Best regards. Pandita

Darlene De Beaulieu April 25, 2018 at 8:15 PM Hello Vijay, as I was reading this poem, i felt like i was part of it. have a nice evening my friend. Vijay Pandit April 27, 2018 at 4:28 PM Thank you Darlene.

Akkina Downing April 14, 2018 at 8:12 PM Yeah I definitely like this a lot! Going into my faves... hugs :) Vijay Pandit April 15, 2018 at 8:00 AM Happy to read your kind words..many thanks Akkina.

James Swartz April 14, 2018 at 4:05 PM Wow Vijay! I'm making this a fave of mine. You put your soul into this and it is strong and brilliant. Vijay Pandit April 14, 2018 at 4:35 PM Many thanks James..always appreciate your visit and kind remarks.

Kyle Kriticos April 14, 2018 at 7:18 AM Epic piece here Vjay, glad I stopped by! Vijay Pandit April 14, 2018 at 11:17 AM Thank you Kyle.

Andrea Dietrich April 13, 2018 at 5:25 PM what a lovely poem of personfication, Vijay. Very well done. Vijay Pandit April 14, 2018 at 6:08 AM Thank you Andrea...appreciate your supportive comments.

Anne-Lise Andresen April 13, 2018 at 1:48 PM - Make me feel sad ... but beautifully written, Vijay :) - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Vijay Pandit April 13, 2018 at 3:51 PM Thank you Anne-Lise..this is not for contest.

Probir Gupta April 13, 2018 at 9:30 AM May the candles of hope keep kindling ... the crimson canvas will sure turn up ... especially in the wake of this beautiful poem ... well crafted with the words in multichrome ... Vijay Pandit April 13, 2018 at 10:01 AM Many thanks Probir--appreciate your kind words.

Janice Canerdy April 13, 2018 at 8:39 AM I'm impressed with the smooth progression from beauty to disappointment--the way you connected them, Vijay! Janice Vijay Pandit April 13, 2018 at 10:00 AM Thank you Janice..always happy to read your thoughtful comments.

Winged Warrior April 13, 2018 at 5:10 AM Well done my passionate friend...pitty how sometimes love can go up in a puff of smoke...stay in the light^WW^ Vijay Pandit April 13, 2018 at 8:25 AM So true--appreciate your visit and kind words, WW.

Arturo Michael April 13, 2018 at 2:26 AM Nice setting...and a glorious ending...not as planned...but what can you do...Like a lovely painting...All the best Vijay... Vijay Pandit April 13, 2018 at 8:25 AM Many thanks Arturo..appreciate your kind words.

Freddie Robinson Jr. April 12, 2018 at 5:16 PM Beautifully expressed dark romantic poetry, Vijay. I LOVE the dark somber tone of this poem. Great lines throughout ... But all that passion suddenly erased. Prompting egress of darker motifs. When sun plunged below horizon, dismayed that you never showed up. Marvelous poem. Love and smiles. Vijay Pandit April 13, 2018 at 8:24 AM Thank you Freddie--appreciate the kind feedback.

Paul Callus April 12, 2018 at 4:16 PM You have painted the beauty of Anticipation with captivating imagery, Vijay. What a pity to be let down...the last stanza is heartbreaking. Regards // paul Vijay Pandit April 13, 2018 at 8:23 AM Thank you Paul--appreciate the kind feedback.

Nette Onclaud April 12, 2018 at 3:07 PM isn't it painful to be stood up or abandoned? vijay, this is a biting, wonderful melody.. huggs Vijay Pandit April 12, 2018 at 3:20 PM Thank you nette--appreciate your feedback.

Kim Rodrigues April 12, 2018 at 9:57 AM Very well done, Vijay! Such glory in the expecting, only to be let down! The despair in the end. The plunging sun... Vijay Pandit April 12, 2018 at 10:07 AM Appreciate your feedback Kim..many thanks for your visit and kind words.

Mike Gentile April 12, 2018 at 8:32 AM I can truly relate to your story, Vijay as the sun has plunged for me to at times, So well expressed and beautiful !!! Vijay Pandit April 12, 2018 at 10:05 AM Thank you Mike--appreciate reading your kind words..thank you again for your supportive comments.

Richard Lamoureux April 12, 2018 at 8:27 AM This is so sad but written to beautifully. Vijay Pandit April 12, 2018 at 10:04 AM Thank you Richard.

Demetrios Trifiatis April 12, 2018 at 7:27 AM Anticipation, yearning, awaiting, disapointment , devastation! What a magnificent display of feelings expressed so vividly in a heavenly language dear friend, Vijay. Vijay Pandit April 12, 2018 at 10:04 AM Always a pleasure to read your supportive comments..many thanks my friend, Demetrios.