A Tattered Web

An absent spider 
left a tattered web to blow
in rosemary spines.
An ancient silk ruin hangs
in memory of the past,

of disappeared life,
just as the spines turn brittle
to die in summer's
heat and tell a tale of woe
from a once vibrant garden.

The drought is now past,
but the damage has been done.
No more do insects
roam among the fragrant green
nor pollinate red roses.

Long abandoned hopes
like doors falling from hinges
waft in a ghost town.
Abandoned linen now torn
drapes then lilts in silent breeze.


8/21/17
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Ashley Avatar
February 23, 2018 at 10:54 PM
Dale, your use of beautiful imagery and metaphors of abandonment and loss amaze me. What once was vibrant is now listless, what was once alive is now dead and what was once possible is now impossible. A deep, moving and compelling write. Excellent and intriguing!
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August 26, 2017 at 5:50 PM
Wonderful metaphors Gregory. The images of desertion are so vivid. One can feel the lonely desolation of everything. Good luck in the contest with what looks like a winner.
Cozart Avatar
August 26, 2017 at 6:19 PM
Thanks so much, Janis.
Adams Avatar
August 23, 2017 at 9:15 PM
Amazing, moving poem. And Tanka as well. Love it. Pat
Cozart Avatar
August 24, 2017 at 7:46 AM
Thanks so much, Pat.
Schiavina Avatar
August 23, 2017 at 9:39 AM
Well done.
Cozart Avatar
August 23, 2017 at 9:43 AM
Thanks, Frances.
Goff Avatar
August 22, 2017 at 8:21 PM
Very good poem, Dale!
Cozart Avatar
August 22, 2017 at 8:51 PM
Thanks, James.
Dietrich Avatar
August 22, 2017 at 5:10 PM
wow, deep and filled with imagery, Dale. Gorgeous poetry her contest inspired in you. I have to get to work on this one. I have about seven challenges that need my attention!!!
Cozart Avatar
August 22, 2017 at 5:17 PM
Thanks so much, Andrea. I love the challenges that contests present, but half the time I don't have anything ready!
Wood Avatar
August 22, 2017 at 12:18 PM
I have never seen Tanka linked together like this before. You have done it seamlessly. A great tale and a clear image. -- Dean
Cozart Avatar
August 22, 2017 at 12:32 PM
Thanks so much, Dean!
Fleming Avatar
August 21, 2017 at 1:31 PM
Very nicely written, Dale...most enjoyable! My best regards. :) john
Cozart Avatar
August 21, 2017 at 2:11 PM
Thanks, John.
Allison Avatar
August 21, 2017 at 1:21 PM
wow Dale I am truly in awe of the tale you wove hear it is absolutely amazing! good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx into my faves:-)
Cozart Avatar
August 21, 2017 at 2:11 PM
Thanks, Jan! You're so awesome!
Sands Avatar
August 21, 2017 at 1:03 PM
Well written poem Dale. Good luck in the contest! I hope it does well. :)
Cozart Avatar
August 21, 2017 at 1:19 PM
Thanks, Heidi.
Pandit Avatar
August 21, 2017 at 1:00 PM
A beautiful flow to this Tanka poem--lovely story as well! Good luck for the contest!!
Cozart Avatar
August 21, 2017 at 1:02 PM
Thanks, Vijay!
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