A Violent Storm

A Violent Storm


It starts with dying leaves that litter lawns
All tumbled over in remorseless wind 
Until at last, defeated, they collect
Behind the garden wall in tattered piles,

Discarded on a bleak deserted street
An empty cola can goes rattling past 
Entrapped and powerless it bowls along
Its tinny clatter masked by mounting gale.

The clouds, as dark and grey as battleships 
Amassed in fury, scud across the sky
Unleashing hail like bullets pounding earth
As scornful weather reaches boiling point

And branches, ripped asunder, turn and toss
Upon the lake that churns and boils with wrath
The hardy waterbirds, they hide in reeds
But where will tiny humming birds be safe?


As nature, wields her power, strength and might.
The storm, a deluge o’er the land has spread
To soak the fields so long deprived of rain
Endowing thirsty soil with healing wealth



                 Iambic pentameter

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 12/22/2024 11:40:00 AM
Dear Margaret, I enjoyed your rhythmic perceptive portrayal of Nature composed with gentle sprinkles of alliteration and internal rhymes and the wonderful juxtaposition of the clouds as battleships. Indeed, I wonder how the little hummies stay safe too. Great imagery! Congratulations for your success in Rob's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Margaret Foster
Date: 12/23/2024 5:09:00 AM
Many thanks for your kind words Susan
Date: 12/22/2024 5:58:00 AM
And yes, what about the hummingbirds? Thanks for participating.
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Date: 3/1/2010 6:10:00 AM
congrats on the win!! Enjoyed reading today!
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Date: 2/20/2010 6:06:00 PM
Hey forgot to say congrats. I knew it was a shoe in!!
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Date: 2/18/2010 4:49:00 AM
Much kudos to you, Margaret, for participating in the “Mission Impossible! Blank Verse Brain Tease” Contest sponsored by: Deborah Guzzi. Entering was a challenging process. But you WON too with the beautiful description of nature's fury and purpose! Congratulation! Drum Rolls!!! Yippee! I am happy for you. Lovingly, Dane Ann
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Date: 2/17/2010 4:18:00 PM
What a wonderful poem, and beautifully done in this difficult contest!! You should be bursting with pride over this gem, Margaret! Congratulations! Love, Carrie
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Date: 2/17/2010 4:09:00 PM
Congrats Margaret on your first place win in the Mission Impossible contest .. a wonderful write and a wonderful win to enjoy.. from a wonderful poetess.. luv.. Linda-Marie
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Date: 2/17/2010 4:02:00 PM
Congrats on the well deserved win. Great imagery and great poem! -Mike
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Date: 2/17/2010 3:40:00 PM
Creative use of imagery for an artistic view. Congratulations on placing first in Deborah's contest. Enjoy your wonderful honor. I wish you ongoing success. Karen
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Date: 2/17/2010 3:32:00 PM
LVery nicely done. Congratulations Joyce
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Date: 2/5/2010 12:50:00 AM
Best wishes in the contest Margaret.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments.
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Date: 2/4/2010 5:20:00 PM
great job, I am still trying to get this one done. It took me awhile to understand iambic pentameter.
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Date: 2/4/2010 12:47:00 PM
you took this storm like a real artest. very well done the discriptions are great and rhythm in time.very well done. John H Loving III
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Date: 2/4/2010 12:04:00 PM
EXCELLENT meter and who needs rhyme when one can write like this,using the marvelous song like rhythm of iambic, that's what I say!!! This is smooth as satin, Margaret, and an awesome entry. I love finding people who can write this way. LUv, andrea ps I am so happy you liked my home maker poem!
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