Carolyn Devonshire Poet Free verse

A Woman Said To the Universe (Adaptation)

A woman said to the universe:
"Sir, see me as equal!"
"I hear you," replied the universe,
"But I can't see you 
Because that tall man's head is blocking your face."


Adaption from Steven Crane's "A Man Said to the Universe"

A man said to the universe: 
"Sir I exist!" 
"However," replied the universe, 
"The fact has not created in me 
A sense of obligation."


When I was 18 Steven Crane's poem was pasted over my desk at work.  It has always been 
a source of inspiration and intrigue.

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Billy Thekidster January 22, 2010 at 10:27 PM I think there for I am (Yaaaawn!) and now I think I'm a tired man. Good night Carolyn. Great Work Again. Best Wishes Always, Bill

Robert A. Dufresne January 10, 2010 at 3:34 PM Dang! 'zis mean I gotta put on my flats again?:) It is very intriguing along with mr crane's . Thanks for your comments,Carolyn.

Michelle Richter December 14, 2009 at 3:30 AM this made me smile ;)

Geoffery Mchugh December 3, 2009 at 1:58 PM Excellent piece.

Linda Terrell November 22, 2009 at 8:39 PM Carolyn, Thanks for kind commenting on my poem "Little Minds at Christmas" I loved James Whitcom Riley's poems especially his way of projecting his version of a childs view. Times have changed since then but childrens views are somewhat the same. My poem "Santa's Little Worrier" was published this week in a local newspaper. Thanks so much Carolyn

Doris Culverhouse November 21, 2009 at 5:49 PM very intriguing, Nice poems, enjoyed reading today!

Elaine George November 20, 2009 at 12:08 PM FANTASTIC! adaptation, Carolyn. Love, Lainie

Anthony Nutter November 19, 2009 at 9:48 AM Women are created equal. A saying I'm sure everyone is familiar with. Woman was not created from mans head to be above him, or from his foot to be beneath him. but from his rib to be equal to him. Nice poem. A. W. Nutter www.freewebs.com/abcedit

Andrew Crisci November 17, 2009 at 11:52 PM Hi, Carolyn...this poem will do justice: men and women on the scale with equal balances! Women have always been considered inferior...this is machismo on the part of men. In God's presence we are all equal and your poem confirms that! Very inspiring poem and thought-provoking. It was a delightful read. God bless you and may He inspire you always. Love and hugs, Andrew.

Cecil Hickman November 16, 2009 at 10:07 PM you have Soup mail,,Blessings..Cecil,and Thank you for always reading and commenting on my words,,,Blessings..Cecil

Matthew Anish November 14, 2009 at 7:02 PM Nice take on the classic poem! Have you ever read O.Henry's poetry. He wrote a poem called "Vanity" which is quite moving. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Audrey Haick November 14, 2009 at 6:17 PM Very good Adaptation, Carolyn! Great job! Peace and love, Audrey! Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poems. Peace and love, Audrey

Daver Austin November 12, 2009 at 9:16 AM Do I detect humor? How are you old love? I hope all your social obligations are being resolved beautifully. Love, daver

Cecil Hickman November 11, 2009 at 9:53 PM definitely a great write my friend,written from an adaptation of a great style and then you placed your creativity and talent within,,, full of the wonders and expectations and reality the way it should be,,I wish you great luck in the contest,Blessings..Cecil

Jen H. November 10, 2009 at 1:07 PM This is really really good Carolyn! Great Adaption Steven Crane's work is filled with inspiration!! Thanks for the welcome comments! ~Jen~

Izzy Gumbo November 10, 2009 at 9:18 AM Carolyn, this is wonderful! Exactly too . A wonderful entry, good luck! Always a pleasure to see and read you my talented friend! Once a while ago at PS, Carolyn Devonshire's poetry came across my screen and I've been hooked on her ever since. What an inspiration and what a great friend ;)

James Peranteau November 9, 2009 at 9:34 AM This is a potent write Carolyn,......To be or not to be ?...........I'm still fantasizing on a comback for that one ! *smiles* All mine life ! Love james

Sara Lokken November 8, 2009 at 5:45 PM I love this....Stephen Crane, I know his work...I love "I once saw a man pursuing the horizon, round and round they spinned; I accosted the man. "It is futile," I said. "You can never-" "You lie!" he cried, and ran on." That is my favorite. Yes, I have found a peace, and thank you for your kind words. Love, Sara:)

Yoni Dvorkis November 8, 2009 at 5:38 PM Marvelous interpretation Carolyn. I can't comment on the nature of sexual discrimination the universe implies, even though I imagine it would blame that notion on the fear filled human ego. I would ask the universe if I exist and see what it says. I can't prove it any more then Descartes could in his philosophies book. "I think therefore I am", to which I would say "prove it Descartes", "prove it universe","prove it God", only to find none of them can, least of all me.

Marty Owens November 8, 2009 at 12:25 PM I love this poem...Made me smile....Marty

Marty Owens November 8, 2009 at 12:24 PM Hi Carolyn, Thanks for your wonderful comments...I don't mind you sharing at all. Hope they all enjoy it...Marty

Corinne Curcio November 8, 2009 at 6:47 AM Your poem gave made me chuckle. Good luck in the contest, Carolyn

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen November 8, 2009 at 5:09 AM Great one, Carolyn! It brings about much contemplation. If the Universe has no obligation to man and IF the Universe can not even see woman, where does that leave women in the universe? I'd say we are in God's hand and must seek His face to shine upon us. Then, our souls have a good chance to find safety and happiness. Love you. Dane

Pamela Griffiths November 7, 2009 at 3:35 PM Brilliant poem good luck in the contest. Pam

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