Andrea Dietrich Poet Tanka

A Sweet Suite

I quiver from bliss
with this prelude to my joy
sweet upon my lips. . . 
the icing that I licked from
the top of my Cinnabon.

The day of his birthday, and I tried to make
a yummy dessert that would be a surprise.
I sweetened cream cheese for the top of the cake
and kept tasting it. . . . Did not realize
it nearly had vanished in front of my eyes!

Chocolates and pastries and ice cream and pies -
They’re sweet to my taste buds but not to my thighs.


My Three forms for the Contest are Tanka/ English Quintain/ Couplet

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Phyllis Babcock August 20, 2014 at 1:09 PM I hear you those thighs keep getting bigger. Nice tanka. love phyl

Robin Davis June 4, 2014 at 9:01 PM Andrea This poem is as "sweet" as you are. And is making my tummy grumble. LOL Thank you for the wonderful comment on my 100th poem write. Hugs

Poet Destroyer A April 29, 2014 at 7:34 PM You'll never guess how old. I am in my new avatar... Take a guess... YAEH!!!

Joyce Johnson April 26, 2014 at 6:43 PM Really cute, Andrea. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

Paul Callus April 26, 2014 at 7:50 AM Most enjoyable read Andrea! the final two lines ... very tasty! congrats on a fine win. // paul

Dr.Ram Mehta April 26, 2014 at 6:36 AM Very funny but sweet, congrats , Andrea

Jack Horne April 21, 2014 at 2:55 PM lol, delicious writing

Monterey Sirak April 19, 2014 at 5:43 AM Great fun to read! The ending makes me glad I am not a sweet eater.

Connie Marcum Wong April 19, 2014 at 2:43 AM A great entry for the contest Andrea. Yummmm.

Sandra Adams April 18, 2014 at 4:16 PM witty and fun poem Andrea...as you know I haven't been around so not sure of the contest it's entered in but enjoyed reading this one! Hugs

Bl Devnath April 18, 2014 at 10:44 AM Very attractive poem enjoyed. Loved the line "the icing that I licked from the top of my Cinnabon"... Very funny indeed. Loved always, my lovely friend, bl

Keith O.J. Hunt April 18, 2014 at 10:35 AM Great, witty write Andrea!

Richard Lamoureux April 18, 2014 at 10:18 AM Ha, ha, this was so much fun. Good luck in the contest Andrea.

Daver Austin April 18, 2014 at 10:05 AM Loved this one, so universal in appeal. Love, daver

Sara Kendrick April 18, 2014 at 6:34 AM Reads like a winner to me..The sweetness expressed here is sure to win..Thanks for the visit to my page..Have a great Utah day..Sara

Eileen Manassian April 18, 2014 at 12:27 AM Oh Andrea....I have a sweet tooth as well. My daughter is here on Easter Break and I'm not allowed any of those goodies! ;) As usual...your work is a joy to read....from start to finish...a treat. Hugs

Ivor Kos April 17, 2014 at 11:01 PM Swell. Lots of yummy stuff that blokes like meself love gormandising. Superb idea to read this while watering the plants at my office.

Ilene Bauer April 17, 2014 at 4:37 PM nice trio, andrea! i absolutely love the couplet at the end!

Vincent Flannery April 17, 2014 at 2:53 PM I chuckled when I read the title. And I laughed even more as I read on. Great write Andrea and how true it is. Take care.

Joseph May April 17, 2014 at 1:19 PM lol...your sweet tooth got the best of you...best wishes in the contest...

Aiyah Torres April 17, 2014 at 10:00 AM wowow!!! ..ha ha.. sweet poem!! ..:O)) I love it... and the naughty thingy at the end.. !! Bravo!! :O))

Tim Smith April 17, 2014 at 9:59 AM You have my taste buds clamoring for sweets Andrea.

Donald Williams April 17, 2014 at 9:12 AM haha wonderful writing and I believe it happens alot at my house too LOL

Toquyen Harrell April 17, 2014 at 9:06 AM Lol, no kidding! I love this. You did a great job, Andrea!

Casarah Nance April 17, 2014 at 8:37 AM Yummy poem. Great read to go with my morning coffee ;)