Abused

What a liar, trouble maker! That’s the way she gets her kicks Makes you wonder what she’s after Plays around with dirty tricks. What a life she leads in envy She makes yours a living hell She’s a woman of destruction Aims to take you down as well. She is past it; don’t believe her For her mind is not in place Keep your distance; she is fatal Has become a hopeless case. That is what is said about her She’s the victim in this game She is living with a trauma Where she hangs her head in shame. She is helpless and in terror Of reprisal; she’s confused On the verges of depression: She’s the one who’s been abused. ----------------------------------------- Contest: Any Poem#26 ~ April 2014 Sponsor: Poet Destroyer A Placing: 3rd

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Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 6/9/2015 7:24:00 PM

Powerful and compelling write Paul, she is reflecting back what she been dealt. Hugs

Paul Callus
Date: 6/10/2015 9:16:00 AM

Glad that you stopped to read one of my earlier poems, Cecilia! I like your feedback, too. [Have just read and enjoyed your inspiring poem about what real women are:)] hugs // paul

Jake Ponce

Date: 5/12/2014 6:45:00 PM

Paul, the way I read it was like riding enormous soundwaves. I couldn't describe how I really felt afterwards but the closest thing may be riding a rollercoaster. It took me on that kind of heartpumping ride. :)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/13/2014 1:31:00 PM

Hi Jake! What can I say!! Great comments...next thing I'll be riding on a giant rollercoaster!:) txs a lot. cu around // paul

Joseph May

Date: 5/2/2014 9:07:00 PM

She takes on the abuser's character...congrats on a fine win Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 5/3/2014 8:32:00 AM

Thank you Joseph, both for stopping by and for the feedback...always appreciated. // paul

Sam Raj

Date: 5/2/2014 12:10:00 PM

Dear Paul, This truly a wonderful poem. I totally agree, women who is abused always pays a heavy price, and is treated as a mentally imbalanced person especially in my country. It's sad. but slowly things are changing, but too slow. Thanks for sharing and congratulations for the win.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/2/2014 12:40:00 PM

Many thanks Sam. You are right; women (especially, for it could also concern men) are afraid to speak out because they are made to look the guilty ones and not the victims. cu around. // paul

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/2/2014 7:32:00 AM

Enjoyed the write. Congrats on the win, Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 5/2/2014 7:40:00 AM

Thank you Dr. Yours was also a worthy one. // paul

Casarah Nance

Date: 5/2/2014 6:54:00 AM

Man, great poem, congrats on your win. You rock

Paul Callus
Date: 5/2/2014 7:43:00 AM

Hi Casarah! Thanks a lot; love your comments:) Your 1st placing was a truly merited one! /paul

Faye Gibson

Date: 5/1/2014 7:29:00 PM

Congratulations of a well deserved win.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/2/2014 7:46:00 AM

Many thanks Faye; you too have been doing quite well of late:) enjoyed your winning writes // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 5/1/2014 12:43:00 PM

CONGRatULATIONS dearie Paul..:) weeeee!! Tea for a treat and dark chocolates loool.. Regarding the poem, I've read this.. As again didn't leave any cause if I have it's obvious that am your.. Will mail to you ..:) a prose with deep compassion and understanding..the title itself provoked me and since I dealt with patients who are abused before so somehow I know.. The way you made it to a poem... Wow! There's heartbeat skip on last two stanza... The ultimate revelation.... :) God bless :)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/1/2014 1:09:00 PM

Thank you dear Olive_eloi :) I have just posted a wee note on your winning poem. Satisfaction when we both manage wins in same contest!! Glad you liked this one. Looking forward to post. bless you:) // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 5/1/2014 12:22:00 PM

Hats off to ur amazing write Paul ! First half I cud not believe on negative thots on a she, but then a real twist cud lead me to lesson behind,, congrats on such a deep winning poem !

Paul Callus
Date: 5/1/2014 1:00:00 PM

Many thanks Dr. I was hinging all this write on that twist. This is why abused women are reluctant to come forward and make a report. Pity. cu // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/1/2014 10:57:00 AM

Hello Paul, ... Congratulations! Enjoying every entry, ENTERED in my "Any Poem #26" contest. Always & Forever *LINDA"

Paul Callus
Date: 5/1/2014 11:10:00 AM

Thank you Linda! Very satisfied with my placing:) Lately you have managed to keep me very busy! cu // paul

Angie Thomas

Date: 4/5/2014 7:46:00 AM

Aww... I felt really bad after reading this. Quite a touching poem.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/5/2014 9:05:00 AM

Lovely to see you stopping by Angie. Abuse is never right; being abused and made out to be your fault is even worse. cu // paul

Debbie Duncan

Date: 3/30/2014 4:23:00 PM

Love this Paul, I've known a few people like this. Just because they're not happy they have to mess with you :) Thank you for reading my words "WALLS " ;) Hope to see you more often .

Paul Callus
Date: 3/30/2014 4:32:00 PM

Thank you for visiting and commenting. Hope to see you around more often, too. :) // paul

Linda Jackson

Date: 3/30/2014 11:47:00 AM

I like the twist in this poem. At first you have a picture of a troublemaker then it turns out she is the victim. I like the imagery. Best wishes Linda

Paul Callus
Date: 3/30/2014 12:20:00 PM

Thank you Linda; you hit the nail on the head; your feedback is much appreciated. // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 3/28/2014 11:02:00 AM

Your interest for others makes this beautiful poem a hymn of concern! Excellent writing Dear Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/28/2014 11:27:00 AM

Thank you Demi; appreciate your welcome comments, too. // paul

Sarai Virden

Date: 3/28/2014 12:11:00 AM

You are a powerful voice for the sorrows that hide in silence of a heart. A masterpiece dear friend!

Sarai Virden
Date: 3/28/2014 6:16:00 AM

Amen

Paul Callus
Date: 3/28/2014 5:06:00 AM

Thank you for your kind remarks Sarai. :) I'm afraid this problem is an endless one, but it does not mean that we give in to it; we have a voice; we use it. // paul

Skat A

Date: 3/27/2014 11:02:00 PM

wow! Powerful, she can be any of us....... Falling, and abused. . Hugs ~SKAT~

Paul Callus
Date: 3/28/2014 5:04:00 AM

Thank you lots Skat. At least we can speak for those who have no voice... // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/27/2014 8:01:00 PM

I love how you turned the tables on this one. Exceptional piece!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/28/2014 5:02:00 AM

Good morning Richard. Thank you for the very positive comments. This topic can never be neglected. cu // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 3/27/2014 5:42:00 PM

A very profound poem which I really enjoyed reading..A very moving and deep post Paul. Tnks for stopping by..Im trying to catch up where I left..

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/28/2014 9:51:00 AM

Yes .Paul!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/28/2014 4:50:00 AM

Welcome back Charm :) Glad you appreciate this poem. That's why many abused women don't dare open their mouth when abused, because of how they're looked upon. // paul

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 3/27/2014 4:29:00 PM

wow very beautifully painted in words excellent piece

Paul Callus
Date: 3/27/2014 5:20:00 PM

Thank you Liam for stopping by and for your encouraging comments. // paul