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he downed his last beer when last call for alcohol echoed through the bar driving home, he called his wife crashed his car and lost his life. Written 10/24/15 For the Triple Prompt -Hear the Calling Poetry Contest of Casarah Nance

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Heather Ober

Date: 11/6/2015 8:15:00 AM

Oh my goodness! Very sad, but effective. You are so good at this form. To answer your question, I think you have read all of my old poems! I wish I could crank out new ones more quickly, but life tends to get in the way.

Funom Makama

Date: 10/30/2015 6:55:00 AM

This is lovely and great! I miss your work my dear poet. Refreshing... so refreshing!!

Jennifer Walker

Date: 10/28/2015 5:44:00 PM

Short powerful and tragic.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 10/28/2015 8:16:00 AM

Andie, tragic and you made me remember the song of BSB the call.. "it changed his destiny" in just 5lines you managed to put it all in a bang!..~Olive Eloisa

Daver Austin

Date: 10/27/2015 11:18:00 AM

There go I, except I was lucky and am still around. Love, daver

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/26/2015 6:46:00 PM

Reads like a winner..This happens far too much..It is one thing that could be eliminated from cause of death..Thanks for stopping by..I am to have eye surgery tomorrow then I will have to go back to the surgeon on Wednesday..I know that I will not be on the computer for two days and possibly longer just according to my recovery..Sara

Matthew Anish

Date: 10/25/2015 9:33:00 PM

What powerful - and all too common - work. I had a second poem in the New York Times! Good luck in the contest and please let me know what you think about my football ode. Vaya con dios Matthew A

Ken Carroll

Date: 10/25/2015 9:00:00 PM

Well done Andrea!

Arlene Smith

Date: 10/25/2015 8:00:00 PM

OK.. Should have saved the BAM for this one!!... Very sobering...

James Inman

Date: 10/25/2015 1:55:00 PM

Interesting take, Andrea. Sad. Very well written.

Kp Nunez

Date: 10/25/2015 10:18:00 AM

Compelling images in a short write, Andie. Delivers a powerful message. All the best! hugs!

Miraj Raha

Date: 10/25/2015 9:06:00 AM

Excellent Tanka Andrea!!And a stark lesson to those drinkers.good luck.

Rob Bettridge

Date: 10/25/2015 9:00:00 AM

Your poem would make a sage epitaph for many wasted lives

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 10/25/2015 3:34:00 AM

This is a very sad write Andrea, however it teaches a lesson. I love how you beautifully conveyed your message, good luck in the contest..............A.M.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/25/2015 2:17:00 AM

dreadful yet realistic, andie.. did something like this before... so fine!.. huggs

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/25/2015 2:08:00 AM

MADD could use this as a slogan Andrea. Usually drunk drivers end up killing innocent victims as well as, maybe themselves. A great entry for the contest!

Tim Ryerson

Date: 10/25/2015 1:16:00 AM

Oh how I can relate to THIS my friend although in my case, someone ELSE lost their life which is even worse...Perfectly structured Tanka with a great connecting pivot line...You're the best - Tim

CayCay Jennings

Date: 10/25/2015 12:38:00 AM

Such a clever writing. I wonder what comes to your first, the content or form. I've never written a Tanka, but I have read enough to know this is a winner. I truly enjoyed it ... CayCay

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/25/2015 6:16:00 PM

I believe content came first. The idea of what to do and then I chose tanka as the best most succinct way to show it!