Afterlife

Hover, above me
I see myself below, still
Arms reached out, floating
Dark hooded sentries, shuffle
Entering, safe, distant light
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Mehta Avatar
August 27, 2010 at 7:42 PM
Yes, Mitch I am here with your Tanka :Afterlife" I enjoyed it with nice images
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April 3, 2010 at 9:07 PM
I am here to study on Tankas! You don't mind. 5-7-5-7-7! Wait iam confused is this almost like a Haiku. Did I get my syll.....count right. Thanks you. Nice ! A bit creepy.
Mason Avatar
March 25, 2010 at 5:33 PM
Awesome imagery here, Mitch and very "hindu-ish" ... smile ... thanks so much for your recent comment and keep up he wonderful writes!!
Freeman Avatar
March 23, 2010 at 8:07 PM
Your dog is something isn't he. Smile! Awesome job on this poem. Thanks for your comment. Agape, Moses
Sweetheart Avatar
March 23, 2010 at 4:42 PM
Well I imagine it will be this way .. fight of good versus evil till the final moment.. great write Mitch... see u on PP and I just posted a new blog tonight and hope u will comment on it..luv.. "Sweetheart"
Babcock Avatar
March 23, 2010 at 1:24 PM
This is very good Mitch. I tend to write everything in rhyme because it sound good to me. I do try a few other but always seem to like rhyme. This sounds like the near death experience they talk about. God Bless Phyl
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March 23, 2010 at 1:23 PM
Interesting perspective captured in just 5 lines. Thank you for sharing your tanka with us. Keep on writing. Karen
Henderson Avatar
March 23, 2010 at 8:05 AM
Very good Tanka, Mitch. Thank you for your kind comments on my attempts. Regards, Charles Henderson
Kendrick Avatar
March 23, 2010 at 7:38 AM
Sounds like someone who has had death experience but lived to tell about that experience...Keep the creative pen flowing..Thanks for the encouraging comments on my work..Sara
Hallett Avatar
March 23, 2010 at 7:32 AM
I like it. Good Job! Keep writing!!! -Courtney-
Culverhouse Avatar
March 23, 2010 at 6:58 AM
I have often wondered about how it happens.
Dietrich Avatar
March 23, 2010 at 6:47 AM
Gosh, Mitch, did you live this, or is this just pure imagination? The dark hooded sentries was something new added into the mix however! Very interesting little poem. Thanks so much for responding to my blog. Can't wait to see if 1 is one of your numbers! LUv,Andrea
A  Avatar
March 23, 2010 at 5:42 AM
Very vivid the thought, or imagination u expose in your words today. Have a wonderful day...Enjoyed the read.
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March 23, 2010 at 2:13 AM
Not morbid at all, Mitch. Very real. I'm sorry you had to go through that. You're such a kind person. I've had out-of-body experiences twice. Like I said, very real. Love, Carolyn
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