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A Tattered Web

An absent spider left a tattered web to blow in rosemary spines. An ancient silk ruin hangs in memory of the past, of disappeared life, just as the spines turn brittle to die in summer's heat and tell a tale of woe from a once vibrant garden. The drought is now past, but the damage has been done. No more do insects roam among the fragrant green nor pollinate red roses. Long abandoned hopes like doors falling from hinges waft in a ghost town. Abandoned linen now torn drapes then lilts in silent breeze. 8/21/17

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Date: 2/23/2018 10:54:00 PM
Dale, your use of beautiful imagery and metaphors of abandonment and loss amaze me. What once was vibrant is now listless, what was once alive is now dead and what was once possible is now impossible. A deep, moving and compelling write. Excellent and intriguing!
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Date: 8/26/2017 5:50:00 PM
Wonderful metaphors Gregory. The images of desertion are so vivid. One can feel the lonely desolation of everything. Good luck in the contest with what looks like a winner.
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Date: 8/26/2017 6:19:00 PM
Thanks so much, Janis.
Date: 8/23/2017 9:15:00 PM
Amazing, moving poem. And Tanka as well. Love it. Pat
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Date: 8/24/2017 7:46:00 AM
Thanks so much, Pat.
Date: 8/23/2017 9:39:00 AM
Well done.
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Date: 8/23/2017 9:43:00 AM
Thanks, Frances.
Date: 8/22/2017 8:21:00 PM
Very good poem, Dale!
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Date: 8/22/2017 8:51:00 PM
Thanks, James.
Date: 8/22/2017 5:10:00 PM
wow, deep and filled with imagery, Dale. Gorgeous poetry her contest inspired in you. I have to get to work on this one. I have about seven challenges that need my attention!!!
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Date: 8/22/2017 5:17:00 PM
Thanks so much, Andrea. I love the challenges that contests present, but half the time I don't have anything ready!
Date: 8/22/2017 12:18:00 PM
I have never seen Tanka linked together like this before. You have done it seamlessly. A great tale and a clear image. -- Dean
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Date: 8/22/2017 12:32:00 PM
Thanks so much, Dean!
Date: 8/21/2017 1:31:00 PM
Very nicely written, Dale...most enjoyable! My best regards. :) john
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Date: 8/21/2017 2:11:00 PM
Thanks, John.
Date: 8/21/2017 1:21:00 PM
wow Dale I am truly in awe of the tale you wove hear it is absolutely amazing! good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx into my faves:-)
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Date: 8/21/2017 2:11:00 PM
Thanks, Jan! You're so awesome!
Date: 8/21/2017 1:03:00 PM
Well written poem Dale. Good luck in the contest! I hope it does well. :)
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Date: 8/21/2017 1:19:00 PM
Thanks, Heidi.
Date: 8/21/2017 1:00:00 PM
A beautiful flow to this Tanka poem--lovely story as well! Good luck for the contest!!
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Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 8/21/2017 1:02:00 PM
Thanks, Vijay!

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