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This three part poem on Achilles, was begun 8/4/2018, It has taken me a wee bit of a year to finish! Main reason is trying to condense the ending into such a short version of the original. As I never set out to attempt to copy the original. This poem was never abandoned-it just took this long to get the closing in. Parts one and two were much easier to write, tho' each one took several weeks to get completed. Yet the satisfaction when completing such as this is truly immense and a treasure to a poet to know they did their best. A year to compose a single poem is not often my way of writing but this one was just that important to me ! God bless...

Achilles, Bloody Battles, Death's Black Hand As Was Fated Part Three, (the Conclusion) Dawn, bright rays fell upon Achilles and his band exiting ship, Greek sandals felt soft Trojan sands with mighty magnificent Greek pride in courageous hearts each seeking greater fame they knew would come as battle starts. Landing all around was mighty horde of Greek ships as falling Greek anchors through Trojan waters slip Achilles, full of joyous prospect of this contest's gifts gave warrior's brave words to his warriors spirits uplift. Near their shores, Trojan scouts blew horns, Greek first landing to Hector, Troy's greatest leader none withstanding rushing to meet fighters in many bloody battle fought until sun's disappearing rays flowing bloodshed did halt. As night, slowed removal of the fallen Greek dead even Achilles brave men, felt dawn's coming dread yet Olympic gods felt pride, how Greek warriors had died as Achilles and his men's glory filled their hearts with pride. For months, then years the Gods watched as great battles rage as Troy held out due to wisdom from its great sage and its massive fortified walls, warriors brave and true even cruelest of the gods gave Troy's warriors their dues. Day came that Achilles the great Prince Hector slew as had so many Greek warriors fallen too Fate, had not delivered Death's deepest goal, its blackest hand that of Achilles's sad end, greatest sorrow of his band. Achilles rose, saw dawn and knew it was his last a vision, he saw his ship sailing its black mast true to his warrior's brave heart, he felt not a grievous fear knowing his life would end, as Death its icy hold grew near! Fated, Death sent poison arrow into his heel finally greatest Greek hero did Death's hand feel was not this end, his legendary fame that sealed his name sacrifice that brought this warrior his everlasting fame? And the climax, that was to then seal Troy's sad doom as greater sacrifice must enter Death's new room for Gods decreed that thousands of Troy's citizens must die to honor this hero's death, defeat was the Gods's new cry. Achilles, Bloody Battles, Death's Black Hand As Was Fated (Part Three) Part Two-titled, 2. Achilles, The Journey To Troy Part One-titled, 1. His Heart and Soul Were Mortal Achilles, Bloody Battles, Death's Black Hand As Was Fated (Part Three) - Is the Conclusion.. Syllables Per Line: 0 12 12 14 14 0 12 12 14 14 0 12 12 14 14 0 12 12 14 14 0 12 12 14 14 0 12 12 14 14 0 12 12 14 14 0 12 12 14 14 0 12 12 14 14 Total # Syllables: 468 Total # Words: 340 edit : Links to all three parts Part One link https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/achilles_his_heart_and_soul_were_mortal_1049429 Part two link: https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/achilles_the_journey_to_troy_part_two_1051599 Part three link: https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/achilles_bloody_battles_deaths_black_hand_as_was_fated_part_three_the_conclusion_1182783

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Date: 10/14/2019 11:40:00 PM
Robert, I love this telling of one of the greatest Homeric epic poems. You described the Trojan and Greek conflict through the eyes of a gifted and dedicated poet. Maybe a poem for the warrior Beowulf and Cain's descendant Grendel could be next? -Richard
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Robert Lindley
Date: 10/15/2019 8:26:00 PM
Thank you my friend. Beowulf, I've written a poem on several years ago. Not sure if I have and if I can find it- even if I do have it. But the idea intrigues me and I am considering if I have time to start one--as it would have to be a very long poem. However , should I dare do it- I will mention that you my friend, you gave me the idea again.
Date: 9/27/2019 7:40:00 PM
Such a descriptive end, beautifully penned, "Fated, Death sent poison arrow into his heel finally greatest Greek hero did Death's hand feel was not this end, his legendary fame that sealed his name sacrifice that brought this warrior his everlasting fame?" Great reading Robert.
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Date: 10/15/2019 8:22:00 PM
Thank you my friend. I am very pleased you enjoyed this tribute to Achilles and Homer.
Date: 9/23/2019 6:32:00 PM
You are brilliant, Robert.
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Date: 9/23/2019 9:50:00 PM
Thank you my friend. I put my heart and soul into composing this piece and hope it measures up because the subject matter, Greek mythology is a passion of mine.
Date: 9/23/2019 10:22:00 AM
No one can write epic poetry as well as you do Robert. You unfolded the battle frame by frame capturing the reader along the way. Splendidly done, as always.
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Date: 9/23/2019 10:37:00 AM
Thank you my friend. My one regret in composing this is that I may have hampered my creativity by setting certain hard to maintain restrictions in planned schedule and execution of this piece. I did so dearly want to revise the entire piece to get in more verses. To mention more Grrek heroes and more about the actually fall and the terrible sacking of Troy.
Date: 9/23/2019 3:24:00 AM
This poem has been creating in spurts and has splendidly come together finally in the culmination. "Achilles rose, saw dawn and knew it was his last a vision, he saw his ship sailing its black mast true to his warrior's brave heart, he felt not a grievous fear knowing his life would end, as Death its icy hold grew near!" Beautifully done! Wow! I imagine you can sit back and relax and play chess with your son now.
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Date: 9/23/2019 10:30:00 AM
Thank you my friend. I am very pleased that you read the previous two parts and thus got the whole picture and story as was written. Always a gift to know a fine poet, a reader enjoyed one of my poems and thought enough to comment on it too. God bless...
Date: 9/22/2019 9:37:00 PM
This epic piece concludes your masterpiece Robert! It is compelling and exciting to read and so well written. I am putting this into my Faves! I love reading about Greek mythology. I can tell you are well versed in history and this is exceptional my friend! : ) xxoo I thought is amusing that my Capcha reads ARC!
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Date: 9/23/2019 10:27:00 AM
Thank you my friend. Twas blessed to have done a great deal of reading in my life and Greek mythology was always a passion of mine. I have written other much shorter poems on the subject several not presented here as of yet.
Date: 9/22/2019 5:19:00 PM
Nicely done, Robert! I’m sure you’ve read much on the subject matter.
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Date: 9/23/2019 10:25:00 AM
Thank you my friend, although a hard task it is one I am happy to have undertaken and finally finished.
Date: 9/22/2019 10:28:00 AM
Wonderful phrasing and wordology to weave an epic tale and superb piece of craftmanship - you are setting a standard here, and doing it with a deft hand and grand imagination. Keep up the great work, my friend! :o)
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Date: 9/22/2019 1:08:00 PM
Thank you my friend. I did my best to shorten this poem because modern readers generally do not want to read very long poems. Yet, I feel I should have lengthened it to include a few battle scenes. As a poet one must sometimes limit poem's length to give a poem that readers will read. I hope this still has enough to inspire others and maybe send them to reading classical Greek mythology.
Date: 9/22/2019 8:19:00 AM
Outstanding craftmanship Robert...Only second to Homer...in school I loved all of Homer's Epics, the 'Iliad and The Odyssey'...a fav from me too...you are a rare gem my friend..."live long and prosper" lol...^WW^ :o)
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Date: 9/22/2019 9:50:00 AM
Thank you my friend. The 'Iliad and The Odyssey' were my introduction to the great Greek warriors and the wonders of Greek and Roman mythology. I so enjoyed reading everything I could find on both well over 40 years ago-- Enjoy it even today as I search for more to read. As I delve further into it and so very deeply into my ancestry, bloodline and Viking lore too.
Date: 9/21/2019 10:15:00 PM
Like Brandy your words conveyed images to my mind as I read it, the cries of battle, sword clashing against sword. Images of the blood covered fallen. So well written Robert. Tom
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Date: 9/22/2019 9:39:00 AM
Thank you my friend. I am truly pleased that you have found this one to be an enjoyable read and well written. I do feel that perhaps I should have rewritten it to a great length-perhaps by a twenty percent increase to get in a few in-depth battle scenes but such was a tad bit beyond my powers during my recent ill health issues.
Date: 9/21/2019 9:45:00 PM
Oh my, and you certainly know how to create a moment through your words. You have such a talented pen, my dear friend. "Troy's citizens must die" Your images truly show this taking place. The Battle is on!! And then, it has ended. Incredible writing. I feel like I am watching this all happen. You make words come to life. ~ Brandy
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Date: 9/22/2019 9:35:00 AM
Thank you my friend. I decided that nobody could outdo Homer but one could perhaps write a short version of one of the Greek heroes that played such an illustrative part in his famous writings. Today few have time or desire to read extremely long poems , so I decided to shorten this poem from my original ambition to write it in 2400 words.
Date: 9/21/2019 4:22:00 PM
Nice...I enjoyed the read...
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Date: 9/22/2019 9:31:00 AM
Thank you my friend. Although completing this was indeed a very hard task for me, I feel that it was worth it. And hope those that read this third part may decide to search out and read parts one and two.