Afterlife

Hover, above me I see myself below, still Arms reached out, floating Dark hooded sentries, shuffle Entering, safe, distant light

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Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/27/2010 7:42:00 PM

Yes, Mitch I am here with your Tanka :Afterlife" I enjoyed it with nice images

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/3/2010 9:07:00 PM

I am here to study on Tankas! You don't mind. 5-7-5-7-7! Wait iam confused is this almost like a Haiku. Did I get my syll.....count right. Thanks you. Nice ! A bit creepy.

Sue Mason

Date: 3/25/2010 5:33:00 PM

Awesome imagery here, Mitch and very "hindu-ish" ... smile ... thanks so much for your recent comment and keep up he wonderful writes!!

John Freeman

Date: 3/23/2010 8:07:00 PM

Your dog is something isn't he. Smile! Awesome job on this poem. Thanks for your comment. Agape, Moses

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/23/2010 4:42:00 PM

Well I imagine it will be this way .. fight of good versus evil till the final moment.. great write Mitch... see u on PP and I just posted a new blog tonight and hope u will comment on it..luv.. "Sweetheart"

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 3/23/2010 1:24:00 PM

This is very good Mitch. I tend to write everything in rhyme because it sound good to me. I do try a few other but always seem to like rhyme. This sounds like the near death experience they talk about. God Bless Phyl

Date: 3/23/2010 1:23:00 PM

Interesting perspective captured in just 5 lines. Thank you for sharing your tanka with us. Keep on writing. Karen

Charles Henderson

Date: 3/23/2010 8:05:00 AM

Very good Tanka, Mitch. Thank you for your kind comments on my attempts. Regards, Charles Henderson

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/23/2010 7:38:00 AM

Sounds like someone who has had death experience but lived to tell about that experience...Keep the creative pen flowing..Thanks for the encouraging comments on my work..Sara

Courtney Hallett

Date: 3/23/2010 7:32:00 AM

I like it. Good Job! Keep writing!!! -Courtney-

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 3/23/2010 6:58:00 AM

I have often wondered about how it happens.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/23/2010 6:47:00 AM

Gosh, Mitch, did you live this, or is this just pure imagination? The dark hooded sentries was something new added into the mix however! Very interesting little poem. Thanks so much for responding to my blog. Can't wait to see if 1 is one of your numbers! LUv,Andrea

Skat A

Date: 3/23/2010 5:42:00 AM

Very vivid the thought, or imagination u expose in your words today. Have a wonderful day...Enjoyed the read.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/23/2010 2:13:00 AM

Not morbid at all, Mitch. Very real. I'm sorry you had to go through that. You're such a kind person. I've had out-of-body experiences twice. Like I said, very real. Love, Carolyn