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Absence of Color

The skies are black Without the yellow sun to rise, Our hearts are black Without the red of Valentine’s, The air is black Destroy the green, the forest cries, My world is black Without the gaze of your blue eyes,

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Janice Canerdy

Date: 9/5/2017 8:37:00 AM

Very effective paralleling of literal and figurative, Mike, Janice

Heidi Sands

Date: 9/3/2017 1:46:00 PM

I can feel the longing and sadness Mike. You wrote this well with the color contrast. :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/3/2017 11:20:00 AM

Just a suggestion. Perhaps leave out the last line and let your black lines lead each verse? Enjoyed, Mike.

Mike Gentile
Date: 9/3/2017 11:38:00 AM

Yep, I like it xxoo

Mike Gentile
Date: 9/3/2017 11:35:00 AM

Thanks for the feedback, Kim, I'll try it

Jan Allison

Date: 9/3/2017 7:31:00 AM

aww Mike now I feel blue reading your sad lines:-( hugs jan xx

Mike Gentile
Date: 9/3/2017 9:03:00 AM

It's OK, it's just for a couple of hours xxoo