A Song of Determination

(This is an old poem of mine reposted with some modifcations )


I hammered some words
Out from the quarry of my brain
They fell around in shards;
Some like boulders, 
Some like rocks and rubble 
I picked them up one by one.
Block on block, I piled them up
Thinking I could build a ‘pleasure dome’

But,
When it was time for the workman
To marvel over the beauty and wonder
Of his dream creation  
His masonry tumbled down
Like sand castles built
By little hands on sea strands
Or dunes of quicksand sliding down

I have lost count of the times,
This has happened before.
Now that I stay resigned,
Amid a heap of debris

Is there any use feeling remorse?

Like Nero fiddling on his harp
When Rome was burning
I sit on this pile of wreck
Piping my thoughts away.

In the cusp between victory and defeat
I have charted my future action plan
Decided not to cry over spilt milk 
But to start over and continue my work
Till I can erect a ‘pleasure dome’ of words
As our famed poet Coleridge did!

Nov. 25. 2022

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Date: 12/1/2022 7:39:00 PM
Valsa so good at description, such a passion you have for writing, poetess. BOL!
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Date: 11/27/2022 2:09:00 PM
This is sculpted so well, Valsa. You have quite a knack for planning your poems. Admirable, I think. Happiness and Light, Gershon
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Date: 11/26/2022 11:27:00 AM
I too find I have to cut the words out of the writer's block of rocks, I also like the lines 'I sit on this pile of wreck Piping my thoughts away.' But persistance pays off as it did with this inspiring poem, best wishes for the contest~
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Date: 11/25/2022 6:21:00 AM
Valsa, your writing is thrilling and motivating. Finding a way to change a negative circumstance into a favorable one isn't an easy challenge. Powerful message, and best of luck with the contest.
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Date: 11/25/2022 5:56:00 AM
From bad to good. Great poem.
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Date: 11/25/2022 5:41:00 AM
Uplifting and inspiring write, Valsa. Best to you.
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Date: 11/25/2022 4:35:00 AM
Wow, Valsa, how one turns failure into positive wonderful poetry. i know, i've read so many of yours here on soup..Harry
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Date: 11/25/2022 2:53:00 AM
A wise message here Valsa, never give up trying, good luck in the contest. Tom
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