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On your tiny grave Lies a wilted scarlet rose Snow blanket covers I wish I could tuck you in How I miss my precious child One of Three Tanka Contest Sponsored by Laura Loo Checked with how many syllables 06-24-17

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Teddy Kimathi

Date: 7/8/2017 5:29:00 AM

Greetings, buddy. Congrats for your well-deserved third placement in the contest!! :-)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/8/2017 10:34:00 AM

Cheers Teddy I hope you are going to find a partner for my collab contest:-) I had such fun writing with you and Ralph I thought I'd try and get other folks having fun:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 7/1/2017 4:20:00 PM

Pleased to come back with deserved congratulations, Jan! Well done...hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2017 4:26:00 PM

Many thanks Paul I was delighted to be on the winner's list:-) hugs jan xx

Faye Gibson

Date: 7/1/2017 12:25:00 PM

Well done, Jan; standing over your child's grave, whether they were 5 or 35 is absolutely soul wrenching. Congratulations.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2017 12:29:00 PM

Thanks Faye I can't think of anything more heartbreaking than losing a child:-( hugs Jan xx

Jeremy Smith

Date: 7/1/2017 11:14:00 AM

Great win Jan :) Nice write

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2017 11:35:00 AM

Thanks so much Jeremy:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/1/2017 8:20:00 AM

Beautiful and sad all at once. Makes me think of a 5 year old that died.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/1/2017 8:26:00 AM

And congrats too! I got so into reading these lovely tankas! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2017 8:23:00 AM

It is an emotive poem Kim I'm so glad LuLoo liked it:-) hugs jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 7/1/2017 7:34:00 AM

So sadly beautiful Jan...loved this one...thank you

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2017 7:37:00 AM

Thanks you so so much LuLoo:-) I've just mailed you my thanks:-) I'm delighted you liked my sad poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/26/2017 12:19:00 PM

A very tender beautiful write Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/26/2017 12:21:00 PM

Thanks Arthur I do surprise folks with the odd serious poem:-) hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/25/2017 9:39:00 PM

A beautiful touching write Jan. The picture adds adds extra emphasis on the sadness and the beauty. : )

Jan Allison
Date: 6/26/2017 3:55:00 AM

Thanks Connie I have written few of this form. I think Luloo is going to have a tough time judging this contest I've seen some lovely poems:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 6/25/2017 4:59:00 PM

Cleverly done, Jan. A sad mother and her longing. gl in the contest. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 6/25/2017 5:03:00 PM

Thanks Paul I think Luloo has quite a challenge judging this contest:-) hugs jan xx

Janis Medders Tobechi

Date: 6/25/2017 1:05:00 PM

Very moving Jan. Good luck in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/25/2017 1:11:00 PM

Thanks Janis I still want to write another poem based on the colour 'medallion':-) hugs Jan xx

Craig Cornish

Date: 6/25/2017 10:47:00 AM

The jux here Jan is done so tenderly and peacefully--smiles and tears both

Jan Allison
Date: 6/25/2017 12:29:00 PM

Thanks so much Craig, I have only written this form a couple of times and hope LuLoo likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Pat Adams

Date: 6/24/2017 9:01:00 PM

Beautiful touching poem. It makes me want to cry. I don't do that much. Great job!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/24/2017 9:04:00 PM

aww Thanks Roger, it is a very sad poem but i have to go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs jan xx

Pashang Salehi

Date: 6/24/2017 4:46:00 PM

I felt the sadness in my bones....

Jan Allison
Date: 6/25/2017 12:30:00 PM

Yes pure fiction for me Pashang, but I am sure there are people who have suffered the loss of a baby who can relate to my sad lines:-( hugs Jan xx

Pashang Salehi
Date: 6/25/2017 9:41:00 AM

I do hope that it's fictional..... and please say yes.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/24/2017 4:59:00 PM

Thanks so much Panshag it is a very sad peom:-( hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 6/24/2017 4:09:00 PM

amazing, and beautiful, Jan, good luck in the contest.. ~*

Jan Allison
Date: 6/24/2017 4:22:00 PM

Thank you so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 6/24/2017 12:45:00 PM

Such sadness Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 6/24/2017 3:32:00 PM

Thanks Tim it is an emotive write:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands

Date: 6/24/2017 9:39:00 AM

This is beautifully written and sure does stir the emotions within. Gentle, peaceful, sad, longing. This poem has it all.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/24/2017 11:01:00 AM

Thanks Heidi it is a very sad poem:-( hugs Jan xx

James Marshall Goff

Date: 6/24/2017 9:37:00 AM

Sweet heaviness of love drapes this gentle poem, Jan....good work

Jan Allison
Date: 6/24/2017 11:01:00 AM

Thanks James:-) hugs Jan xx

Augustus Black

Date: 6/24/2017 9:31:00 AM

I appreciate this write. It's written very softly with loving hands. All the best.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/24/2017 11:02:00 AM

Thanks so much Augustus:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White

Date: 6/24/2017 8:16:00 AM

That's seriously beautiful Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 6/24/2017 8:18:00 AM

I hope Luloo likes it Darren:-) I also want to write a poem based on the colour 'medallion' as I've never heard of yellow described in this way:-) hugs Jan xx