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Abyss

He stood at the edge of his lost dreams. Tears like waterfalls fell in streams. Looking down into the abyss. Could his life turn out worse than this? He had been told that dreams come true. Sure some did but way too few. Instead of a cloudy sky he wanted blue. He wanted seventy and only got two His crystal palace made of plexiglas He wanted first place and settled for last A teachers pet locked inside the class His life winding down unraveling fast He throws himself into the abyss Dreams to nightmares his lover's kiss He gave up too soon he lost his bliss Life does not get much worse than this Life makes no promises we know that's true Some things are not up to me or you So take the gifts that come your way To get your dreams you need to stay

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Just That Archaic Poet

Date: 10/23/2013 2:12:00 PM

Really great piece, Richard; beautiful. Enjoyed your rhymes immensely. Kudos, my friend. Haven't heard from you in a while; hope all is well :)

Monterey Sirak

Date: 10/23/2013 9:09:00 AM

Beautiful and so true. Endurance is what will win in the end.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/23/2013 9:36:00 AM

Good morning Monterey.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 10/22/2013 7:49:00 AM

Richard things are never bad remember the song the gambler there is always a ace to keep love this pen Shadow x smile

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/22/2013 7:55:00 AM

Thanks, I started off with a bad hand and ended up with four aces.

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 10/21/2013 10:45:00 PM

Very well written and it is so true. We just can't give up. for our dreams to come true - we have to do something about it. As your last stanza says - you have to stay.... Lucilla

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/22/2013 7:21:00 AM

Thanks so much Lucilla .

Richard D Seal

Date: 10/21/2013 9:07:00 PM

I've lost two good friends like this in as many years Rick, job loss, money worries, repossession, marriages breaking down, all very sad, as is your poem, though sensitively observed. Take care, Richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/22/2013 7:22:00 AM

I am so sorry to hear that Richard, this must have been hard for you to read.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/21/2013 3:52:00 PM

Life makes no promises....But life gives opportunities We can make the best of them.Not all our dreams come true and maybe its that mystery of not coming true which makes dreams so special.Life is indeed a roller coaster..Lets roll through your words..always clever and enlightening the soul.Its 11pm..Still after Noon and before midnight here..Have a lovely day Richard.God bless you and yours.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2013 5:20:00 PM

I agree, we all have opportunities, it is so sad when people give up on their dreams. 3:24 pm here in British Columbia.