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Adam: All Our Innocence Gone

For Suzette’s Roundel contest based on Milton's 'Paradise Lost' As I watch you depart from my life And your tempter is leading you on, It appears you forget you’re my wife, All our innocence gone. I could try to repair what is wrong, But the serpent is twisting the knife As you dance to the tune of its song. I am begging you, ‘Please end this strife,’ But the apple’s appeal is so strong, And the sin of the world will be rife: All our innocence gone.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 1/18/2017 1:54:00 PM
Very powerful and poignant poem, Jack. A very pleasurable read, in spite of the subject matter. A gold star poem indeed. Much truth and honesty this poem has. Love and more love to you and yours.
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Date: 5/29/2013 7:07:00 PM
Excellent Jack, you convey the twist of the knife well, very concise, emotional work.
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Date: 5/14/2013 4:30:00 AM
Well done! Congrats to you on your win in the challenge.
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Date: 5/11/2013 10:35:00 PM
Hi Jack,CONGRATULATIONS on your awesome win. Take care and enjoy the blessings of today and tomorrow. LUV*LINDA
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Date: 5/11/2013 5:43:00 PM
Lovely roundel, Jack. Congrats on your win with this gem. :-)
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Date: 5/11/2013 4:47:00 PM
Jack this is wonderful. I enjoyed your take on this tthe me. Congratulations on your win. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 5/11/2013 1:33:00 AM
Congratulation Jack: An interesting POV Enjoyed it very much. SuZ
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Date: 5/5/2013 7:47:00 PM
Reading this write from your heart, Jack, reminds me of what a good writer you are...You'll do well to put all that energy into writing, my friend...Let something good come out of all the negative. Excellent writing as always. Always, Annalise
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Date: 5/5/2013 5:32:00 PM
I understand where this is coming from in your life my friend! I do have to say that your situation, though not good, has produced a fantastic write here! I am quite impressed with this incredible piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 5/5/2013 4:48:00 PM
Masterful!! Good luck in the contest Jack... Terry
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Date: 5/5/2013 4:43:00 PM
Great work that you have penned bringing the original sin to present day..Reads like a winner to me..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 5/5/2013 3:18:00 PM
a nice poem. SandyIvy
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Date: 5/5/2013 3:00:00 PM
Hello Jack, hope you are well. This is a good poem for SU's contest.. a deep cutting image.. good luck in the contest..LINDA
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