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A Slight Revision To Aesop's Tale

An arrogant hare challenged a lethargic turtle to a race. The hare ridiculed the turtle due to its lumbering pace. "The loser", declared the hare " will be destined for the pot!" The "hare"-brained turtle agreed knowing he didn't have a shot! The turtle desperately tried to figure a way not to become the dupe, And end his long and illustrious life as a repast of turtle soup! They began the race and the hopping hare surged way ahead. The ponderous turtle trailed behind with a growing sense of dread! O'er the meadows and through the piney woods they raced. The turtle could readily see that he was being outpaced! "Fiddle faddle!" wheezed the hare "I'm gonna stop and take a nap!" The turtle trundled steadily onward and quickly closed the gap! When the hare awoke the turtle had crossed the finish line! "Aha!" quoth the turtle, "it won't be me on which they dine!" The bewildered hare was stewed and made a fine rarebit stew, Making a tasty meal upon which the turtle could leisurely chew! The moral of this tale is one that is echoed from the past: "The last shall be first and the first shall be last!" Robert L. Hinshaw, CMSgt, USAF, Retired © All Rights Reserved Placed No. 1 in Poet Destroyer's "Turtle Soup" Contest - August 2010

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Date: 8/22/2010 5:44:00 AM
very well done, Bob and an excellent job with the vehicle to tell your story. ..as usual! Congratulations to you my poetically gifted friend.
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Date: 8/19/2010 9:18:00 AM
A+ Bob. Keep up the hot streak! RAY
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Date: 8/16/2010 8:39:00 PM
Congrats on the big win, Bob
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Date: 8/10/2010 9:18:00 PM
wow, super congatulations to you, Robert! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 8/9/2010 10:33:00 AM
Congrats on your well deserved win in Robert's contest, you are such a creative poet. Please keep your creative caps on and let your poetry pen keep painting your poetry pads with paints of passion. Enjoy the honor as I wish you many more. Love always, Adeleke
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Date: 8/9/2010 9:13:00 AM
Congratulations Robert on your 1st Place win in (Destroyer((Poet's contest "Turtle Soup". Love, Carol
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Date: 8/8/2010 12:41:00 PM
Bob, congrats my dear on a #1..way cool. BG
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Date: 8/8/2010 9:34:00 AM
congrats on your win with this wonderful poem
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Date: 8/8/2010 8:35:00 AM
Excellent choice PD has made in the contest, Robert!! Congratuations on this wonderful tale!! :)
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Date: 8/8/2010 6:48:00 AM
Well I am so happy to congratulate u Bob on this wonderful extraordinary write and big first place win in P.D.'s contest .. those tales never lose their punch and your rhymes never lose their entertaining us.. enjoy and happy Sunday.. with luv..
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Date: 8/8/2010 5:54:00 AM
Very clever twist to this Aesop's fable Bob :) souper enjoyed this one--eek poor hare! Totally deserving of 1st place win, super yay for you-- congrats!! -- nikko :)
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Date: 8/8/2010 5:15:00 AM
Terrific win for you Robert with this deserved Gem. Many congratulations to you, have a wonderful Sunday >> James
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Date: 8/5/2010 3:19:00 AM
Ha! This is a nice 'adjustment' to the tale: )
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Date: 8/3/2010 2:47:00 PM
Robert, what an entertaining write with the excellent moral, we have all come to revere, making a perfect ending! I am sure this will do wonderful in the contest. It was delightful to read. Aloha, Connie
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Date: 8/3/2010 11:45:00 AM
Nice going, my friend. Awesome write. Enjoyed the read. Ralphie
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Date: 8/3/2010 10:31:00 AM
Great write that ended with a "Biblical Note"..Enjoyed the reading of your words that reads like a sure winner...Good luck..Enjoyed the reading..Sara
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Date: 8/3/2010 6:41:00 AM
Oh 'fiddle faddle', now I'm pretty sure - this write of yours will be the soup de jour!! Hehe, excellent write, I think you'll have a podium finish with this one ~ Sharon :)
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Date: 8/2/2010 9:08:00 PM
YOu will have to tell me where granny's tattoo is since I can't get to it by typing in poem it says systems error. Oh, and I love this poem of yours. And you could also say: The last shall not be eaten first. . the first not eaten last. NO, it's too confusing!! LUv, Andrea
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Date: 8/2/2010 12:03:00 PM
I have to comment you Bob H., now this has a funny twist to it. I loved it and enjoyed your entry,,, have a nice day,..p.d.
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Date: 8/2/2010 11:58:00 AM
love it , good luck in the contest
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Date: 8/2/2010 11:42:00 AM
Nice spin on the age old fable Bob and enjoyed your couplet rhymes so superb... this story will never fade away.. good luck in the contest for P.D....my entry is Four Turtles for Soup... about my sons and turtles... good luck..with luv..
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