A Spirit Leaves the Body Seeking Eternity

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Author's Notes: Liam McDaid and I co-wrote this free verse poem entitled: "A Spirit Leaves the Body Seeking Eternity." This poem is a departure somewhat from the more commonplace love themes and fairy tales that we've written in the past. With this particular write, we decided to venture into the world of the "Spirit" (or "Soul) and have made an attempt to look briefly at certain facets of the metaphysical dichotomy between the mortal dimension and that of eternity. We both hope that you will find this poem to be of interest!! (Gary Bateman and Liam McDaid - January 6, 2015) (Free Verse)

Categories: allegory, emotions, feelings, god, imagery, love, and spiritual.

A Spirit leaves the body while crying aloud as Cursing blind hate enters without conscience A Hell for the wicked casting names as called Tears of love weeping in sorrow and anguish Dripping red from the heart beating so dear Devouring feelings eating into emotions I laugh so To stop the weeping stirring in deep rocks below Echoing waves of turbulence and such gale force Inside one soulful cry sounds in a whispered dream Begging, desiring to move on from this mortal coil! But pray tell—must wicked negation like this be Ever so, if so, then why so?? Man-made negation, negativity should never be Allowed and the soulful cry must be heard, answered Divine intervention, angelic powers to the rescue! A Spirit leaving the body—a solemn event it is There is no place for such mortal wickedness in this Instance as the Spirit begins it transformative ascent Toward the Heavens and the power of the Almighty Shall answer in kind those mortals who bring their Perfidy to this most wondrous process that severs The mortal bonds of the Earth dimension as the Spirit moves on in its new found state and presence As Peace and Happiness envelop it soothingly and pure Preparing it for God’s most precious embrace into Eternity! Gary Bateman and Liam McDaid – A Collaborated Poem, Copyright © All Rights Reserved (January 6, 2015) (Free Verse)

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Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 1/8/2015 4:18:00 AM

Hi Gary and Liam! Very powerful pens you've written here my dearest friends. Very interested subject to really write about, the afterlife! Great subject indeed! Well done!.smiling.Your pens are solid golden as always!A 7 +++ for each of you! I wish you both the very best in 2015! Have a very lovely day!.smiling.God bless you both! :) Love and hugs! Xoxox D.

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/8/2015 1:49:00 PM

"D" My Dear, Thanks so much for your great comments as always -- and the super rating!! This one was kind of a departure from some of the other team writes we've done. Regardless, I'm glad you liked it. (Liam may comment to you separately as well.) I am wishing you all the best for the New Year!! Be sure to stay in touch and keep writing all of that wonderful poetry that you do. I always enjoy your poetry too -- immensely!! Best Always, XOXOXO Gary

M. L. Kiser

Date: 1/7/2015 4:33:00 PM

Gary, you have such insight into a soul's progression into the afterlife...A great poem.

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/7/2015 5:04:00 PM

ML, Thanks so much here for your insight here. I know that this is an item in fact that Liam and I had discussed when we were in the initial "talk stage" with this write. I'm pleased that you liked our poem here!! Best Always, Gary

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 1/7/2015 12:16:00 PM

wow gary you words just drew this with amazing golden pen really love how it grew together as one amazing pen in my eyes the leprechauns are doing a jig smiling

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/7/2015 12:37:00 PM

Liam Mate!! Thanks for commenting. I got this one released last night in the wee hours of the morning. I hope all is well with you. The Leprechauns are definitely dancing a big jig on this one!! Talk to you soon Mate!! Best Always, Gary

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 1/7/2015 10:47:00 AM

You two have done a great Job. I must say I completely enjoyed this, may our Souls never miss their steps at the altar of most high...kudos for a Job well done Gary and Liam...huggs

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/7/2015 11:50:00 AM

Hello KAYOD5, Happy New Year to you!! Liam may chose to comment separately to you later, but on behalf of both of us, thanks so much for your read of this metaphysical work. Sometimes when the both of us get together on a certain topic or theme, we're never totally sure what the end result will be -- as long as it turns out okay for the reading public. Best Always, Gary

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/7/2015 10:49:00 AM

Thanks John. I hope you found it of interest. Writes like this one tend to carry a heavy overtone with them. Best Always, Gary

John Fleming

Date: 1/7/2015 1:36:00 AM

An interesting collection of "After life" thoughts! :) john.

Gary Bateman
Date: 1/7/2015 11:42:00 AM

Thanks John. I hope you found it of interest. Writes like this one tend to carry a heavy overtone with them. Best Always, Gary