Adam: All Our Innocence Gone

For Suzette’s Roundel contest based on Milton's 'Paradise Lost'  

As I watch you depart from my life
And your tempter is leading you on,
It appears you forget you’re my wife,
All our innocence gone.

I could try to repair what is wrong,
But the serpent is twisting the knife
As you dance to the tune of its song.

I am begging you, ‘Please end this strife,’
But the apple’s appeal is so strong,
And the sin of the world will be rife:
All our innocence gone.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Robinson Jr. Avatar
January 18, 2017 at 1:54 PM
Very powerful and poignant poem, Jack. A very pleasurable read, in spite of the subject matter. A gold star poem indeed. Much truth and honesty this poem has. Love and more love to you and yours.
Harper Avatar
May 29, 2013 at 7:07 PM
Excellent Jack, you convey the twist of the knife well, very concise, emotional work.
Oyewole Avatar
May 14, 2013 at 4:30 AM
Well done! Congrats to you on your win in the challenge.
A   Avatar
May 11, 2013 at 10:35 PM
Hi Jack,CONGRATULATIONS on your awesome win. Take care and enjoy the blessings of today and tomorrow. LUV*LINDA
Hendricks Avatar
May 11, 2013 at 5:43 PM
Lovely roundel, Jack. Congrats on your win with this gem. :-)
Gildersleeve Avatar
May 11, 2013 at 4:47 PM
Jack this is wonderful. I enjoyed your take on this tthe me. Congratulations on your win. Warm Smiles, Connie
Delaney Avatar
May 11, 2013 at 1:33 AM
Congratulation Jack: An interesting POV Enjoyed it very much. SuZ
Haick Avatar
May 5, 2013 at 7:47 PM
Reading this write from your heart, Jack, reminds me of what a good writer you are...You'll do well to put all that energy into writing, my friend...Let something good come out of all the negative. Excellent writing as always. Always, Annalise
Sivey Avatar
May 5, 2013 at 5:32 PM
I understand where this is coming from in your life my friend! I do have to say that your situation, though not good, has produced a fantastic write here! I am quite impressed with this incredible piece, Great Work!!
O'Leary Avatar
May 5, 2013 at 4:48 PM
Masterful!! Good luck in the contest Jack... Terry
Kendrick Avatar
May 5, 2013 at 4:43 PM
Great work that you have penned bringing the original sin to present day..Reads like a winner to me..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
Ivy D Avatar
May 5, 2013 at 3:18 PM
a nice poem. SandyIvy
A   Avatar
May 5, 2013 at 3:00 PM
Hello Jack, hope you are well. This is a good poem for SU's contest.. a deep cutting image.. good luck in the contest..LINDA
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