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A War Beneath Skin

Cells held secret ballots in my bones, voting for mutiny in whispers. Cancer, that drunk architect, scribbled collapse into my blood's blueprint. They built black gardens in my lungs, where breathing became a treasonous act. Tumours whittled my ribs into broken bridges, pinned eviction notices on my veins. Every chemo drip was a gamble— waging war against a traitor that wore my own face. Hair fell like forgotten promises. This was no battle to win; only a siege to outlast.

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Date: 5/6/2025 8:26:00 AM
Congratulations on your top win Aaliyah! :)
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Aaliyah O'Neil
Date: 5/6/2025 11:59:00 AM
Thank you so much. Your kind words mean a great deal to me. I’m truly grateful for the recognition and support—it was a personal and thoroughly enjoyable writing experience.
Date: 5/3/2025 11:17:00 AM
Top notch poetry, a well deserved first prize. My congratulations.
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Aaliyah O'Neil
Date: 5/3/2025 8:20:00 PM
Thank you so much for your generous words. I’m truly honored by your praise. It means a lot to me, and I’m grateful for the recognition. Your support is deeply appreciated.
Date: 5/3/2025 10:45:00 AM
Congratulations dear poetess on your top win in Constance La France poetry contest with a very expressive and touching poem. If what you have carved out is true, I am very much aggrieved for I have experienced moments "where breathing became a treasonous act." May the blessings of divine light rest with you.
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Aaliyah O'Neil
Date: 5/3/2025 8:17:00 PM
Thank you so much for your kind words and support. This being my first win means the world to me, and I’m overjoyed to have been part of this wonderful community this past week. I’m grateful for the chance to share my work and connect with such inspiring individuals. Your message is truly touching, and I look forward to more moments of growth and creativity here.
Date: 5/3/2025 9:25:00 AM
Hi, Aaliyah :) - Congratulations on your fourteen beautiful lines in the contest :) - Have a lovely weekend :) - hugs
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Aaliyah O'Neil
Date: 5/3/2025 8:14:00 PM
Thank you so much. I truly appreciate your kind words about my poem—it means a lot to me. I'm so glad it resonated with you. Wishing you a fantastic weekend as well, filled with joy and inspiration. Sending warm hugs your way.

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